Internet Dreams (Ch. 1)

Simple Strand of Mystery: Hello *smiles* 1

Darkened Auras: Hi. . 2

Simple Strand of Mystery: How are you?3

Darkened Auras: I'm fine. . And you?4

Simple Strand of Mystery: I'm doing okay. I'm Kaden.5

Darkened Auras: I'm Alexa.6

Simple Strand of Mystery: That's a pretty name.7

Darkened Auras: Thanks. . . .8

Simple Strand of Mystery: No problem9

Darkened Auras: So. . . How old are you?10

Simple Strand of Mystery: I am 18. Almost 19. You?11

Darkened Auras: I turned 17 two months ago. .12

Simple Strand of Mystery: Sweet. Junior or senior?13

Darkened Auras: Graduated. Start Emory next semester. . Pre-med for Pyschology.14

Simple Strand of Mystery: Wow. . You must be smart. I'll graduate with my AA in the spring.15

Darkened Auras: Cool. But yeah, I'm smart. . I graduated when I was 16. As a 'sophomore'. Heh. The school system sucks. Graduate with my AS and my AA last semester. 16

Simple Strand of Mystery: Wow. . .17

Darkened Auras: -shrug- I probably could have gotten my BA but I was lazy, lol.18

Simple Strand of Mystery: Lol. Lazy. . . I'm always lazy.19

Darkened Auras: Hehe, you're a guy. . . That's why.20

Simple Strand of Mystery: Hey now!! I take offense to that. I'm lazy. . . Not cause I'm a guy. . but rather cause. . . I can be. . . 8.o21

Darkened Auras: Haha. Sure. Whatever you say Kaden.22

Simple Strand of Mystery: Hmph. Fine. . . I'm a guy. . I'll let that excuse my actions .23

Darkened Auras: Hahaha. It's not an excuse. It's an annoyance *grimaces*. Guys are such a pain.24

Simple Strand of Mystery: HAHA. I can assure you. . Girls are not any easier. . . Guys are an open book. What you see is what you get. . Girls on the other hand. . . . *shakes head*.25

Darkened Auras: Hmph. Whatever. Girls are sooooo much better than guys. We're smarter, stronger (emotionally AND physically). We are more complex, yes, but that, in truth, makes us, most definitely, the better sex -evil smile-.26

Simple Strand of Mystery: *raises eyebrow* I think. . that it just makes you a pain in our asses *smiles* 27

Darkened Auras: Yes. . But we have to put up with you. So it is much deserved to you.28

Simple Strand of Mystery: Heh. Whatever you say, dear Alexa. . . Whatever you say.29

Darkened Auras: Oh, I do say.30

Darkened Auras: OW holy. . Ow mother flipper!31

Simple Strand of Mystery: What??32

Darkened Auras: I hurt my back in a skiing accident. I just moved wrong. . It hurt like hell.33

Simple Strand of Mystery: I'm sorry. . I wish I was there. I give killer massages.34

Darkened Auras: That's cruel. . . 35

Simple Strand of Mystery: ?36

Darkened Auras: I have very few weaknesses. . but good massages are one of them, lol.37

Simple Strand of Mystery: Haha, oh. Sorry ;P38

Darkened Auras: Hmph. *mad face* 39

Simple Strand of Mystery: Aww, come now. *walks up behind you and puts my hands on your shoulders and rubs gently*40

Darkened Auras: Kaden. . .41

Simple Strand of Mystery: Shh. Just imagine. . Let yourself relax. *runs my hands down your back gently but firmly*42

Darkened Auras: -takes off my shirt and lies down-43

Simple Strand of Mystery: That's it. . . Just imagine. 44

Darkened Auras: Wow. . .45

Simple Strand of Mystery: *places my thumbs on the sides of your spine and rubs firmly* What?46

Darkened Auras: I can. . This is going to sound crazy. . but I can actually feel this. .47

Simple Strand of Mystery: *smiles and continues up and down your spine* Do you have a boyfriend Alexa?48

Darkened Auras: No. . . My fiance lied to me. Said he didn't have a girlfriend when we were friends. . . Then we got together and he proposed. . . Then I find out he's had a girlfriend for 2 years. . We met a year ago. . .49

Simple Strand of Mystery: What a shitface. I'm sorry that that happened.50

Darkened Auras: Yeah. . so am I. . . but what can you do. . Life has to move on. . Sucked. . . But I'm healing now.51

Simple Strand of Mystery: That's good. . . And you're right. Life must go on *smiles*52

Darkened Auras: And you? Any girlfriend?53

Simple Strand of Mystery: Nope. . Haven't had one for a while. . . After my last break up I decided to take a break from relationships. . . Just haven't gotten back into it.54

Darkened Auras: Yeah. . I know what you mean.55

Simple Strand of Mystery: You're so wonderful. . I don't know why that guy would do something like that to you. .56

Darkened Auras: -shrug- I'm not as wonderful as most people think. . . 57

Simple Strand of Mystery: Lex, you are. . You're beautiful, you're smart, you're sweet. . You are. . Wonderful. So please don't say you're not. 58

Darkened Auras: . . .59

Simple Strand of Mystery: *leans down and kisses your cheek* Stop. Don't argue. Don't say you're not. Just accept a compliment.60

Darkened Auras: Okay. . . . . . -sighs-61

Simple Strand of Mystery: Come now. . *lays down next to you and pulls you close* No sighing.62

Darkened Auras: -smiles and cuddles with you-63

Simple Strand of Mystery: I hate to say this. . But I must go. I have to get up in *looks at clock* about two hours for a meeting with my professor. 64

Darkened Auras: Alright. And thank you.65

Simple Strand of Mystery: For?66

Darkened Auras: -shakes head- Just. . thank you. I'll talk to you later. 67

>>Darkened Auras has singed off<<68

Author notes

o.o
This is kind of the first chapter of a little series thingys. . . I know where it's headed. . but not sure how to get there. . guess we'll see when it comes. . I hope to post at least a chapter a week. . . (and if you couldn't tell, they were talking online. . duh )
But ya. . o.0.
Hope you like it.
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  • crosscountry07 gold member
    October 30, 2007
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    It's fairly good. Odd that he talks about her being a wonderful person after barely knowing her. It takes me at least two days of getting to know a person before declaring them wonderful, then again that's just me. I like this, good start and post more of it!


  • BloodyxNightengale
    January 3, 2006
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    awww it seems so sweet right now! that's a good story!


  • BlackBloodyRose
    January 3, 2006
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    very good

    im me when more is done


  • xXxbecca10o8o7xXx
    January 3, 2006
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    WOW OMG i love this it's really good and i enjoyed reading oit keep it up!!!!!!!! you truly are a great writer and this is truly a awesum write keep it up and you will go far thanx for sharing with all of us here at allpoetry really enjoyed the read love this keep it up!!!!!
    love ya
    ~*becca*~

    you are a great writer
    keep up the great and awesumly awesum work!!!!!!!!!!!!

  • Trial and Error
    January 3, 2006
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    Honestly, while far-fetched. . . It's kind of supposed to be.
    But, also, I sort of based a lot of this stuff on stuff that has happened to me (Yes, I know I'm a loser I spend all my time on the internet), so I can assure you, that stuff does happen.
    And over time, I'm going to edit it. This was just a rough draft, I didn't write it down and tweak it like I usually write my stuff; rather I sat at the computer and started this. . . And I didn't write exactly what I had in mind, because when I sat down to write this, I had a whole 'nother chapter in mind, but rather than jumping ahead, I decided to make a whole novella or something out of it. . It'll clear up over time (I hope. . )
    But thanks for your input

  • isupportglb
    January 3, 2006
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    great

    I really liked that. I agree with Faeorie that you need to tweak it up a little bit. Other then tat i thought it was great. Well done. Keep writing. Can't wait for more. Love ya
    -SL666


  • EternitysKiss
    January 2, 2006
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    i'm wayy confused. but i think i like it. it seems like an awesome begining- keep it up!


  • WiltedRose0777
    January 2, 2006
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    That's an interesting way to put a story! I don't think I would have thought of that. I can't wait to read more and see where it goes. Good start!


  • SouthAfricanbabe
    January 2, 2006
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    good

    Ya, this story was alittle confussing, any ways, good jod!

  • Dancing Rebel
    January 2, 2006
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    wow kat! that was really something and i can relate it is amazing and so different.
    I cant wait for the next chapters... you need anyhelp you let me know ok hun
    Well done and keep it up!
    Love Zoe xxx

  • faeorie
    January 2, 2006
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    So, she graduated HIGH school two semesters ago? or did she graduate another college two semesters ago? Because then the time frame would not make sense. I also agree with Dream Catcher. And while I know that college at such a young age is possible, it seems not believable enough through the character you present, also the sincerety of the whole engagement scenario is hard to believe. I dunno, it still needs tweaking, (especially the whole sudden comraderie that happens between the two, which is too quick, even for the internet.) but I like the style of the story being instant messages, I've heard of some stories that incoporate this idea.
    Edited on Jan 02, 5:48 p.m. because 'Grammar and spelling.'.

  • Symphony
    January 2, 2006
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    i REALLY enjoyed this, cause I used to talk to people online, and I think its good, people do suddenly get close online after only a few minutes of talking because you cant see the other person so you think you're safe opening up your heart to them!

    Please please write more, and let me know if you do, i really really enjoyed it!

  • blueidblondie
    January 2, 2006
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    Thats Interesting...... I was alittle confused though. But I like things that make me think. That really had me thinking. Well great write
    Lots of love*
    KL


  • dream catcher
    January 2, 2006
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    The only problem i have with this is that they just met on the net (right?) and then all of a sudden they know each other well. It confuses me a bit. Other than that i definitely like this, internet relationships are weird. You can do just about anything online (kiss, hug, talk, love, etc.) and it's so easy. Even if they aren't real. More to read then...


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    January 2, 2006
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    Different and unique write! Rather liked "looking" into your conversation Nicely done; i like reading new and different things!

  • Trial and Error
    January 2, 2006
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    Oh. You misunderstood the semester thing. It wasn't she graduated in two semesters. . It was she graduated two semesters AGO. but I'ma make that last semester, so as to clear that up for future reference.

  • Trial and Error
    January 2, 2006
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    o.o Oh, yeah. . o.o; I shoulda noticed that. Lol. (about the college)
    They did not know each other, but rather. . got to know each other . Whole internet thingy is a wonderful place (That has totally happened to me before, so yeah).
    Engaged, totally believable (The whole engaged thing happened to me, so yeah, that's where that came from). The AA/AS degree before 17 is possible (while not probable. . but I could have done that . . You just gotta be SMART as hell. . And I'm 16. And I know someone who did it o.0). But yeah. . Gonna go change the whole Yale and the semester thingys . Thanks for pointing shose out to me

  • faeorie
    January 2, 2006
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    I liked it, but I'm a bit confused. At first it seemed like they didn't know each other at all, but then the guy is saying the girl is beautiful...so does he actually know who she is? Or is he some sort of stalker? Feels kind of strange, engaged, in college, and has AS and AA (in two semesters?) before she's 17 years old? Slightly hard to believe.. plus, isn't Yale a Law School, and not a Medical school?

  • Trial and Error
    January 2, 2006
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    Thanks
    If ya want I'll keep you updated when the next one comes out. I'll probably write it on the plan and add it when I get home.
    Edited on Jan 02, 4:05 p.m. because ''.

  • Trial and Error
    January 2, 2006
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    Uh, it's a story, not a poem. Which would be why it is such.

  • Vampiric Fox Demon
    January 2, 2006
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    Not bad. I like the emotions and the idea. Can't wait for more!

  • grannyeri
    January 2, 2006
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    More like a screen play than a poem. Even into the prose section, but as for poetry- not sure if this qualifies as such.

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