“People In My Life”1
Should I feel blessed when I think about all the people who have crossed the paths of my journey through life? Beginning till end?2
Strangers’3
What can be said for these people of no faces who have very little affects to your life other than, filling voids in it as passers by. They may be good or bad but nonetheless, they are irrelevant and are in no need of affirmation.4
Acquaintances’5
My journey with them is without the special imminence being conducive for me. Yet, they have affective meaning for a place in time amid of my needs. Be it consciously or not. They are here for the moment, then gone onward to other places unknown. Some may even return. Those are the ones who become a little more meaningful.6
Friends’7
Some people. The ones who remain and become more of a friend to me, these wonderful people are those who become a daily part of my life, friends. I spend most of my life’s moments with them. Include my daily joys and sorrows along with all the everyday happenings most of us deal with day to day. These are the people who you can depend upon and help with issues and decisions you make without recourse and with indifference. No matter what you do or share together, you are in it together for the durations. All the outcomes become collective and are shared in concert. They are there no matter what happens.8
Special9
These people come along to linger and hold steadfast in life. These people are the ones who come and take my breath away. Giving meaningful purpose to live life happy for. All dreams and aspirations take on new life, leading me to attach myself to feelings of belonging. All of my dreams along with my fantasies take me to new heights. The energy I now possess is a rejuvenation of my hearts desires. Exciting as much, taking on new anticipations with eagerness that now lye ahead of me. Having a, ‘Cant wait to wake up for another new day!’ My minds consistently complacent, settings of peaceful sentiments come night at a time when I lay my head to sleep. While at the same time being in mind for new days encouragements, soon to be spent with up-beat preservations.10
My Lover11
Few become apart of me like this, even less become the very breaths I take existing within me. This is the person I long to belong too. The one who becomes the very essence of my life, this person I have grown with and have also opened my heart to, making them apart of me. Togetherness’ Spending life together becomes the desired and destined course to be taken in unity with. A perpetual dominance of emotions called, my love. ‘This you are to me. My Lover.12
‘You are the very heart of me, and the raison d'être for my life being blessed.'13
Writings of Malabu©200514
Author notes
Humans and what they mean to us.
I am over 50 years of age
Word count....494
NATURE/SCIENCE FICTION
Any form of natural or man made disasters.
Evolution.
Animals/Mammals.
*Humans*
*Forests.
*The End Of The World
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i like it
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TITLE: "People in My Life"
AUTHOR: malabu
CATEGORY GROUP: 3
AGE GROUP: senior
(In a scale 1-6.) (6 is the best)
Originality: 6
Creativity: 5
Rule Compliance: 6
Spelling: 5
Punctuation: 5
Quality: 5
My Personal Opinion: 5
Character Ideas: 6
Character development: 5
Background Sense: 4.5
Color: 5
Ideas: 6
Organization: 6
Supporting Details: 6
Voice: 6
Passion: 5.5
Total: 87
Average: 5.44
Rank: 2
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I could have put more to this writing.......but felt the positive side of me was more invoking then the struggle to make it a completely life story....lol...thanks for your kindness......its appreciated....Poet...
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Excellent
This was so darn good and so darn true. Very memorable. You did wonderful. Good luck in the contest. -
Thank you ASk261.....True....It did not come to my mind to mention those who bring hardship and sowrrow to our lives....or those we might grow to hate.....to dwell upon such darkness....only blackens ones soul......To see things in the light.......can only shine and take you through the darkness.....leaving our life to be positive....instead of the adverse affects the ugly ness.....leaves us in....
Thanks for your comment and review....it was most apprciated....
Huggs
Malabu -
This piece is awesome. It not only has the essence of spirituality...but it holds no hatred. You don't tell of people you dislike, or of your enemies. I admire that about this piece. It truly came from the warmth of your heart. Keep up the great writing! You are a kind person and it shows through your words. The love goes stronger as this piece goes on. Good luck in the contest!
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99.9% PERFECT
This was very true and I think everyone who reads this can compare exactly with what you said. Nothing wrong with this one, it was pure heart and voice. This was yours and your story will be up there in the top five at least. I have marked down mostly 5's and 6's on your scores and I will let you know the exact scores when the contest is officially over. Farewell and good luck. Nice write. Nothing bad about it.
-Tyler -
loved it, great, good, yay, ok get my point .
-nods- Very nicely said and very nicely wrote about how all others impact are life, it was deffently a diffrent perspective on other people we meet every day. -
that was really good!!
enjoyed readingit very much
you wrote it so well Bravo!!
loved the way you seperated everything and wrote the "acquaitances" the "special" and so on seperately, i would have got lost and linked everything together if i tried to write something like this...
anyways good luck in the contest
and keep on writing
Nooni -
like the other comments this made me think and that can only be a good thing. well done
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I particularly like the section on "My Lover"; it does give us a reason to live life! Love is an essential ingredient to the very complex form we call "humans" or "homo sapiens". Never ending process of encoding and decoding messages from someone else who is bent on loving us. God only knows why, sokmetimes our exteriors are not the beautiful objects of the past; but the SOUL is beautiful always. Be you my lover; love my soul! The exterior will age and grow old. Your writing made me think more about life. Tks. Great write. Walt.
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A valuable message.
There is something really wonderful about you.I know we only pass by on the Internet but feel if we meet one day could count you as someone special.You take no one for granted as everyone touches your heart in some way or another.I feel you have great dignity and compassion and those that are blessed to be counted amongst your friends are rich indeed.This story is a Testimony to all who know you and your Lover is a very lucky person.I will read this again.In the simplicity of this story is great depths.Lots of luck in the Contest dear friend.I applaud you for reminding us not to take friendships for granted.Thank you.Elizabeth. -
simple but has real emotion and meaning. different. all in all, a good job with writing this. enjoyed the read. good luck in the contest.
blu -
We all have these kind of people in our lives, and you have written about them very eloquently. Some move from one category to the other, others fade away and leave altogether.
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Ironically enough, facing some difficult times in the near future, I have actually contimplated these very issues, and you have put it into words so well. I could not have said it any better and my feelings just came to life with this Mal. Our life is our experience, and we do need to put it all into perspective, people are only capable of what they are willing to give, the two are so connected, and only years can make you understand that. This is truly an incredible piece, full of truth and complete understanding. I applaud you my friend!
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Very beautiful. I hope all is well for you. Many special blessings for you in 2006. With love - joanne
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nicely done!
I like this as an outline of what others mean in our lives. For myself, I would have a few other subcategories since people move into one's life but also out of it (and vice versa) and yet remain special. But this is beautifully written in a way I admire; it rings honest and true.
J.
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Fantastic in every possible way, I have never thought of all these people that cross our lives this way before. Great eye-opener. Nice to see people write nice things about their partners too... unfortunely my hubby is my writters block! Hopefully one day I will come up with wonderful words of appreciation like yours. best wishes always
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I like how you have drawn this up, Mally, giving each "category" their specific meaning in your life. I betcha there's someone who can move up from "stranger" to "lover" if the hearts and minds are willing, everything and everyone in their season...
Jo -
readable
So well put. Perfect time and place--each entity put in a compartment. Nothing left to chance. -
sounds like you got it right on the money. good job. keep up the writng.
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Mally Bally Boo, I have been blessed to know you and love you. Your words are always sincere, and this poem, gives the reader an insght to the heart of the poet, who entertains us all with his serious and ever so funny poems, too. You will eventually meet that one peron who will take your breath away,if only you can let go of one thing! Starting today, the slate is wiped clear, another year to get over your fear, and let someone near, who reasures, you dear!
All the best wshes in this contest!
Light and love, LInda XOXO
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Wow. This is wonderful. You wrote this so well. You such a great writer. I loved it. You can come by my site anytime you please. Just keep up the great work. Also best wishes for your new years.
xXFallenXx -
excellent writing
Wow......I am speechless Malabu. You really describe each of these people so well and so eloquently. You must be a very special person. I feel that just from reading your poetry.
I really love this one. Best of luck in the contest.
etherealforu
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Wow...this write was great. "These are the people who you can depend upon and help with issues and decisions you make without recourse and or with indifference." This was one of the best descriptions of a friend I have ever read. Just amazing peice here.
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Wonderful segregation of life's actors depicted with the descriptive details which throw light upon the facets of these faces and each one of us can relate to this....keep penning...cheers Shubs
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speechless..lol
Mally, WHAT A LOVELY WRITE HERE.. EXQUISITE!! speechless as ever..thank you for sharing and giving to life as We see here in AP..your life is a blessing here to me , thank you for sharing and caring for those of us that choose to interact with you..Linda
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