Friendly Bear

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Bartholomew was a big, brown grizzly bear 3

He lives deep in the densely foliaged forest4

He is the only bear that resides there5

None of the animals ever allow him to join in any games6

They like to make fun of his weight cause he is so much bigger than them 7

Call him lazy cause he sleeps through the winter
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This hurts poor ole Bartholomew.9

For he is very kind and loves to play all the same sports as the others10

He just wishes he wasn't so much bigger than the rest. 11

They all fear him cause of what people say about bears12

How they are mean and vicious towards others
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One sunny day Bartholomew was sitting on a rock by the river14

He was quite sad this morning and had tears rolling down his face15

Wabbit the rabbit was hopping along the rocks and spotted the bear16

Hesitating as to whether or not approach the bear, until he saw the tears
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Hopping close to the bear, Wabbit asks in a timid voice18

“What’s the matter Bartholomew?”19

In reply, Bartholomew tells Wabbit how he feels when they pick on him20

Taken aback at the fact that the bear is hurt by the tease that even he  inflicts
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Wabbit sits there a moment pondering the things that the bear has said22

Wabbit tells the bear that he’ll be right back and not to leave the spot23

Puzzled, the bear just merely nods his head in acknowledgment
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Wabbit hops back to the rest of the animals faster then he has ever hopped25

Panting when he reaches them, everyone gathers around, wondering what is wrong26

Wabbit finally gets his breath and relays to them what Bartholomew has said.27

All standing around in shock and puzzlement28

Murmurs run through the crowd of how sorry they are now
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Wabbit bravly announces that from this day forward he’ll never exclude Bartholomew30

A few moments pass before they are in agreement with Wabbit31

Wanting to make amends with Bartholomew, they ask Wabbit where to find him32

They all follow Wabbit to the river where he had left Bartholomew
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Looking up at all the ruckus made from all of the animals running34

Bartholomew is quite surprised and unsure of what to do35

All at once the animals anxiously apologize to Bartholomew 36

Tears of joy run down Bartholomew’s face 37

Everyone runs and embraced in a big hug
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Wabbit remembers that they are to have a picnic that night39

Without a second thought he invites Bartholomew 40

Looking unsure and afraid of what to say.41

The others chime in, encouraging him to say yes42

Convinced now that he is wanted there43

He gladly accepts the offer to hang out with them
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Moral of the story:47

Never judge a person by looks but by what they hold on the inside of them, because you could end up missing out on a lot of great and amazing friendships in life.
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Name:Christina
Age:18

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  • catz
    January 7, 2006
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    A wonderful story, Crisi... and a great message for the kids... and anyone else, too. This is a story all ages can enjoy and benefit from

    Good luck in the contest
    Dee


  • Haunted-Memory silver member
    January 7, 2006
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    Wonderful write

    I really enjoyed this story and the moral behind it. It is so true that we must not judge a cover by its book, and you a quiet right many a friend in this world may have been made but have been missed out on becuase people do just that. a good leson learnt in this write . best wishes and good luck in the contest ~Brian~


  • Granny Goose silver member
    January 3, 2006
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    Awww.. what a nice story, Crisi I like stories such as this one, a good moral, a great message, on eeasily understood by young readers. It's a wonderful story

    Overall, it's well written, though in my opinion, some of the puncuation and paragraphing could use a little editing, although the format is nice

    Good luck in the contest and thank you for entering