It’s funny how just one look can change everything. 1
One moment, one glance, one smile, one laugh; and everything turns upside down, inside out, and you fall into utter chaos. 2
I thought I was over him. I thought he was gone. I thought I had moved on. I thought I had everything under control.3
But I was wrong.4
The order that I worked so hard to create, the walls that I toiled so long to build: everything came falling down. I tried so hard to forget him. Those bittersweet memories, tinged with sweetness yet sorrow- I tried to put it all behind. Yet the face that had lighted up with a smile every time he had seen me, the voice that had gently whispered my name as he caressed my cheek, and all the times and experiences that we had went through together: they continued to resurface despite the numerous times I tried to forget and move on.5
It was just like that.6
With one small ‘hey’, a quick smile, and the sound of my name on his lips, it all came rushing back. Just like the first time he caught me…he caught me again.7
They should condemn all people who look good in blue shirts and faded jeans.8
The poise that I had been blessed with for the past few months completely disappeared when he showed up.9
Damn him.10
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'Completely Unexpected': Prologue
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Oh good God, I can relate to this horribly well.
I agree with you... condemn them all.
Elizabeth
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Hey, I can't believe I didn't comment on this story. Haha, I loved reading it on fictionpress.com. Woot woot. Nice prologue. Now, let's see if you updated on fictionpress. *searches* AH! You did! And you didn't tell me?! >=O Ah well, at least I'm reading it now, am I not? Lol. Thanks for the comment on my poem. Anywho, while we're on comments about cliched stories: might I say, cliched stories are good. If done properly. But it seems you're story is more of a cliche with a twist. Those are always good, but hard to pull off. Trust me, I fail miserably at those. Well, I'm sure you won't! Enough blabbering, more reading... =)
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hey now.. what's wrong with cliched stories?! i happen to like stories like this - as long as they are well-written and the reader can actually relate to the characters... and besides: cliches are merely things that are popular and done a lot....
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haha thanks for deflating my arrogance. yeah now that i read it again...it is really cliche. i gotta look at that.
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hmmm...actually the whole thing's pretty cliche itself.
and my entire story is entirely cliche too. i should make a parody of cliches.
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Goodness. I read your first two paragraphs and to be honest, I loathe them! They in my head were so incredibly cliche and just too, um, what's the word, icky! The whole beginning you need to revise, it was lyke I was off cursing to myself in deep disgust whilst attemting to endure the rest of the read. But, as I progressed and got into your plot, I liked it because I could relate so well. Decent job but beef up on the reality!
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mushy...ahh i remember during the summer when u said stuff bout mushy.. then gushy.. then squishy.. right....
hmm.. it cant be that bad.. and even if it is..... jk -
two chapters down and it's getting mushier.
writing love stories is strangely addicting and very bad for your health. -
pretty good prewrite you got here. u got potential for a realli cool story... love ur way of writing too.. hope this story continues =D
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