With a tiny grey finger I traced the oblong curves of my nose, observing 1
shadows as they danced across my skin. Shades upon shades of shifting 2
greys, waltzing in a questionable hue somewhere between the absolute of 3
black and the emptiness of white- vibrating- yes vibrating- with their 4
dull wishes, their sunken secrets.5
My pair of pupils met precise duplicates as they glanced upwards into 6
the glass. Yet no differences could be discovered in the depths of 7
reflection, only the continuous universe of rivals and their children. 8
The dirty, saturated darkness clashing with pure, empty blankness, as it 9
had been since the beginnings of Time.10
My mother beckoned me away from the mirror, communicating as all people 11
did, through gestures…expressions…nods…12
I should go out and play with the other children, just as every child 13
does. 14
Black shadows crept around her feet, her clothing, her hair, her eyes, 15
as splashes of white tinted the edges of her skin with only cloudy in-16
between. Her empty pupils dug into me the deepest, commanding my actions 17
with their fearful lack of brightness. No matter what number of greys 18
existed in this two-tone universe, every eye was cold and dark with the 19
hidden secret of resignation. 20
This way was always so…21
My tiny feet slid into perfectly formed slippers, prim and proper for a 22
young girl; a perfect blend of two absolutes. Without another commanding 23
glance from my mother, I opened the massive barrier between my small 24
space in this world and the many people beyond. Every corner of the 25
outside echoed the in, painted in haunting mixtures of dark and light- 26
and the consummation of their unholy marriage. 27
Silence rode the air, dull and blank and lifeless. Clouds rolled onward, 28
allowing Time to walk right by, carrying an empty bag of gifts for its 29
inhabitants. I reached out with a timid hand, stroking the lead-colored 30
bricks at the meeting of two of my house’s corners. Flat nothing was all 31
that the adventure yielded. I slid my fingers down the wall until they 32
found the ebony fence that met the bricks and hoped- hoped for something.33
But nothing, oh passionless nothing!34
A whirl of colorless activity captured my empty eye and pulled it about. 35
I was confronted with a decent-sized gaggle of other children, of an age 36
with me. They were doing as every child does, carefully speaking in that 37
way without sound, careless of the dull, unreceptive aura that hovered 38
above them all. Such a group of friendly peers, yet it consisted of 39
entirely isolated individuals present only because they needed to do as 40
children do. 41
I became mesmerized by a solitary girl, playing a game with a thin, 42
white rope. With each little jump her colorless pigtails were suspended 43
in the air for just a breath before plummeting downwards once again, 44
only to have the same vicious movements repeated. Each cycle was 45
completed in utter silence; the jumper’s face remained frozen in a 46
constant dance of shadows and grey. She was not jovial, nor excited, nor 47
frustrated, nor sorrowful, only a hollow specter captured in a prison of 48
grey. 49
A collection of other children were playing hopscotch with one another, 50
seemingly in harmony, yet without any acknowledgement of each other. 51
Soundlessly the stone was pushed through stale air, colliding 52
unceremoniously with the cold pavement. A player would hop between ivory 53
lines etched into black ground, not even bothering to watch their own 54
feet as they moved between squares. Not one child missed a square, nor 55
did they stumble. Each innocent moved as steady cogs of a well-oiled 56
machine.57
The entire scene was a carnival of gilded joy, existing only because it 58
was what children did. 59
At regular intervals a vehicle would roll by, not even meriting a quick 60
glance from the children at their play. Soberly the vehicles would move, 61
following an unwavering line draw in invisibility. Each moving box grew 62
its own clusters of leaden shadows, holding them proudly aloft as they 63
passed by. No driver bothered with the presence of either the children 64
or me, for each being was its own individual sphere, and to reach across 65
the barrier was bothersome. 66
I turned away, clutching my forbidden treasure closely against my chest, 67
certain to conceal its existence from Authority. My legs guided me, 68
moving me silently down the colorless sidewalk striped with bands of 69
white. My mind pulsed, sending waves of nervous excitement throughout my 70
veins. Anticipation, oh sweet anticipation rang in me, intensifying with 71
each step, each touch of the item cradled in my arms. 72
The basement was pure ebony darkness save for a cascade of white light, 73
allowing me the luxury of sight. I sat in the illumination, carefully 74
caressing the fruit of my curiosity. The cover was a shade of nearly 75
saturated color, yet the bright title burned itself into the air, 76
leaving echoes of haunted words behind. I traced the letters with my 77
thumb, slowly, carefully setting each little line into my memories. I 78
would know every sentence of this book, each word, each letter! It was 79
to become my battle cry in a land of black and white.80
Anthem, the cover decreed, by Ayn Rand. 81
Without the encumberment of sound I opened the prohibited tome of 82
knowledge. Black pigmentation was set into white pages, tiny pieces of a 83
void leading to another world. Cautiously I placed my forefinger upon 84
the words, drinking them in with every piece of my senses to be certain 85
that they were real- that this was not a passing daydream. I traced each 86
letter with care, absorbing every sentence into the corner of my 87
memories. 88
It is a sin to write this.89
It is a sin to read this.90
It is a sin to think words no others think and to put them down upon a 91
paper no others are to see.92
It is a sin to hide each word in my memory and use them as fuel for my 93
soul.94
It is a sin to have something to fill up the emptiness within; a sin to 95
fall into the dangerous trap of human passions.96
It is a sin to want more, to seek more, to gain a greater amount of 97
knowledge.98
It is a sin to feel; a sin to see beyond dulls greys and the eternally 99
present war between light and dark.100
The list of sins continued to grow in another area of my mind as I read 101
on. ‘Twas a sickening occurrence, this documentation of all things evil- 102
of all things that I desire; I had committed nearly every wicked deed 103
thus far recorded- or at least considered it. My memorization of this 104
novel was to be my grandest defiance of all Time; I relished such a 105
thought. Perhaps I could vary the rhythm; the constant pulse that kept 106
all of humanity within the same step…107
Yet I was only me, a girl of the grey barely beyond the pinnacle of her 108
thirteenth year…and a petty thief of her Father’s books.109
The deed committed, I retraced my path. Every particle of the sidewalk 110
was precisely the same as it had been previously. Each grey shadow 111
remained the same shade, each tiny pocket of occasional black or white 112
was still tucked carefully into its preordained corner. 113
Vehicles rolled by within the same intervals as before. The drivers 114
persisted in emptiness, facing forward and seeing nothing through hollow 115
pupils. The tableau of playing children could have been frozen in time 116
from before. Not one had left nor joined; the game of hopscotch still 117
had neither joviality nor community; the girl’s jumping rope continued 118
to whirl, no mirth on her face. 119
I watched, clutching the bundle of words closely. 120
Yet my observation was broken. A spark timidly crawled upwards, touching 121
my lower sight. It must have climbed up the storm drain, cut into the 122
curb and drenched in ebony. Yet this phantom beauty must have been born 123
of some unexplainable miracle hardly associated with the vast darkness 124
that lurked in the lower world. 125
It was neither black nor white nor grey. 126
It was something else, a powerful apparition birthed from a plane of 127
thought far beyond that of this meager existence, the unknown color of a 128
magical dream world peaking cautiously into a land of constant nothing. 129
No single word could be placed upon such a divine article of 130
individuality that had managed to break the constant tempo of the 131
rational universe.132
The color of other worlds rode on the tiny back of a beetle. Every scale 133
of the insect was dressed in the shifting hues of this mysterious, 134
heavenly glow of passionate serenity! My eyes eased themselves, taking 135
in each bit of the animal and storing it in the forbidden depths of my 136
thoughts. A new emotion welled upwards from nowhere, a response to this 137
vivid little bug as it slowly pattered up the street. Placidity shined 138
through my empty pupils, filling them with a miraculous wonder. 139
I was mesmerized by this curiosity, thoughts pounding at the edges of my 140
brain, demanding to know what title I could place upon such immeasurable 141
splendor. But was such a gift possible? How could this grand vibration 142
of human emotion be given a name? For the force that danced through my 143
veins could hardly be contained by a singular word…144
The pools of questioning wonder within my eye sockets latched onto the 145
beetle. I willed myself to reach out and scoop the bug into my palms- 146
just to certain that it was not a ghost of the mind…147
Then the beat of the grey returned, pulsing as consistently as before. A 148
vehicle soundlessly rolled down the street, flashing its dull 149
nothingness almost triumphantly as it moved closer. My body remained 150
rooted in the same position, still poised to marvel at the glorious 151
glitch set before me. 152
The destroyer continued along, grateful to appease the beat of the 153
world, regardless of what beauty it may crush along the journey. The 154
leaden violence came, soundless and ghostly; the beetle that carried the 155
world’s salvation waited, vibrant with exotic waves of color. 156
Color was crushed; a miracle was broken. 157
The vehicle’s driver had not even bothered to twitch the muscles of his 158
face in response. He rolled onward, being only another working rhythm in 159
the massive machine of grey and black and white. The loathsome beast 160
disappeared down the road, leaving me with destruction.161
A smear of not-quite-grey was all that remained of the sweet treasure 162
that had risen from the depths and attempted to conquer the achromic 163
world with its vivacious brilliance. Spirit oozed out of my pupils and 164
found its death on cold pavement. My face was placed back into the 165
hollow form that it had begun as with only the tiny specter of memory 166
hidden behind empty pupils. 167
That was when I discovered the pig-tailed girl’s eyes with my own. Her 168
jumping rope hung limply from her hands; her empty pupils pierced my 169
near-isolation. She was staring at the novel still seated upon my lap, 170
for it had become visual during my interlude with the beetle. 171
I hastily wrapped my arms back around the tome, whirling about and 172
running. 173
She knew that such things were forbidden to the many, and it was 174
certainly not what children do. Her black pupils followed me, burning 175
through my heart. She was a good little tool, a sweet drone of the black 176
and white; always abiding to the way of things.177
I didn’t have the luxury of hoping that Authority would not discover my 178
betrayal. The little child at her game had happily reported my actions; 179
perhaps even aided in the death of my angelic beetle. 180
I slammed the ebony door behind me, not hearing a sound as it closed. 181
Mother discovered me first, boring into me with her empty pupils. Yet a 182
timid glow rested beneath them, carefully shielded from any who were not 183
familiar with her eyes. She scolded me without words, attention resting 184
upon the novel in my arms.185
Where did you get that?186
It was hidden…187
Do you know what would happen if…188
She ripped the tome away from me, burning seas of wrath erupted from 189
behind her hooded eyes...we shared glances for barely the span of a 190
heartbeat…she turned to scurry out of the room, clutching the book to 191
her bosom; cradling the anthem close to her heart.192
Authority caught up with us. 193
I was in my room when the occurrence took place.194
I watched the empty interactions betwixt my mother, father, and 195
Authority through a thin crack in the door…196
Authority was a darker black than any I had ever witnessed. It was a 197
void of hollow nothing sucking in every pebble of white and warping it 198
into black or grey. Every piece of what the anthem had given me was 199
being tugged at by Authority’s emptiness. The darkness swallowed me, 200
ripping away every warm piece of my soul and replacing it with ice. 201
Authority knew of my presence. It reveled with sinister silence: 202
Others have been broken before; now it is your turn… 203
Fear surged through my bones and I whirled about, breaking eye contact 204
with the thing of death. I sat, frozen. If only the door had the power 205
to keep me concealed…206
All coherent thought broke off and disintegrated, becoming only tiny 207
wisps floating gracefully around my head. I didn’t bother to reach out 208
for any of them.209
It was as if joy itself was staring me directly in the eye. Joy was 210
skeptical, almost scrutinizing…what reason have you to be so sorrowful? 211
Why do you live as you do, in a colorless cage? 212
Its eyes glowed as tiny pools of rest amidst an ocean of busy, vibrating 213
feathers. The little finch groomed its coat of colorful feathers, making 214
certain that no stray drip of grey would dare to stain it. I crawled 215
towards the icon of hope, carving every piece of its appearance into my 216
thoughts right to the beetle. It rested in the grey cradle of a leafless 217
tree. Achromic nothingness pressed upon it from all sides and 218
dimensions, screaming for bright feathers to fade back into the distant 219
land from which it had emerged. 220
I climbed to the windowpane, pressing my nose against the glass, mind 221
lost to the little finch and its gifts. 222
Joy, what are you? You were not born of the palette of this world, for 223
you bear not its mark…224
The bird titled its questioning head, sending sparks outwards from its 225
tiny beak.226
Have you not seem the likes of me before child? 227
Yes. No.228
I am what is called the color Yellow.229
Yellow…it sang in my veins, screaming down into the frozen depths of my 230
heart. How could such a simple name be placed upon something so 231
beautiful? 232
I jammed my fingers into the base of the glass, putting every bit of my 233
strength into breaking through the barrier. The finch observed with 234
questioning contemplation. Could it not see? Could it not see the law 235
that it was violating? Simply by being in existence the finch- the 236
yellow finch screamed disobedience to Authority.237
I reached out a weary finger to touch it; afraid that this other 238
apparition was to have a fate similar to its brother. Yellow was real, I 239
promised my inner heart, yellow was real…240
It flew away. 241
I watched as the finch disappeared into grey skies with a blaze 242
of bright, extraordinary color.243
Yellow it was called…yellow.244
Thankfully Authority had gone by then. I crept from my room, 245
glancing about the empty grey of the world; my parents were not anywhere 246
to be seen. I discovered my father’s collection of forbidden articles, 247
books foremost among them. Puzzlement draped itself over my features, 248
for the novels had not been touched by the void of Authority. I 249
carefully dug the anthem out from its hiding place. It was still here! 250
Once again, tracing the letters upon the cover, I opened the 251
tome, grateful to laugh at how Authority had been deceived…Yet I was the 252
one who had been deceived.253
The page sat in front of me, empty. 254
I flipped through the tome, begging for a ghost- any ghost! - of the 255
words that had once inhabited these pages. But with every turn the 256
search grew more futile. I discovered only pure, white pages edged with 257
bits of dull grey. The book had become a hollow shell. My fingers 258
curled about the edges of the pages, crunching together the pieces of 259
nothing- and ripped. A frenzy erupted in me; I ripped the pages out of 260
their sanctuary, flinging them about the room. It rained ivory paper, 261
swirling like silent galaxies. Defeated.262
Streams of hot water trickled down my cheeks, stinging my flesh. 263
So sudden…why was I leaking? Why was water coming out of my eyes?! Was I 264
dying?! WAS I DYING?! 265
I peeked through falling paper shards, barely sensing the 266
presence of my parents as they dared to see the chaos unfolding in their 267
own living room. Our eyes locked; masks were securely fastened about 268
their souls to keep the passion inside. The pair disappeared once again, 269
leaving me alone with my anguish. 270
I clawed at the other books, frantically going through them page 271
by page. Each page was the same as the last; blank. I ripped them apart, 272
adding their fragments to the storm above. 273
Water poured out of me.274
It was too stubborn to cease. All through the night it cascaded 275
down my cheeks, soaking my pillowcase. Was it possible to run out of 276
water in one’s eyes? For that night every glass of water that I had ever 277
consumed exited my body through the pupils. I recall little from the 278
actual experience, only the sensation of awaking the next morning to 279
discover that the rivers had ceased.280
I tip-toed to the door, placing my fingers onto the handle while 281
taking in a deep breath- would the storm have calmed or would the room 282
still be littered with pieces of empty pages? I flung the door open. The 283
living room stood as it always had: dull, simple, generic- and without 284
any trace of paper. 285
My mother and father glanced up at me from their seats on the 286
far side of the room. No pity or comfort rested within those steely 287
eyelids, only the purpose of every parent in this land of nothing…288
You are a child, children have no reason to be inside on a 289
lovely day, father communicated in simple gestures; always the smallest 290
amount of effort- Run along and play with your friends.291
Perhaps I had been dreaming about destroying father’s books, for 292
he was making no comment of the occurrence now. Maybe I had even dreamt 293
of reading one of his forbidden tomes of knowledge and Authority had not 294
come to my home. It was even possible that this entire world of grey was 295
a dream- one long, highly memorable dream that had happened upon me in 296
my sleep. I knew not what to believe in anymore.297
I went to the outdoors as I had been instructed, grateful to 298
find the other children absent from their perpetual activities. My feet 299
led me to the storm drain where I had witnessed the emergence of the 300
very first miracle. I waited, begging the world below to bless me with 301
another happening. Yet nothing crept out from the ebony hole, leaving me 302
with only the occasional passing of a vehicle for entertainment.303
A thought came to my mind, emerging from somewhere I had never 304
believed to exist previously: where were those vehicles going? Why were 305
they going there? Why did they always following the same beat of the 306
world? I hoisted myself up, and walked. 307
The sidewalk remained forever the same as I moved, never 308
wavering from its leaden grey. The beat remained the same, yet I was no 309
longer a citizen of it. I had abandoned it- or it had spit me out, I 310
could not be certain which. My feet refused to cease, determined to find 311
what the mind was longing for. 312
I could not possibly explain the length of time that I spent 313
walking, simply placing one foot in front of the other and hoping for a 314
change. Every home was precisely the same as the last, every color 315
remained firmly planted within the realm of black, white, and grey- 316
vehicles still continued to drive by, soundlessly moving to the same 317
beat. Would it ever change? Would the universe ever swallow itself up 318
and just change?!319
I was too lost in thought to see the change before I collided 320
with it. A tangle of trees stood at the edge of the world, pointy and 321
foreboding. I walked directly into them without bothering to slow my 322
stride. This was the change, my brain was pulsing, this was change.323
I pushed stray branches aside, reaching- always reaching…324
My palm discovered something…a round, hanging something. I 325
traced the edges of it, being certain that it existed. With a sharp 326
intake of breath I ripped a branch aside…327
Glorious- oh glorious was the discovery!328
The object hung from a tree branch, quietly dangling, awaiting 329
an explorer daring enough to find it. Warmth radiated from its core, 330
beckoning the air about it to tingle with its powerful, intoxicating 331
color. The item was not even a solid plane of singular color, but a 332
tapestry woven with threads of various shades and hues, placing it 333
within its own dimension. I ripped the apple from its domain, hastily 334
pressing it against my chest, begging that Authority had somehow 335
bypassed the sphere. 336
Once each curve had been surveyed I brought the treasure out 337
once more, turning it over and over in my fingers…it beckoned me- oh so 338
gently- to taste its passion, its mystery. My eyes filled themselves 339
with the miraculous fruit, desiring it. I brought the sphere to my lips, 340
not even feeling the brush of my mouth with the apple’s surface…341
A dark arm wrapped about my middle, ripping me out of the tree 342
branches and back to the land of grey. I fumbled the miracle with the 343
tips of my fingers, careful not to drop it as I stashed it in my pocket; 344
hope was all that could keep the vile, black touch of Authority from it…345
My eyes met black voids of eternal nothing, hollow sockets set 346
into an inky black shadow. It knew that I had discovered something- that 347
I had somehow found a way from the darkness and into the light! 348
My child, what are you doing so far from home? Why are you not 349
with the other children, enjoying the day? Are you not lonely by 350
yourself?351
It was an empty, coal-paved road, his form of communication. I 352
was being forced to walk a narrowing pathway towards a distant darkness, 353
each word etched upon the road. I closed my heart, stuffing every bit of 354
my emotions into its farthest depths. Don’t let them be ripped away! 355
They are all that I have- don’t let them be ripped away! 356
I shall return you to your home, for surely you have simply lost 357
your way. Perhaps we need to speak as we walk- I have such little 358
interaction with children.359
I cringed, ripping my eyes away from his sockets. The pathway 360
was swallowing me up…361
We have been watching you young one- we are perplexed by you…Why 362
do you choose, oh so readily, to sin? You must know that it will gain 363
you nothing, it will only complicate matter. Take the knowledge that we 364
have given you and cherish it- but seek not to find more. As the 365
Authority we have made life easier for you by placing all items of 366
complexity into our own hands and taking on the burden of intelligence 367
so that you can live a life in simplicity and joy without such a burden.368
Stop sucking me down- the darkness at journey’s end had become a 369
whirling tornado, pulling me inwards...downwards…370
Come child, what hopes have you to change the way things are? 371
People are pleased with the manner of things now. There is no anger or 372
hatred or hunger or misunderstanding…only peace and community. 373
I dug my nails onto the pathway’s edges, resisting the wind as 374
it ripped at me. 375
Others have tried to do what you do; they always loose and come 376
to agree that Authority is the best manner in which to rule this land. A 377
meek child such as you stands little chance of anything- for no one 378
bothers to take you with any seriousness…379
Don’t let me die! I screamed into the vortex- I want to live! I 380
WANT TO LIVE!381
I am grateful that we had this discussion, the dark arm let go 382
of me, and I tumbled to the pavement, do not pester Authority again 383
child. You have been warned, child- you have been warned.384
There was a wink, and Authority was gone. 385
The vortex disappeared, and I was once again sitting in front of 386
my home, panting. Without bothering to gain my breath I darted through 387
the door…388
Did you have fun playing with your friends?, inquired father’s 389
lazy gestures.390
I stared at him in silence. Thankfully mother’s hurried, 391
wordless communications saved me from having to give an answer.392
Come and sit at the table; it’s time for dinner.393
I sat, staring directly ahead. Without bothering to wait for the 394
others I began the process of shoveling food into my mouth. The grey 395
lumps held no taste, only slid down my throat like dust- the ritual was 396
only for the purpose of eating…397
Cautiously I slid the apple from its hiding place and rested it 398
in my lap. It had been untouched by Authority and still glistened. With 399
every bite of food I grew hungrier as the fruit in my lap taunted me. I 400
rested my free palm on it, carefully absorbing the touch of this 401
heavenly gift. I wanted it, oh how I wanted it!402
The passion of color had seduced me.403
I glanced once more in the direction of my silent parents, 404
blinking a silent farewell. I placed my fork back into the dull universe 405
of nothing and took the apple into my hands. In what would appear as 406
haste to outsiders seemed as carefully defined moments to me. The apple 407
came to my lips once again, caressing them. They parted, allowing the 408
fruit entry just before taking one stolid bite…409
Sweet nectar dripped, accompanied by taste that was fresh and 410
ripe and natural. My taste buds tingled, my heart somersaulted. It was 411
unlike any experience the world of nothing had to offer- something 412
completely new. I caught a tiny peek of my parent’s faces, cracking with 413
horror at what their child had done. But one object pulled me in, 414
captivating me with its new truths… 415
The mirror showed the same shadows that it always had: black, 416
white, grey- yet my face was not entirely within the same palette. My 417
eyes were the color of the tiny beetle that I had seen rising from the 418
depths…blue it was called; blue. Tangles of leaden curls no longer 419
rested upon my shoulder, but had been replaced by the bright shades of 420
the finch outside my window…yellow he had named it; yellow. And finally 421
my lips had taken on the warm color of the spherical item in my fingers…422
red whispered the apple to me; red. 423
I took another massive bite from the apple, savoring its every 424
tangy twist as the juice entangled with my tongue. 425
What- WHAT ARE YOU DOING?! My father flailed his arms…426
For the first time I gave in to the impulse to answer:427
“I’ve finally found it! I found what all of your books were 428
about, the masks on your eyes, the colorless land we dwell in, the 429
reason why Authority exists…” I gasped, slapping a hand across my lips. 430
I had just discovered the manner in which I had expressed myself-431
no gestures or nods as the usual communication was, but I had parted my 432
lips and created a form of sound uniquely my own. The air froze, 433
startled to have suddenly been thrust aside in favor of something else: 434
a sound which belonged to a singular individual. 435
Neither of my parents moved as I sprinted for the door, cradling 436
the apple of liberation in my palms. I ran to the forest from which the 437
fruit had grown, taking bites with every possible moment. With each bite 438
I sensed a change in the universe, in me. I felt the gentle whirl of 439
wind as I parted it, heard the pulsing beat of my heart in my ears. My 440
soul arose and took flight, overflowing with joy. 441
My color warped, eating away the black and white to replace it 442
with tans and pinks and greens. The hollowness dripped out of me, 443
becoming puddles on the cold pavement as I ran. I had come loose from 444
the fabric of this land, had been expelled from its powerful beat- now I 445
was weaving my own tale. 446
Grey bore down upon me, wanting to swallow me up and force me 447
back into its grasp. I ran faster, taking larger bites of the apple. I 448
was free now, and had no interest in going back. I bounded through the 449
branches, tripping over my own faltering feet.450
The ground held me in its grasp, sweetly singing a tune of 451
victory into my ear. A twitter of birds danced across the air, calling 452
me to consciousness once again. I raised my head; my breath froze upon 453
my lips. 454
Tree branches wove themselves over the sky, creating a small, 455
protective clearing about me, lined by trees. Yet everywhere there was 456
color- not just hues of blue and yellow and red, but others of which I 457
could not name. Every drip of nothingness had dissolved, giving every 458
thin tree branch, every blade of grass its own unique pattern. The land 459
burst into beauty, fueled by my newly acquired knowledge. I stood up and 460
dusted myself off, taking in my new utopia of color.461
“Now I am free to have my passion, my emotion...the burden of 462
intelligence will be mine.”463
The End464
shadows as they danced across my skin. Shades upon shades of shifting 2
greys, waltzing in a questionable hue somewhere between the absolute of 3
black and the emptiness of white- vibrating- yes vibrating- with their 4
dull wishes, their sunken secrets.5
My pair of pupils met precise duplicates as they glanced upwards into 6
the glass. Yet no differences could be discovered in the depths of 7
reflection, only the continuous universe of rivals and their children. 8
The dirty, saturated darkness clashing with pure, empty blankness, as it 9
had been since the beginnings of Time.10
My mother beckoned me away from the mirror, communicating as all people 11
did, through gestures…expressions…nods…12
I should go out and play with the other children, just as every child 13
does. 14
Black shadows crept around her feet, her clothing, her hair, her eyes, 15
as splashes of white tinted the edges of her skin with only cloudy in-16
between. Her empty pupils dug into me the deepest, commanding my actions 17
with their fearful lack of brightness. No matter what number of greys 18
existed in this two-tone universe, every eye was cold and dark with the 19
hidden secret of resignation. 20
This way was always so…21
My tiny feet slid into perfectly formed slippers, prim and proper for a 22
young girl; a perfect blend of two absolutes. Without another commanding 23
glance from my mother, I opened the massive barrier between my small 24
space in this world and the many people beyond. Every corner of the 25
outside echoed the in, painted in haunting mixtures of dark and light- 26
and the consummation of their unholy marriage. 27
Silence rode the air, dull and blank and lifeless. Clouds rolled onward, 28
allowing Time to walk right by, carrying an empty bag of gifts for its 29
inhabitants. I reached out with a timid hand, stroking the lead-colored 30
bricks at the meeting of two of my house’s corners. Flat nothing was all 31
that the adventure yielded. I slid my fingers down the wall until they 32
found the ebony fence that met the bricks and hoped- hoped for something.33
But nothing, oh passionless nothing!34
A whirl of colorless activity captured my empty eye and pulled it about. 35
I was confronted with a decent-sized gaggle of other children, of an age 36
with me. They were doing as every child does, carefully speaking in that 37
way without sound, careless of the dull, unreceptive aura that hovered 38
above them all. Such a group of friendly peers, yet it consisted of 39
entirely isolated individuals present only because they needed to do as 40
children do. 41
I became mesmerized by a solitary girl, playing a game with a thin, 42
white rope. With each little jump her colorless pigtails were suspended 43
in the air for just a breath before plummeting downwards once again, 44
only to have the same vicious movements repeated. Each cycle was 45
completed in utter silence; the jumper’s face remained frozen in a 46
constant dance of shadows and grey. She was not jovial, nor excited, nor 47
frustrated, nor sorrowful, only a hollow specter captured in a prison of 48
grey. 49
A collection of other children were playing hopscotch with one another, 50
seemingly in harmony, yet without any acknowledgement of each other. 51
Soundlessly the stone was pushed through stale air, colliding 52
unceremoniously with the cold pavement. A player would hop between ivory 53
lines etched into black ground, not even bothering to watch their own 54
feet as they moved between squares. Not one child missed a square, nor 55
did they stumble. Each innocent moved as steady cogs of a well-oiled 56
machine.57
The entire scene was a carnival of gilded joy, existing only because it 58
was what children did. 59
At regular intervals a vehicle would roll by, not even meriting a quick 60
glance from the children at their play. Soberly the vehicles would move, 61
following an unwavering line draw in invisibility. Each moving box grew 62
its own clusters of leaden shadows, holding them proudly aloft as they 63
passed by. No driver bothered with the presence of either the children 64
or me, for each being was its own individual sphere, and to reach across 65
the barrier was bothersome. 66
I turned away, clutching my forbidden treasure closely against my chest, 67
certain to conceal its existence from Authority. My legs guided me, 68
moving me silently down the colorless sidewalk striped with bands of 69
white. My mind pulsed, sending waves of nervous excitement throughout my 70
veins. Anticipation, oh sweet anticipation rang in me, intensifying with 71
each step, each touch of the item cradled in my arms. 72
The basement was pure ebony darkness save for a cascade of white light, 73
allowing me the luxury of sight. I sat in the illumination, carefully 74
caressing the fruit of my curiosity. The cover was a shade of nearly 75
saturated color, yet the bright title burned itself into the air, 76
leaving echoes of haunted words behind. I traced the letters with my 77
thumb, slowly, carefully setting each little line into my memories. I 78
would know every sentence of this book, each word, each letter! It was 79
to become my battle cry in a land of black and white.80
Anthem, the cover decreed, by Ayn Rand. 81
Without the encumberment of sound I opened the prohibited tome of 82
knowledge. Black pigmentation was set into white pages, tiny pieces of a 83
void leading to another world. Cautiously I placed my forefinger upon 84
the words, drinking them in with every piece of my senses to be certain 85
that they were real- that this was not a passing daydream. I traced each 86
letter with care, absorbing every sentence into the corner of my 87
memories. 88
It is a sin to write this.89
It is a sin to read this.90
It is a sin to think words no others think and to put them down upon a 91
paper no others are to see.92
It is a sin to hide each word in my memory and use them as fuel for my 93
soul.94
It is a sin to have something to fill up the emptiness within; a sin to 95
fall into the dangerous trap of human passions.96
It is a sin to want more, to seek more, to gain a greater amount of 97
knowledge.98
It is a sin to feel; a sin to see beyond dulls greys and the eternally 99
present war between light and dark.100
The list of sins continued to grow in another area of my mind as I read 101
on. ‘Twas a sickening occurrence, this documentation of all things evil- 102
of all things that I desire; I had committed nearly every wicked deed 103
thus far recorded- or at least considered it. My memorization of this 104
novel was to be my grandest defiance of all Time; I relished such a 105
thought. Perhaps I could vary the rhythm; the constant pulse that kept 106
all of humanity within the same step…107
Yet I was only me, a girl of the grey barely beyond the pinnacle of her 108
thirteenth year…and a petty thief of her Father’s books.109
The deed committed, I retraced my path. Every particle of the sidewalk 110
was precisely the same as it had been previously. Each grey shadow 111
remained the same shade, each tiny pocket of occasional black or white 112
was still tucked carefully into its preordained corner. 113
Vehicles rolled by within the same intervals as before. The drivers 114
persisted in emptiness, facing forward and seeing nothing through hollow 115
pupils. The tableau of playing children could have been frozen in time 116
from before. Not one had left nor joined; the game of hopscotch still 117
had neither joviality nor community; the girl’s jumping rope continued 118
to whirl, no mirth on her face. 119
I watched, clutching the bundle of words closely. 120
Yet my observation was broken. A spark timidly crawled upwards, touching 121
my lower sight. It must have climbed up the storm drain, cut into the 122
curb and drenched in ebony. Yet this phantom beauty must have been born 123
of some unexplainable miracle hardly associated with the vast darkness 124
that lurked in the lower world. 125
It was neither black nor white nor grey. 126
It was something else, a powerful apparition birthed from a plane of 127
thought far beyond that of this meager existence, the unknown color of a 128
magical dream world peaking cautiously into a land of constant nothing. 129
No single word could be placed upon such a divine article of 130
individuality that had managed to break the constant tempo of the 131
rational universe.132
The color of other worlds rode on the tiny back of a beetle. Every scale 133
of the insect was dressed in the shifting hues of this mysterious, 134
heavenly glow of passionate serenity! My eyes eased themselves, taking 135
in each bit of the animal and storing it in the forbidden depths of my 136
thoughts. A new emotion welled upwards from nowhere, a response to this 137
vivid little bug as it slowly pattered up the street. Placidity shined 138
through my empty pupils, filling them with a miraculous wonder. 139
I was mesmerized by this curiosity, thoughts pounding at the edges of my 140
brain, demanding to know what title I could place upon such immeasurable 141
splendor. But was such a gift possible? How could this grand vibration 142
of human emotion be given a name? For the force that danced through my 143
veins could hardly be contained by a singular word…144
The pools of questioning wonder within my eye sockets latched onto the 145
beetle. I willed myself to reach out and scoop the bug into my palms- 146
just to certain that it was not a ghost of the mind…147
Then the beat of the grey returned, pulsing as consistently as before. A 148
vehicle soundlessly rolled down the street, flashing its dull 149
nothingness almost triumphantly as it moved closer. My body remained 150
rooted in the same position, still poised to marvel at the glorious 151
glitch set before me. 152
The destroyer continued along, grateful to appease the beat of the 153
world, regardless of what beauty it may crush along the journey. The 154
leaden violence came, soundless and ghostly; the beetle that carried the 155
world’s salvation waited, vibrant with exotic waves of color. 156
Color was crushed; a miracle was broken. 157
The vehicle’s driver had not even bothered to twitch the muscles of his 158
face in response. He rolled onward, being only another working rhythm in 159
the massive machine of grey and black and white. The loathsome beast 160
disappeared down the road, leaving me with destruction.161
A smear of not-quite-grey was all that remained of the sweet treasure 162
that had risen from the depths and attempted to conquer the achromic 163
world with its vivacious brilliance. Spirit oozed out of my pupils and 164
found its death on cold pavement. My face was placed back into the 165
hollow form that it had begun as with only the tiny specter of memory 166
hidden behind empty pupils. 167
That was when I discovered the pig-tailed girl’s eyes with my own. Her 168
jumping rope hung limply from her hands; her empty pupils pierced my 169
near-isolation. She was staring at the novel still seated upon my lap, 170
for it had become visual during my interlude with the beetle. 171
I hastily wrapped my arms back around the tome, whirling about and 172
running. 173
She knew that such things were forbidden to the many, and it was 174
certainly not what children do. Her black pupils followed me, burning 175
through my heart. She was a good little tool, a sweet drone of the black 176
and white; always abiding to the way of things.177
I didn’t have the luxury of hoping that Authority would not discover my 178
betrayal. The little child at her game had happily reported my actions; 179
perhaps even aided in the death of my angelic beetle. 180
I slammed the ebony door behind me, not hearing a sound as it closed. 181
Mother discovered me first, boring into me with her empty pupils. Yet a 182
timid glow rested beneath them, carefully shielded from any who were not 183
familiar with her eyes. She scolded me without words, attention resting 184
upon the novel in my arms.185
Where did you get that?186
It was hidden…187
Do you know what would happen if…188
She ripped the tome away from me, burning seas of wrath erupted from 189
behind her hooded eyes...we shared glances for barely the span of a 190
heartbeat…she turned to scurry out of the room, clutching the book to 191
her bosom; cradling the anthem close to her heart.192
Authority caught up with us. 193
I was in my room when the occurrence took place.194
I watched the empty interactions betwixt my mother, father, and 195
Authority through a thin crack in the door…196
Authority was a darker black than any I had ever witnessed. It was a 197
void of hollow nothing sucking in every pebble of white and warping it 198
into black or grey. Every piece of what the anthem had given me was 199
being tugged at by Authority’s emptiness. The darkness swallowed me, 200
ripping away every warm piece of my soul and replacing it with ice. 201
Authority knew of my presence. It reveled with sinister silence: 202
Others have been broken before; now it is your turn… 203
Fear surged through my bones and I whirled about, breaking eye contact 204
with the thing of death. I sat, frozen. If only the door had the power 205
to keep me concealed…206
All coherent thought broke off and disintegrated, becoming only tiny 207
wisps floating gracefully around my head. I didn’t bother to reach out 208
for any of them.209
It was as if joy itself was staring me directly in the eye. Joy was 210
skeptical, almost scrutinizing…what reason have you to be so sorrowful? 211
Why do you live as you do, in a colorless cage? 212
Its eyes glowed as tiny pools of rest amidst an ocean of busy, vibrating 213
feathers. The little finch groomed its coat of colorful feathers, making 214
certain that no stray drip of grey would dare to stain it. I crawled 215
towards the icon of hope, carving every piece of its appearance into my 216
thoughts right to the beetle. It rested in the grey cradle of a leafless 217
tree. Achromic nothingness pressed upon it from all sides and 218
dimensions, screaming for bright feathers to fade back into the distant 219
land from which it had emerged. 220
I climbed to the windowpane, pressing my nose against the glass, mind 221
lost to the little finch and its gifts. 222
Joy, what are you? You were not born of the palette of this world, for 223
you bear not its mark…224
The bird titled its questioning head, sending sparks outwards from its 225
tiny beak.226
Have you not seem the likes of me before child? 227
Yes. No.228
I am what is called the color Yellow.229
Yellow…it sang in my veins, screaming down into the frozen depths of my 230
heart. How could such a simple name be placed upon something so 231
beautiful? 232
I jammed my fingers into the base of the glass, putting every bit of my 233
strength into breaking through the barrier. The finch observed with 234
questioning contemplation. Could it not see? Could it not see the law 235
that it was violating? Simply by being in existence the finch- the 236
yellow finch screamed disobedience to Authority.237
I reached out a weary finger to touch it; afraid that this other 238
apparition was to have a fate similar to its brother. Yellow was real, I 239
promised my inner heart, yellow was real…240
It flew away. 241
I watched as the finch disappeared into grey skies with a blaze 242
of bright, extraordinary color.243
Yellow it was called…yellow.244
Thankfully Authority had gone by then. I crept from my room, 245
glancing about the empty grey of the world; my parents were not anywhere 246
to be seen. I discovered my father’s collection of forbidden articles, 247
books foremost among them. Puzzlement draped itself over my features, 248
for the novels had not been touched by the void of Authority. I 249
carefully dug the anthem out from its hiding place. It was still here! 250
Once again, tracing the letters upon the cover, I opened the 251
tome, grateful to laugh at how Authority had been deceived…Yet I was the 252
one who had been deceived.253
The page sat in front of me, empty. 254
I flipped through the tome, begging for a ghost- any ghost! - of the 255
words that had once inhabited these pages. But with every turn the 256
search grew more futile. I discovered only pure, white pages edged with 257
bits of dull grey. The book had become a hollow shell. My fingers 258
curled about the edges of the pages, crunching together the pieces of 259
nothing- and ripped. A frenzy erupted in me; I ripped the pages out of 260
their sanctuary, flinging them about the room. It rained ivory paper, 261
swirling like silent galaxies. Defeated.262
Streams of hot water trickled down my cheeks, stinging my flesh. 263
So sudden…why was I leaking? Why was water coming out of my eyes?! Was I 264
dying?! WAS I DYING?! 265
I peeked through falling paper shards, barely sensing the 266
presence of my parents as they dared to see the chaos unfolding in their 267
own living room. Our eyes locked; masks were securely fastened about 268
their souls to keep the passion inside. The pair disappeared once again, 269
leaving me alone with my anguish. 270
I clawed at the other books, frantically going through them page 271
by page. Each page was the same as the last; blank. I ripped them apart, 272
adding their fragments to the storm above. 273
Water poured out of me.274
It was too stubborn to cease. All through the night it cascaded 275
down my cheeks, soaking my pillowcase. Was it possible to run out of 276
water in one’s eyes? For that night every glass of water that I had ever 277
consumed exited my body through the pupils. I recall little from the 278
actual experience, only the sensation of awaking the next morning to 279
discover that the rivers had ceased.280
I tip-toed to the door, placing my fingers onto the handle while 281
taking in a deep breath- would the storm have calmed or would the room 282
still be littered with pieces of empty pages? I flung the door open. The 283
living room stood as it always had: dull, simple, generic- and without 284
any trace of paper. 285
My mother and father glanced up at me from their seats on the 286
far side of the room. No pity or comfort rested within those steely 287
eyelids, only the purpose of every parent in this land of nothing…288
You are a child, children have no reason to be inside on a 289
lovely day, father communicated in simple gestures; always the smallest 290
amount of effort- Run along and play with your friends.291
Perhaps I had been dreaming about destroying father’s books, for 292
he was making no comment of the occurrence now. Maybe I had even dreamt 293
of reading one of his forbidden tomes of knowledge and Authority had not 294
come to my home. It was even possible that this entire world of grey was 295
a dream- one long, highly memorable dream that had happened upon me in 296
my sleep. I knew not what to believe in anymore.297
I went to the outdoors as I had been instructed, grateful to 298
find the other children absent from their perpetual activities. My feet 299
led me to the storm drain where I had witnessed the emergence of the 300
very first miracle. I waited, begging the world below to bless me with 301
another happening. Yet nothing crept out from the ebony hole, leaving me 302
with only the occasional passing of a vehicle for entertainment.303
A thought came to my mind, emerging from somewhere I had never 304
believed to exist previously: where were those vehicles going? Why were 305
they going there? Why did they always following the same beat of the 306
world? I hoisted myself up, and walked. 307
The sidewalk remained forever the same as I moved, never 308
wavering from its leaden grey. The beat remained the same, yet I was no 309
longer a citizen of it. I had abandoned it- or it had spit me out, I 310
could not be certain which. My feet refused to cease, determined to find 311
what the mind was longing for. 312
I could not possibly explain the length of time that I spent 313
walking, simply placing one foot in front of the other and hoping for a 314
change. Every home was precisely the same as the last, every color 315
remained firmly planted within the realm of black, white, and grey- 316
vehicles still continued to drive by, soundlessly moving to the same 317
beat. Would it ever change? Would the universe ever swallow itself up 318
and just change?!319
I was too lost in thought to see the change before I collided 320
with it. A tangle of trees stood at the edge of the world, pointy and 321
foreboding. I walked directly into them without bothering to slow my 322
stride. This was the change, my brain was pulsing, this was change.323
I pushed stray branches aside, reaching- always reaching…324
My palm discovered something…a round, hanging something. I 325
traced the edges of it, being certain that it existed. With a sharp 326
intake of breath I ripped a branch aside…327
Glorious- oh glorious was the discovery!328
The object hung from a tree branch, quietly dangling, awaiting 329
an explorer daring enough to find it. Warmth radiated from its core, 330
beckoning the air about it to tingle with its powerful, intoxicating 331
color. The item was not even a solid plane of singular color, but a 332
tapestry woven with threads of various shades and hues, placing it 333
within its own dimension. I ripped the apple from its domain, hastily 334
pressing it against my chest, begging that Authority had somehow 335
bypassed the sphere. 336
Once each curve had been surveyed I brought the treasure out 337
once more, turning it over and over in my fingers…it beckoned me- oh so 338
gently- to taste its passion, its mystery. My eyes filled themselves 339
with the miraculous fruit, desiring it. I brought the sphere to my lips, 340
not even feeling the brush of my mouth with the apple’s surface…341
A dark arm wrapped about my middle, ripping me out of the tree 342
branches and back to the land of grey. I fumbled the miracle with the 343
tips of my fingers, careful not to drop it as I stashed it in my pocket; 344
hope was all that could keep the vile, black touch of Authority from it…345
My eyes met black voids of eternal nothing, hollow sockets set 346
into an inky black shadow. It knew that I had discovered something- that 347
I had somehow found a way from the darkness and into the light! 348
My child, what are you doing so far from home? Why are you not 349
with the other children, enjoying the day? Are you not lonely by 350
yourself?351
It was an empty, coal-paved road, his form of communication. I 352
was being forced to walk a narrowing pathway towards a distant darkness, 353
each word etched upon the road. I closed my heart, stuffing every bit of 354
my emotions into its farthest depths. Don’t let them be ripped away! 355
They are all that I have- don’t let them be ripped away! 356
I shall return you to your home, for surely you have simply lost 357
your way. Perhaps we need to speak as we walk- I have such little 358
interaction with children.359
I cringed, ripping my eyes away from his sockets. The pathway 360
was swallowing me up…361
We have been watching you young one- we are perplexed by you…Why 362
do you choose, oh so readily, to sin? You must know that it will gain 363
you nothing, it will only complicate matter. Take the knowledge that we 364
have given you and cherish it- but seek not to find more. As the 365
Authority we have made life easier for you by placing all items of 366
complexity into our own hands and taking on the burden of intelligence 367
so that you can live a life in simplicity and joy without such a burden.368
Stop sucking me down- the darkness at journey’s end had become a 369
whirling tornado, pulling me inwards...downwards…370
Come child, what hopes have you to change the way things are? 371
People are pleased with the manner of things now. There is no anger or 372
hatred or hunger or misunderstanding…only peace and community. 373
I dug my nails onto the pathway’s edges, resisting the wind as 374
it ripped at me. 375
Others have tried to do what you do; they always loose and come 376
to agree that Authority is the best manner in which to rule this land. A 377
meek child such as you stands little chance of anything- for no one 378
bothers to take you with any seriousness…379
Don’t let me die! I screamed into the vortex- I want to live! I 380
WANT TO LIVE!381
I am grateful that we had this discussion, the dark arm let go 382
of me, and I tumbled to the pavement, do not pester Authority again 383
child. You have been warned, child- you have been warned.384
There was a wink, and Authority was gone. 385
The vortex disappeared, and I was once again sitting in front of 386
my home, panting. Without bothering to gain my breath I darted through 387
the door…388
Did you have fun playing with your friends?, inquired father’s 389
lazy gestures.390
I stared at him in silence. Thankfully mother’s hurried, 391
wordless communications saved me from having to give an answer.392
Come and sit at the table; it’s time for dinner.393
I sat, staring directly ahead. Without bothering to wait for the 394
others I began the process of shoveling food into my mouth. The grey 395
lumps held no taste, only slid down my throat like dust- the ritual was 396
only for the purpose of eating…397
Cautiously I slid the apple from its hiding place and rested it 398
in my lap. It had been untouched by Authority and still glistened. With 399
every bite of food I grew hungrier as the fruit in my lap taunted me. I 400
rested my free palm on it, carefully absorbing the touch of this 401
heavenly gift. I wanted it, oh how I wanted it!402
The passion of color had seduced me.403
I glanced once more in the direction of my silent parents, 404
blinking a silent farewell. I placed my fork back into the dull universe 405
of nothing and took the apple into my hands. In what would appear as 406
haste to outsiders seemed as carefully defined moments to me. The apple 407
came to my lips once again, caressing them. They parted, allowing the 408
fruit entry just before taking one stolid bite…409
Sweet nectar dripped, accompanied by taste that was fresh and 410
ripe and natural. My taste buds tingled, my heart somersaulted. It was 411
unlike any experience the world of nothing had to offer- something 412
completely new. I caught a tiny peek of my parent’s faces, cracking with 413
horror at what their child had done. But one object pulled me in, 414
captivating me with its new truths… 415
The mirror showed the same shadows that it always had: black, 416
white, grey- yet my face was not entirely within the same palette. My 417
eyes were the color of the tiny beetle that I had seen rising from the 418
depths…blue it was called; blue. Tangles of leaden curls no longer 419
rested upon my shoulder, but had been replaced by the bright shades of 420
the finch outside my window…yellow he had named it; yellow. And finally 421
my lips had taken on the warm color of the spherical item in my fingers…422
red whispered the apple to me; red. 423
I took another massive bite from the apple, savoring its every 424
tangy twist as the juice entangled with my tongue. 425
What- WHAT ARE YOU DOING?! My father flailed his arms…426
For the first time I gave in to the impulse to answer:427
“I’ve finally found it! I found what all of your books were 428
about, the masks on your eyes, the colorless land we dwell in, the 429
reason why Authority exists…” I gasped, slapping a hand across my lips. 430
I had just discovered the manner in which I had expressed myself-431
no gestures or nods as the usual communication was, but I had parted my 432
lips and created a form of sound uniquely my own. The air froze, 433
startled to have suddenly been thrust aside in favor of something else: 434
a sound which belonged to a singular individual. 435
Neither of my parents moved as I sprinted for the door, cradling 436
the apple of liberation in my palms. I ran to the forest from which the 437
fruit had grown, taking bites with every possible moment. With each bite 438
I sensed a change in the universe, in me. I felt the gentle whirl of 439
wind as I parted it, heard the pulsing beat of my heart in my ears. My 440
soul arose and took flight, overflowing with joy. 441
My color warped, eating away the black and white to replace it 442
with tans and pinks and greens. The hollowness dripped out of me, 443
becoming puddles on the cold pavement as I ran. I had come loose from 444
the fabric of this land, had been expelled from its powerful beat- now I 445
was weaving my own tale. 446
Grey bore down upon me, wanting to swallow me up and force me 447
back into its grasp. I ran faster, taking larger bites of the apple. I 448
was free now, and had no interest in going back. I bounded through the 449
branches, tripping over my own faltering feet.450
The ground held me in its grasp, sweetly singing a tune of 451
victory into my ear. A twitter of birds danced across the air, calling 452
me to consciousness once again. I raised my head; my breath froze upon 453
my lips. 454
Tree branches wove themselves over the sky, creating a small, 455
protective clearing about me, lined by trees. Yet everywhere there was 456
color- not just hues of blue and yellow and red, but others of which I 457
could not name. Every drip of nothingness had dissolved, giving every 458
thin tree branch, every blade of grass its own unique pattern. The land 459
burst into beauty, fueled by my newly acquired knowledge. I stood up and 460
dusted myself off, taking in my new utopia of color.461
“Now I am free to have my passion, my emotion...the burden of 462
intelligence will be mine.”463
The End464
Author notes
Yeah...very different than anything else that I have ever written before. There's really no way to explain that. I was halfway falling asleep the other day and just got this image in my head...so I got up and started writing out some notes. Without even really thinking too hard I had a story put together...
What did you think? Please comment!
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Excellent!
Absolutely rewarding to learn that a young person has discovered Ayn Rand and Anthem, not only discovered but taken it into herself and brought it back again with full understanding of the theme. Excellent!
And some wonderful commentary on your work, I would add Ayla of Clan of the Clan of the Cave Bear as a possible inspiration you found in the gestures and nods in place of words.
And of course your allegory of the fruit of the tree of knowledge, so tempting, so dangerous but so essential to living.
The late Ayn Rand also published a series of Newsletters, available from the Ayn Rand Institute, if you are not aware.
There are essays on many subjects, but you might find her thoughts on Art, Romanticism, Art and Epistemology and Literature interesting and enjoyable to read.
I have missed having new chapters of your earlier stories to read and comment on. I suspect your life has changed somewhat and you have intellectually moved to a new place.
I hope it is not a lonely place as you venture forth in this sometimes very grey and hostile world.
I am always at your beck and call should you need to rant.
amicus amicusveritasb@yahoo.com
Excellent work!
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Brilliant
This is an excellent story. When it begins it's so flat and lifeless that it made me wonder if if was aboult people in old photographs. The mention of the Ayn Rand and Anthem set the scene for rebellion perfectly, for she dwelt in a world of greys. Ayn Rand is a powerful writer and you have captured some of the same intensity that I experience when I'm reading her books. Despite the flatness, lifelessness of the beginning this story was still compelling.
When you wrote the description of yellow I forgot about Ayn and immediately thought of Emily Dickinson. The way you described yellow uses words that are reminiscent of her style. The transition is startling and all the more compelling for that.
I like the way the child refuses to accept defeat and the analogy of the apple being the path to knowledge...how biblical!
I like the way the story gain pace with the introduction of colour and the ending which is sudden but satisfying none the less.
If I had to make any negative comment at all it would be to query your spelling of lose as my dictionary says 'loose' freee from confinment or restraint, not firmly fastened whereas 'lose' is defined as to be unable to find.
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Well you make this piece very interesting and it did not lose my attention while I was reading it so that in itself is an accomplishment I mean hell I cant even keep my own attention when I am writing a chapter for my book so you did a good thing. Keep on writing very good!
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This is trully a great write!!!-Going to read some of your work for sure--Donna
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wow not bad i like this keep up the work
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THIS STORY IS AWSOME. iT GRABS YOUR ATTENTION FROM START TO FINISH. I LIKE TO SAY THAT YOU ARE OF CREATIVE CHARACTER AND THAT I LOVE YOUR STYLE, VERY SUSPENSE LIKE, YET VERY TRUE. KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK, A WRITER YOU SEEM TO BE. DON'T LET GO OF THAT AND DON'T LET GO OF THE LOVE AND EMPATHY IN WHICH YOU SEEM TO EXPRESS THROUGH THIS STORY
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First Draft Stage
An extensive allegory inspired by Anthem, and somewhat "anthemesque" in its dealings with authority and a naive narrator whose eyes are slowly opened to the truth. Your word choice calls up feelings of mystery/mystique which at first is quite mesmerizing and captiviating...but after that, becomes confusing and all too allusive. I think as a first draft this is quite an awesome piece of prose...but the next draft should seek to bring familiarity to the reader, something to hold on to. I think you can still probe your thesis without sacrifice and still make events/characters/plot more real--not so metaphysical. Even in Anthem, characters seem real and go through real problems we could all grasp--I found myself grasping for rungs to hold on to in this narrative. I would pour some concrete into this...you have the roof and the support beams, but they are flying away without mooring! Just an opinion....I loved your style. Each paragraph operates like a poem! Cool. -
wow this is a beautiful story i rather like the ending and was completley and utterley mesmorised from the start to the finish! i love the way you have described the different ranges of greys blacks and whites and some of the expressions, like the blackness dripping from me! this is an excellant story and i enjoyed it very very much well done xx Cheryl
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I like this alot. It reminds me of both Farenheit 451 and The Giver. Very powerful story. You have created some beautiful images and emotions...that's what hooks the reader. I can just imagine what it would be like to live in a "Utopia" of nothingness, and the overwhelming emotion that would run through my blood as I experienced the joys and pleasures of the world, as well as the darker experiences for the first time. It would quickly become and addiction. I liked how you expressed individuality, free will, and thought as "sin." This is marvelous, and I enjoyed it very much. Thank you for sharing this!
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I was engrossed in reading this - how skillfully you have written this, from the dull lifeless grey/black/white write at the first, to the beginnings of a touch of colur with the beetle, to the vibrant color and freedom at the end. Such continuity, such language you have used to express your sentiments are really amazing. Would love to read the continual saga of this young individual - so different that all the rest. This can be likened to so many happenings in our lives - so many metaphors given. Really enjoyed this - worth every minute of the long read.
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