so now we lay you down to die1
such a thought would never come2
but only in your mind this day3
we don't know what has happened4
for all we know is you were gone5
at least you didn't make it6
to the light somewhere down the line7
they kept you here 8
for every ones sake9
a machete my god what were you thinking10
that's no way to slit your wrists11
and what about us who care12
was there any thought in there13
200 miles of space and distance14
lie between you and me15
but i still care about you 16
i wish you knew we all do 17
i don't know who did it but i promise you this18
whoever made you do this19
who hath pushed you this far20
they are gonna pay with their life so dear21
because see i know something they don't22
and i thought i should tell you being my friend23
loved ones are on the way 24
to make sure they dont see another day25
so take my word and hold on tight26
please don't let your life go to waste 27
19 stitches and a blood transfusion don't mean shit28
compared to this here and now29
a note you left found in a box30
and you so earlier found in a tub31
listen to the words i say 32
you've got a whole life ahead of you 33
please keep it that way...34
Author notes
ok now please dont critique this one to hard its about one of my friends who just yesterday tried to kill himself for a girl he loved and still does he is 19 years old and i dont want him to waste his life by taking it everything that you see here is true not one letter of it is false i got a call from his best friend who is like a brother saying that they could not find him and when they did he had his wrists slit its very complicated to figure out why but he had got a phone call earlier that day someone said something wrong and all he left was this a poem of death and a letter apologizing to his ex fiance for all that had happened letting her know he'd be waiting on the other side with her recently passed dog stitch matt i just want you to know if you ever read this that we love you and taking your life isnt the ways to go sweetheart we need you here with us 
and although it may not seem like a romance story if you think about it it is because he has doen all this for a girl and he just left today after visiting us for a coupe days and im happy to say he is better and i dont think hes gonna try it again
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this was a very good and strong write i hope things are going better for him..
~Turtle -
Very frightening when a friend tries such a thing. I hope that he is doing better. Very emotional and strong write. Best wishes to you.
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Wow that was very deep and upsetting. I feel for your friend, he seems to have a very difficult life. My heart goes out to him. Very well written poem btw.
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Chilling.
Grim, grieving, and just a tad gruesome... Usually, I measure the artistic value of a poem by the magnitude of emotions and sensations it invokes, and thus, I have to appreciate this one.
I would, however, like to encourage you to try and employ some capitalisation and interpunction in your writing, as a poem this long tends to be a bit hard to read without clearly defined sentence structure. -
This is very nice writing. I am sorry your friend felt like taking his life was the answer.But I pray he will be okay and
realize there is nothing that is worth giving your life for.
Loretta -
this is a nice poem
well written, very nice!
but i thought it was spelled solemn? lol. maybe im wrong, havent slept in 2 days. so i think im gonna go do that now,
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This is just too deep to even think about - such tagic circumstances you have written about here - came out in a jumble - just couldn't get it out fast enough. Thanks for sharing. Hope all works out for the best.
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take it as you may but this is for my dear friend whom we all love
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