To begin this, you most of the time will see a rainbow when it's raining. Now you can imagine yourself over the rainbow. You can't possibly imagine what it feels like when you're over a rainbow. It's thousands of feet in the air and you're feeling like you're on top of the world. I will now describe what it might feel like to be over the rainbow. 1
You are so high in the air that you can feel the breeze while you are floating.2
What did you think? Please comment!
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I couldn't honestly judge this 'story' as a good piece, and I meant it. However, judging my comment as inferior because I didn't imagine it correctly, then it's YOUR fault I didn't enjoy it and not mine. You say it sounds good with your brother, but you can't make it good in words. Is that MY fault? I wouldn't think so. Maybe if you put a little work into it for imagery and depth into the meaning of a "rainbow", then I might think this piece is worth reviewing again.
You have a good day as well!
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depict? I dont quite understand what you mean by that ... this piece (of my brothers), might be a song lyric title but its the poem that is brought into it. and it has some work into it, and what he has sounds really good and has imaginary in it. if your just judging my title then I guess my poetry isnt good either because there are song titles to my poems. your opinion though with the way you like certain things however, have a good one
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brother this is cool. I personally enjoyed this piece, it sounds so soothing to be over the rainbow ...
thanks for sharing keep up the storywrite.
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I can't honestly depict this as a good piece of work. One word? Story? And you used a song lyric, so is it really good? Nah... it's not a story, you didn't really put any work into it, and it really isn't your own work. -
Interesting how you have only one word, and yet you manage to get an a thousand word message acrossed. Good job. I like the way you think. I don't know how you were ever able to come up with something so great as you did, but you did a great job of doing so. Keep up the great work.
Nikki
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