My Love You Have 1
I met her on the Internet in a place for dieters' support. I believe she stole my heart the moment she sent a message to me. Terri is her name, but many called her TerrBear, so that's what I call her now. It just seems to fit. 2
She had lost her grandfather, Papoo, about a year before that, and the devastation was still with her. She had become ever closer to her grandmother and dotes on her for fear that she will lose her as well. But Grandma keeps right on, and TerrBear clings closely to her making sure that nothing happens to her. There is so much love in this young woman's heart that it's almost hard to breathe in her presence.3
TerrBear and I have shared many things this past year and a few months. She has been there for me when I needed someone to tell my deepest secrets to, and she has loved me regardless of what those secrets are. 4
The support that I get from TerrBear is such that I could never find it anywhere else. Even a husband isn't as understanding and forgiving as a best friend, which is what I consider TerrBear to be. She is, without a doubt, a beloved part of me which has become a source of strength in difficult times. 5
Many poems I have written for this beautiful part of my life. I know where she goes when she needs to be alone. She can be found standing on the back bumper of Silver, Grandpa's pickup truck, hoping to get just a little closer to him. It is then that she feels most at peace, and she can forget about those who would give her the most grief as she struggles to hold onto her sanity. With school and a slight ADD problem, it's difficult enough, but she also has other family members who would dare to see her tumble face first into self destruction. They just don't know how strong TerrBear really is. 6
The pride I carry in my heart for TerrBear is as much as I could ever wear for anyone-even my own children. I have tried to adopt her, but someone else has dibs on that one. I am happy to sit on the sidelines and watch her life play out in front of me knowing that she will someday deliver that hug to me in person. I wonder if I could let her go if she were to come to visit. I have that question in the back of my mind, and I hate to think that I would have to. To love someone so much that I've never met face to face is something I didn't think possible, but she had truly stolen my heart from me. She holds it in her hands and protects it as if it were a kitten that needed protection. 7
To you, TerrBear, I have given my most prized possession, my love. You will always have it, and I know you will always treasure it. Be gentle with it, for it will forever be yours.8
Author notes
Number 2 LOVE This is the love between friends. It is not a romantic love.
I am in the Seniors category.
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Now, TerrBear, you know this wasn't really origina. lol I do appreciate that you feel the way you do, but Tyler has been very fair in his contests so far. After all, he doesn't love me like you do yet.
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Bah humbug to Tyler :P
(In a scale 1-6.) (6 is the best)
Originality: 4.5 Hey now I say it's original
Creativity: 4 Bah, more creative than anything I've ever writen for you
Rule Compliance: 6
Spelling: 5 You spell better than I do
Punctuation: 5 Ok unless I'm in a rush and not paying attention, my punctuation is usually almost perfect. Even when I'm that obserbant, your's is always better.
Quality: 5.5 Decimal is in the wrong place. Should be 55
My Personal Opinion: 5 Bah
Character Ideas: 5 Well you wrote it about me, your lucky you didn't get a -5
Character development: 5
Background Sense: 5
Color: 5 What I'm not colorful enough?
Ideas: 6
Organization: 5 You're way more organized than I am.
Supporting Details: 5
Voice: 6
Passion: 6
Total: 83
Average: 5.19
Rank: 7 Should be higher. Grrrr.
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Tyler, Dear, whatever did I misspell?
Thank you for letting me know where I stand. You have given me a good score, and I have no complaints--other than "what did I misspell?" 
Hugs, Patricia
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TITLE: My Love You Have
AUTHOR: pattyann4500
CATEGORY GROUP: 2
AGE GROUP: senior
(In a scale 1-6.) (6 is the best)
Originality: 4.5
Creativity: 4
Rule Compliance: 6
Spelling: 5
Punctuation: 5
Quality: 5.5
My Personal Opinion: 5
Character Ideas: 5
Character development: 5
Background Sense: 5
Color: 5
Ideas: 6
Organization: 5
Supporting Details: 5
Voice: 6
Passion: 6
Total: 83
Average: 5.19
Rank: 7
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Thank you so much, Malabu. Your comment is lovely and your poem is beautiful. I so appreciate that this touched you so much that you chose to write your own poem from it. Hugs, Patricia
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Awe.... What a heart wrenching story.....told from a tender heart and in moments of compassion.....with love and kindness.
I see the beauty of this relationship......touching my sensitive heart and mind.....feel its beauty and all its wishful desires......I would hope someday the magic felt will be the magic shared together one day.....here is something that came to me after your read.....hope you like it.....Tiss, is beautifully expressed and written....
TO touch a heart so far away
compassion filled while hearts now sway
You fill me with a warmth so fine
never let it fade from time
one day soon we'll touch and hold
completely sharing love unfold
bring me all your tears and shame
I'll hold you close relieve your pain
Someday when the wait is done
we'll get together and share new fun
Huggs
Malabu
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Aww, Tyler, that you so much. Your comment was wonderfully sweet, and I do appreciate it. Terrbear is the most lovely young lady I believe I've ever met, and it just seem that it's easier for me to write about real life. Good luck with your judging.
Patricia
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PASSION
This was a great story, it reminded me of Mistic Moonlite (aka Linda) and I. We get along like best friends, even though I am much younger than she is. I never met her, but I could say anything, and she wouldn't use it against.
Not only was this story heartwarming, but it had a lot of rich meaning. Not only was this full of passion and voice, but I compared with this story.
This seemed more realistic of a story and I think that this contest had a lot of imagination, but there were a couple of people that shared real life experiences that touch us inside.
Imagination is awesome, but I think I am liking yours and Malabu's story the best in the contest. I also liked ask261's story, that was good. Anyway, lots of good contest enteries, and this one is the best so far out of the 14 stories I read.
Keep up the good work and good luck in my contest. You will do just fine. Your story kicked butt.
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Thank you, Linda. I fully understand. Hugs, Patricia
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Thank you so much, Andy. I guess I do have a soft spot for people. But TerrBear just grabbed mine right out of my chest! Hugs, Patricia
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I love her to, but she won't marry me.
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Patricia, very nice indeed, Tyler I must say tugs at our heart, I was going to do a story on him, but not for this lol
I truly know how you feel.. good luck in the contest..Linda -
I know how you feel, Tyler is the tug of my heart, and more so is always making me smile,am so happy to see this here, I see your heart is as big as all get out when it comes to people,..
don't ever let that change..best wishes in the contest
..ANDY
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I just noticed your dimples...and slight ADD. Does that mean you do really pay attention when I am chatting with you for more that a split-second???
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Man. I swear I'm gonna have to gain that 100 lbs back so there'd be more of me to go around for everyone. You're right Martha, but she owns me outright now, especially my heart and dimples.
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Well, you know how I hate to share. Unfortunately, you're free and over 21, so I don't have much say, do I.
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LOL. I thought you were saving that for Jim and Dawne? You're going to have to fight with gramma, Jess, and Gabe over that one. LOL I swear sometimes, it would of been easier if I was still big. More of me to go around.
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Thanks, Martha. I didn't know you had a sister. I guess that makes you every bit as special as TerrBear. Having an autistic sister can't be easy. I appreciate your very sweet comment. Love, Mom
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Aww, TerrBear, you know how much you mean to me. My heart is like a puppy dog when it comes to you. And when you come to visit, I may not be able to let you leave. I think Joe had duct tape.
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I LOVE YOU SO MUCH!!!
Oh hun. You've really done it this time. You really got me misty eyed here.
Geez, where do I start??? You are truly the most amazing person I have ever met. I absolutly assure you that I will always treasure it, as I love you just as much if not more (we'll never end that will we, who loves who more lol).
You do know you're my co-mommy right? Calling you Aunt Patricia is just out of habit. It's going to be hard for me too when I come visit, when it comes time to leave. Can your heart be a puppy dog? Despite the dog mauling incident, I've had more issues with cats. LOL
Slight ADD is an understatement though.
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"she has lost her grandfather" This should be "had" if you are continuing in the past tense and it just makes more sense Boy, I wish I could have written something as special as this because terr bear steals everyone's heart, even mine! Plus, we both have autistic sisters. I know she will be so proud of this one. So even if it does not win the trophy, I'll bet it has won a very special place in her heart!!!
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