Ruven: OK is this SNAFU HQ?1
Center counter person:Yes...are you new?2
Ruven:Yes.3
Center Counter Person:Your teacher's Agent Number?4
Ruven:Agent #40582132355
Center Counter Person:That is our best agent teacher!down the left....First door to the right.6
Ruven:Thank you.7
Teacher:You are Ruven,am I right?8
Ruven:Yes you are right.....hey what is you name?9
Satellite Jack:"Satellite"Jack,even though I'm a girl.10
Ruven:A girl named"Jack"?11
Jack:Yeah....go figure.Hmmm....well lets get started.12
Ruven:What is first?13
Jack:The Dark Eco Clinger,it allows you to sneak pass cameras invisible while holding on to the Celling,very useful for sneaking pass a camera with acid or lava or any that can burn you alive.14
Ruven:So how does it work?15
Jack:The red button aims,the blue button shoots the wire,and the gold button will turn you invisible or visible,by the way the invisibility last for 4-5 minutes.Have a whack at it.16
Ruven*: *pushes the red button to aim,the gold button to turn him invisible,the the blue button to shoot the wire,then silings up into the air and reaching the other side*17
Jack:Very good....but since some many people know about it,you sadly don't get to use it often.18
Ruven:Let me guess,something penetrates it?19
Jack: Precisely,but we made a LEH,Light Eco Hacker.What it does can be confusing at first.Heck,I still get a bit confused!Well moving on,it allows you to see,which cameras are and aren't bluffing,weak spots,strong spots,blind spots,and hiding areas...the best thing is,is that SNAFU is the only agent area that knows about it.The red button will let a long thin wire to connect to the camera,the blue button lets you see everything I told you about,the black button tells the Light Eco to start hacking into the camera,and the purple button allows you to stop hacking and shows you every single piece of info you got.Have a whack at it.20
Ruven: *presses the red button,then the black button,then the blue button,then the purple button*This is what it says:23 not bluffing,23 weak spots,890 strong spots,0 hiding areas,5 blind spots,and 3 bluffing cameras.Wow,you guys keep this place air tight.21
*ground vibrates and a thin layer of lava spills*22
Jack: *touches the lava*This is real!We only use hologram lava and acid!23
*Even more lava spits out,this time thicker*24
Ruven:Good time to run?25
Jack:Yeah,run.26
*both run into a small man with a strange glowing hat*27
Man:Jack?You're done teaching already?28
Jack:Glowface,do you really think I can teach someone to be a pro spy in 26.90 minutes?29
Glowface:No.30
Ruven:Lava is headed this way.31
Jack: *nods*Come on,we need to get-32
Glowface:Is your gadgets working?33
Ruven:Yes they are.Why?34
Glowface:Really?Because everywhere in the HQ,the gadgets and computers has either melted down or just quit with no notice.35
Jack:Ares hasn't.36
Jack *pulls out a zoomer*Hurry!The lava is coming!37
*ruven and glowface hop on the Zoomer*38
Dark voice:SNUFA,you will pay for what you did to supoir!39
Glowface:A vent over there!40
Ruven: *rips off the vent*Get in!41
*they get in and jack seals off the vent*42
Glowface:We need to keep moving before the seal breaks43
Ruven:You hear something?44
Glowface:Yes,why?45
Ruven: Follow me.46
*5 hours later*47
Ruven:That sound is even louder.48
Dark voice 1:Hahaha!Oh that was a roit eh?49
Dark voice 2:SNAFU didn't know what hit them.They will pay for what they did.50
Dark voice 3:I still don't know how jack got into Supoir's plan tower.51
Glowface:Lets go,I think the lava has harden.52
Jack: *Breaks open the seal*This is not good.53
Little boy:Hey Jack!Have you seen Tuesday anywhere?54
Tuesday:Here I am Truman,and so is mom and dad.55
Jack:Haven't seen you in a while Mr. and Mrs.X.56
Mrs.X:Looks like we have a case on our hands.57
They all nod ed and started to invest agate.58
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Coudn't figure it out but it had me captivated. The dialog was great (I think). No really it was slpendly awsome. The ending ripped though because I was wondering WHAT???? -
Excellent
Overall this was great. Filled with action and intersting dialogue for a lead in chapter of what I assume is a novel. It has that feel of building your interests for the next chapter. -
Hey look! I'm in a story! Cool B-) :)
Jack this is awsome!
Isn't this the one we did in the Cb?
It's great.
Maybe we can do part two in the Cb too
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Keep up the good work.
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Hahaha! This is so... out there. Random. Unexpected. I'll be waiting for part 2 eagerly.
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the story is done.
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lol I'll be watching this.
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