Suicide II

I torture myself1

straight into death2

excruciating pain3

ever so joyful4

i have my own ballroom 5

of dancers to mingle6

as my blood leaks out7

of my lifeless body8

i cant stand it anymore9

the things ive done10

that poor girl i killed11

the bitch deserved it12

so did he13

i had no conscience14

and now it hits me15

i don't know why16

i do what i do 17

but it felt so right18

on my behalf19

but now so wrong20

filled with remorse21

and a guilty conscience22

i guess its my turn23

to die this way...24

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  • angelofthecentury
    January 6, 2006
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    xoxoxox moiii..... lol thank ya jarred luv yaz

  • angelofthecentury
    January 6, 2006
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    thank yaz but there is a pert one you know lol i have also put a few more in too


  • -Jarred-
    January 5, 2006
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    agreed with above...very good Cassie


    Jarred

  • cgirl0410
    January 5, 2006
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    I really liked this piece. It was filled with a drama, that most poetry doesn't really go into. Very unique and original write. I really liked it. Great poem. - cgirl0410