A girl sat down alone, but rose with the earth with her. They watched in awe as she walked along. Music was tingling in her ears, but she tried to disregard it. 1
As she walked out the door, the world stopped watching. She had escaped, and the music dancing in her ears grew louder. Soon she couldn't ignore it, and soon, she was dancing with it. 2
She swirled and her hair swayed and twirled along. 3
She started running across the earth, the world watching. Soon, dancing and running she left the world behind her, looking up and she looked towards the sun and off into the black space. Soon she was in a white cloud, with the music never ending. She smiled, the sun was here too.4
What did you think? Please comment!
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nothing less than the best of course
omg katie,, i loved it!!
i thought it was really good. I though it sounded like she died. -
Wonderfully Wonderful!
OMG Katie, that was soooooooo good! It kind out sounded like she was dying...but I still liked it. I love how you used all those "discriptive words", they were really good. Lol okay, now I'm going to be a critic. Yay! The only thing I didn't like was you didn't really know anything about the girl...only what she looked like. I wanted to know more about her. -
AWESOME
I thought this was a really good story. It was cool, and written really well. I think that you should write more stories like this, and I promise that I will read them all.
It was just the right length for the story, and I think the hook and ending were really awesome.
keep writing!!! -
KATE! this is really good! I didnt know you could write like this! Im impressed!
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