suicide IV

I guess i gave myself1

what i deserved2

its my turn now3

to face the music4

of what Ive done5

I'm tempted to rip my eyes out6

as not to see7

not that i can anyways8

but i cant bear the thought9

of whats to come10

the anguish of blood and gore11

its my time to die12

my eyes bleed out13

as the dancers move14

and faster to the beat15

of my speeding heart16

just waiting for it to stop17

but it cant be controlled18

i cant die yet19

must happen to me 20

what has to her21

and so begins 22

another chapter...23

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  • ShadowX
    April 4, 2006
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    hey this was great!!! i felt and could picture what you were saying!!! i thunk that you are a great poet!!!

    language: 4, plot: 4, overall: 8, ending: 5, dialog: 3, characters: 5.

  • flyingspur
    January 6, 2006
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    loved it

    scary stuff...diffrent from mine but you kept the attention....great write...

  • cgirl0410
    January 6, 2006
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    I really like the fluid motion of this piece. It just flows beautifully. I really enjoyed reading this. It had a lulling affect to it that was just so tranquil. Great write. - cgirl0410