No one heard her screams. There was no one to help her, she was all alone...Then suddenly, a banging on the bathroom door...1
"Emmy!!EMMY!OPEN THIS DAMN DOOR!2
She jumped as her best friend, Star, broke down the door. The look in Star's eyes was one not to be forgotten as she looked down on her best friend, sat on the floor with a blade in her hand and blood seeping slowly from her arms.3
"Hell, Emmy, if you don't stop what you're doing you're going to kill yourself."4
"That's the point..."murmured Emmy quietly, tears rolling down her bloodstained face.5
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It all began on Thursday. The night of the senior ball. Emmy sat quietly in the corner, wishing she had never come. She looked at the door, just as he walked in. The school hottie, Ralf Lymer, on the football, basket ball, cricket, sprinting and cross country teams. He walked slowly towards her, and Emmy's heart started beating...Oh my god, was he going to ask her to dance?7
"Hey. You're Emmy aren't you?" She nodded slowly,then managed,8
"Hi." He smiled, ah, the smile, then said,9
"I'm sorry to bother you but I was wandering if you would mind moving out of the way cos you're right in front of the punch bowl."10
It felt as if the wind had been knocked from her. As she moved, she hung her head, her long hair concealing her eyes, as well as the rest of her expression...she hoped so, anyway. As she move away from the refreshment table, her hand caught on something, and she turned to free it. Emmy ended up moved backwards, dragging the whole punch dish down onto the floor and spilling it's contents all over her pink dress.11
Ralf watched in pure amusement as she got up from the floor, 12
" Nice one," he snickered as humiliated, she flushed furiously.13
After that evening,every lunchtime Emmy sat alone in the toilets at school, a blade in one hand and a cigarette in the other. Star had found out what she'd been doing, so tried to stop her. Then Emmy was back to normal again, until another bad event.14
She was stood in the corridor next to the lockers with Star, when she heard Ralf's voice shout down the corridor in her direction,15
" Hello, dollface!" he called out cheerfully. " Have you decided to marry me yet, or do you still cruelly scorn my shameless advances?"16
Emmy turned round, and saw him coming straight for her so she said playfully, and in her opinion the truth,17
"Yeah, I'll marry you! Kiss me first though!"18
Ralf stopped, smirked at her then said,19
"In your dreams retard, I was talking to my girl behind you."20
Emmy turned round, and saw Celia, the prettiest girl in school, standing behind her, a sneer growing over her face.21
Back at home, Emmy's life wasn't perfect. her sister and her mum never stopped screaming at each other.There was a row at the moment, her mum was yelling at her sister for her bad grades.22
" Why is it that every time I try, it's never good enough?"23
"Because you never DO try Gemma, you never DO!"24
A door slammed as Gemma grabbed her jacket and left the house.25
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"So," said Star,"You wanna talk about it?"27
"Why do you care?" asked Emmy, past caring herself now.28
After a long silence, 29
"I love you," Star whispered tearfully. "I just want you to be happy."30
Author notes
I think I used options:
1, 2, 3, 5, 6, 7, 8.
What did you think? Please comment!
Comments
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This was great - I was thinking at ifrst 'oh god shes going to try n fit in every option n totally ruin the whole thing' but instead it ended up sounding like all little snippets from various chapters of a novel ... now all ya have to do is sit down and write the book
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I love this! It's a great write! It reminds me of myself! I'm so much like Emmy it's weird! You really should keep going with this!!
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a little love helps
At first I thought, not reading this, then I went on and it
became quite a tale, ; great flow and suspense, a very unlucky girl , quite the imagery as the punch bowl falling and the
taunting, in the end love wins out.Good luck in the contest..
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this is excellent, you used almost all the sentences and without even sounding forced! Great job. YOu should definitely continue. Very well done, i enjoyed this!
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Wow... that was a real pleasure to read! I think you should continue it.
Julia
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