Suicide Games

“Nina! Nina! Come down right now!” Marie whispered1

“Lighten up Marie, it’s just a little fun.” Nina said laughing.2

“No! Nina get down right now, you’re going to get hurt and get us in trouble.”3

“Gosh,” Nina said jumping down from the “Tree, no need to be such a worry wort, I was only playing”4

“Well, I just don’t want you to get hurt, ok? You just don’t know how to take care of yourself, look at you your so reckless.” Marie said walking towards the house.5

“Well, I’m still alive aren’t I?”6

“You won’t be for much longer,” Marie snapped angrily “If you don’t stop what you’re doing you’re going to kill yourself!”7

“That would be perfect for you wouldn’t it?” Nina said smiling “You won’t have to worry about me anymore.”8

“I didn’t mean it like that” Marie said turning around “You know I didn’t, you’re my best friend why would I want dead?”9

“I know,” Nina said quietly “I know.”10

“I just want you to take responsibility for yourself, ok? We have to behave while were here and I don’t want to get kicked out and I don’t want you to hurt yourself anymore.”11

The two girls were spending there time in a camp together helping little kids for the summer. It had been Marie’s idea and Nina had argued and fought against it, but in the end she decided she’d rather spend summer with her best friend even if she had to look after a bunch of bratty kids. 12

“Ok, I’ll try I promise.”13

“Ok see you later.” Marie said walking off to her cabin.14

Nina however took a detour. She’d be damned if she had to spend anymore time at this camp with all these annoying children. What was the point in it anyway? This was her summer and she certainly wasn’t enjoying it. She stalked into the bushes with her anger, this was a was a waste of her time. She sat down next to the tree and sat deep in her thoughts.15

This was Marie’s fault she though angrily, or more her thought for not having the courage to spend summer without Marie but being able to enjoy her summer. She punch the tree angrily. Her knuckles turned and she swore out aloud. 16

She looked up at the tree and decided to climb it, after all she was Nina the risk taker wasn’t she?17

She climbed the tree until she got to the top, she could see the camp site from there, she spat on the ground angrily. She was sick of this she was getting out. She jumped down from the tree, big mistake. She was too high up and as she tried to land on her feet she twisted her ankle and landed face down on the floor.18

“Fuck,” she said to her self and tried to get up. “Shit, shit, shit. How the hell am I going to get back to camp with this?” she muttered to herself.19

She propped herself up against the tree, her arms and ribcage were badly bruised but she had to get back to camp.20

She got up steadily and slowly and limped her way back to camp.21

“Oh my gosh Nina.” Marie said as soon as she saw her “What have you done to yourself?”22

“Nothing just piss off ok?” she replied bitterly she wasn’t in the mood for Marie’s whining. “I fell and I’m fine now.”23

“No you’re not let me help you.” She said reaching out a hand .24

“I said piss off.” Nina said slapping her hand away. 25

“Ok, I was just trying to help.” Marie said with sadness in her voice.26

Nina recognized the pain in her voice and looked at her.27

“I’m sorry, I just need to be alone.” She said and walked over to her room.28

“There you go,” the nurse said happily “All bandaged up and well!”29

“Thanks,” Nina said solemnly and left.30

She headed over towards the lake and saw Marie standing there talking to a guy. She took in her appearance, she was wearing a tennis outfit and her long blonde hair was tied back in a pony tail with a hat on top. Perfect and she always got her way she thought bitterly.31

“Hey Nina,” Marie said spotting her “Did you get fixed up by the nurse?”32

“Yeah.” she said sitting on the way dangling her legs over the lake.33

“That’s good, “ she said putting her arm around her “I’m sorry about earlier I just get worried about you and your games.”34

“You don’t have to worry it’s just a little bit of fun”35

“Your games aren’t fun, they’re suicide games Nina and you really need to stop before you kill yourself.  Were you doing it again when you hurt your ankle?”36

“No actually I fell by accident, I didn’t throw myself down ok?”37

“Ok but you have to understand where I’m coming from ok? When you and Lise get together you drive each other crazy, remember the cutting to see who would give up first? All the endless tripping up each other in the most dangerous places? It can’t go on like this Nina, you have to stop sooner all later you’ll kill yourself.” Marie pleaded.38

“I do, but you don’t understand Marie.”39

“Try me then, tell me.”40

“And you’d really understand Marie? After all your like is so perfect you wouldn’t even think in your precious mind that anything like this could happen” Nina spat.41

“Then you really don’t know me at all.” Marie said angrily.42

Nina stood up on the wall “Not getting angry are we now Marie? Wouldn’t want your boyfriend to see you lose control now would we?”43

“What’s all this about Nina? What’s wrong with you?” she said getting off the wall.44

“Nothing, nothing at all.” She said dancing on the wall. “Look at me Marie, I’m going to hurt myself, oh my gosh! Save me.” Her voice thick with sarcasm.45

“If you don't stop what you're doing you're going to kill yourself!”46

Nina span around “Look at me Marie, I’m fine” she said as she spun once again and lost her control she screamed and felt straight into the lake.47

“Oh my gosh,” Marie screamed “Someone help her she can swim!”48

“Nina! Nina are you alright?” Marie asking with concern in her voice “Please say you’re alright.”49

Nina coughed as she spluttered out more water. The life guard was standing over her. 50

“You ok?” she asked.51

Nina managed to nod her head.52

“Oh Nina,” Marie said rushing to her side “Promise you’ll never do this again, please. You nearly died there. You know that you can’t swim. Promise me Nina” Marie said sobbing quietly.53

“I promise Marie,” Nina said softly “I promise.”54

Author notes

I chose #3. This is what came into my idea when I thought of that so here's my entry. My first piece of writing in 2006!

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  • Prodigious.Mirth gold member
    October 4, 2007

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    Oh you know to tell the truth i think suicde is tragic but i play this gam all the time.. i think this peice was heart wrenching and suberbly portraid

    btw i cant spell xox blair


  • EMOtionalDARKness17
    March 18, 2007

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    This is good. Really good i could picture the whole thing in my head i love it. It felt so true and realy. (hopefully its not) Thats just horrible, To try so many times to commite suicide and you never succed. I tried but it didn't happen the way that i wanted it to go. But really nice story and i hope that this isn't true. But if it is Sorry.

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.

  • Lunar Rose
    December 3, 2006
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    It's good, it has a lesson and it's easy to read. There were some typos in there that changed the meaning of the sentences and I'd be careful of skipping parts because it gets confusing.
    You did a really great job, mostly.


  • VampireShadow
    December 3, 2006

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    hmmm...this really wasn't bad, and it had a good moral to it. There were some grammatical and spelling errore, and the characters were a bit flat, but other than that this was great. I liked when Nina was in the second tree and decided she was going to leave camp, then hurt herself and realized she had no where else to go EXCEPT camp and so ultimately had to give in.

    Awesome write, keep it up!

    <333 Jess


  • Poisoned Angel
    December 3, 2006

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    Great.

    Wow, other than the minor grammer errors this was great. A good idea, it kept the reader interested. Well done. Keep it up!
    Rae.

  • xX Dear Diary Xx
    December 3, 2006

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    nice work, there were a few small grammar issues that made it a bit difficult to read but other then that i thougth you did a great job.

    Diary

  • veritas
    May 25, 2006
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    Splendid

    I liked this a lot. I especially liked how the two girls simply couldn't fathom each other-they both have their problems, but neither can really understand the other.

    beginning: 4, language: 4, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 4, characters: 4.


  • Keep-Holding-On
    May 13, 2006
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    This is awesome!!! I love it!! Great write.

    ~Alyssa~


  • petrichor
    March 20, 2006
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    Thank you!!! Yeah people should comment more. HEHE.

  • pink-fire
    March 20, 2006
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    Woooooooow this story is totally amazing. You took a really different idea here. I can't belive so many people have viewed this but never commented. This is so amazing. Just really blew me away. It was really intense too.

  • Jinxgirl
    January 4, 2006
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    nice lol. This is a different take on that sentence, I liked that it wasn't about cutting, which I predict I will get a lot of lol. This was very good, sadly there are a lot of kids like Nina who are going to hurt themselves with their games.

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