***This is not done yet, I'll continue when I have time***1
She hung her head, her long hair concealing her eyes, well as the rest of her expression...she hoped so anyway.2
"Why is it that everytime I try, it's never good enough?" she thought as a dark cloud of depression enveloped her.3
She sat in a huge, brightly lit room, which was empty apart from the chair she was tied to. Her head rocked as she was slapped forcefully by her husband, Andy, he was "punishing" her for trying to run away with their baby. She managed to stay hidden from him for a week before he found her and brought her to the room. Once he left with their baby-girl, leaver her tied to the hair, she screamed until her throat ached. No one heard her screams. There was no one to hear her, she was all alone...4
Andy was standing in front of her now, shouting, how many times hadn't he done that before? She knew exactly what he would be saying, over and over she wondered how her marriage degraded into this abuse. Where did he adoring and gentle husband disappear to?5
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please say there is more i must read more please i have watched a reals live story kind of show once and this just reminded me so much of that i think that you are a grate writer and i can't believe i have not read your stuf yet @_@ i must read more
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 4, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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really short but a good start. keep it up, I am definitely interested. Thanks for entering!
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hey this is a really great story and i loved it but i can't wait till you finish it and i can totally relate to this story i'm really enjoying the read loved it keep it up!!!!!!!! thanx for sharing this with all of us here at allpoetry really enjoyed the read
love ya
~*becca*~
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you are a great writer and this a great write
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wow, great story so far, sad
but its good, tell me when you finish it, i hope it has a happy ending
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wow great start to a great story. i love it. it hits home to me as i been that woman. well done and good luck in contest x
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hmm very good. i should say that u are very creative. i would really hope to read of your stuffs. n i only wish that the best person wins and may that b u!
Good luck!
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~~infinitus
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