Until the Next Time (Story)

I opened the door onto a windy, wet, grey evening; screwing up my face, I turned around and closed the door behind me as I went out into the relentless rain and cold. I didn't allow myself to think of what I was about to do, just forced my thoughts to the back of my mind and hurried on, clutching the large holdall bag closer for protection against the elements as I did so1

Somewhere in the night, a ships horn sounded, a long, drawn-out, mournful tone, lingering as if to envelope everything in its wake. A vehicle passed by, splashing rain water all over my winter coat, the water running down my legs and into my shoes, causing me to shudder and close my eyes tight, tears mingling with the rain as it soaked my skin. 2

After almost half an hour, I could hear the chug-chug of the train on the rails across the river, I knew now I didn't have much further to go, sure enough, there in front of me about four hundred yards ahead, I could see the dim light that was showing through the small square window and I quickened my pace.3

Reaching the dilapidated, brick building, I went round to the side... lifting the latch and pushing the door forward, I slowly went toward the sound of voices; raised voices, muted voices, argumentative voices, teenage kids from different backgrounds,  the familiar sight always tore at my heart, always made me want to gather each soul into my arms and give them hope, knowing it was but a drop in the ocean...yet I knew I had to come.4

The faces that confronted me were expectant, waiting, each one was dressed in shabby, ill-fitting clothing and looked as if they hadn't had a good meal in years. I stood there feeling inside as if I wanted to run back to my warm, cosy home, but I couldn't, not until I had accomplished what I had come to do... help feed these homeless teenage kids for tonight and the next night at least.5

All eyes turned toward me,  I just stood there and smiled; catching the eye of each teenager in the room. Slowly, they began to move toward me in single file, no scrambling or pushing, just a quiet, methodical walk... now, a patient, hopeful smile on the face of each one, causing a lump to come up into my throat.6

These are the kids who have no home, no parents, just left to fend for themselves on the streets in the inner, large cities, teens who have been forced to flee from abuse and violence, hoping to find a better chance of survival than the one they have left behind.7

Although it pains me to see these kids in such a hopeless situation, I have to come here, I have to try, even for a short time, to bring some hope and comfort into their pitiful lives... the back streets of London, the underground platforms,  the makeshift shelters of cardboard boxes that substitute as shelter and bedding for warmth, are no place to feel safe, to feel comfort, to feel loved and wanted.8

Across the street, a familiar van turns the corner; crosses the road and slowly pulls up to the curbside right beside the open door of the dilapidated brick building. For the next two nights, these teenagers will be eating a nourishing, hot, welcome meal, they will know that someone cared enough to make sure they don't go hungry at a time that  is supposed to be the season of good will to all men... I ladle hot, nourishing soup into a bowl and hand out warm tea or coffee, accepted with a grateful smile and a nod from each one.9

How sad that after just two days.. these children of the streets will have to fend for themselves until the next time the familiar van comes around the corner, with food, at a time called 'the season of goodwill to all men.'10

~Katie~ 11

Author notes

In such a day and age of Technology and man having flown to the moon, it is difficult to believe that there are some young adults, just into their teens who live on the streets, choosing to do so rather than live in a home where abuse and violence are the norm, yet this is a fact of life.

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  • Tigerlilly91
    March 10, 2007

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    This story is quite gripping, isn't it? It is extremely well written, with great transitions and descriptions. Awesome job!
    xoxo
    Kelsey


  • weetbix
    December 28, 2005
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    I'm agreeing that you should not throw away food..because my father and mother come from asia they are very insistent upon us finishing our food. but it's a good thing because we learnt from it. your story sends a very nice message at the festive time of year..it's very sweet of you to sit and take the time to share this with us and I enjoyed it Well done I love this! HAPPY NEW YEAR!!..weetbix

  • wishintreeUK
    December 21, 2005
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    Bless you for stopping by Susan, I do hope all is well with you, this time of year can be so very busy, I often think we could do with more than 24 hours in a day, yet, would that still be enough! Thank you so much for your wonderful comments on this piece of writing, I do appreciate it

    ~Katie~

  • wishintreeUK
    December 21, 2005
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    You are so right Michelle, throwing perfectly good food away is a crime when it could feed someone who is living on the streets! I watched a documentry programme once at this time of the year, it showed a couple of the shops who purposefully sealed whole loaves and such and put them in the trash knowing these unfortunates would be there foraging for food, it also showed how these ones had a brazzier fire going and were sharing the food they has managed to scavenge amongst themselves, it does make your heart go out to them, it's so easy to dismiss them as drop outs, however, some are genuinely out there because it is safer for them than the home they have been forced to leave.

    I take this opportunity to wish you and your family a happy festive season and a wonderful New Year

    ~Katie~

  • Blushfulmoon
    December 21, 2005
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    captivating~

    I haven't been by to read you as of late and I apologize for that..just so much going on with me....I am behind on everyone...but I got hooked on the story when you stepped out the door and got wet and then went to the dilapted old blg...it is sad to see teens living in these horrible conditions...and its also sad to see that it just "the season" that they will get free meals for two days....It looks like there could be a place open for the homeless so they could go eat at least one meal a day and not just in the spirit of Christmas.....
    I don't see that it needs tightening up at all sweetie I think it's fine as it is.......
    Full of imagery.......the scene almost plays out in your mind while you read the story and after all isn't that what its all about the true meaning.......I wouldn't touch a thing......
    I think it's perfect....and is this true or just a story? Either way there is still the homeless everyday on the streets living in cardboard boxes in 39 degree weather I don't see how they survive......Bless their hearts.......
    Truly a captivating read sweetie
    Got me from the start to the finish
    Love n hugs
    Susan~~~

  • wishintreeUK
    December 21, 2005
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    Bonnie, thank you so much for your constructive comments, I shall go over this again and try and trim it up I take this opportunity to wish you a happy festive season and a wonderful New Year

    ~Katie~

  • heartnsoul
    December 20, 2005
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    EXCELLENT

    Katie, my dear sweet Katie,
    You bring tears to my eyes as I read! By the second paragraph you one is just gripped. It's as if you were grabbed by the collar and made to open your eyes with a voice speaking in the back of your head. "This is the real world this is what is out there while you sit warm in your homes!" A flurry of thoughts raged through my head, the first being my mother (she was a waitress).You see here in New Jersey, restaurants are not allowed to give left over food.It is thrown out. My mom couldn't bear knowing those young people were on the streets going threw garbage cans for food and here she was having to throw out whole cooked chickens and other assorted food. She would swear it was for our dog. She went to the shelters and the streets to feed people. Until she got caught. The other is this.I'm not sure if you are familiar with a singer/songwriter Richard Marx. He wrote a song called "Children of the Night" I could hear this song while I read. If fits this story perfectly. An excellent read Katie. It's not easy to write on social topics. They grip the heart of the writer when writing as well as the reader while reading. I imagine both to be the experience here. I know I wouldn't have been able to write it without a tear falling down my cheek!
    ~Michelle~

  • BonnieQ
    December 20, 2005
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    Great Start

    The storyline here is fantastic, covering a very serious problem and worthy cause. From an editor's perspective, however, it needs to be tightened up: too wordy in places-- "the" and "that" far too prolific, which could be removed, as well as a bit of redundancy here and there, likely resulting from assuming the reader won't make the connection. On the other hand, you have kept paragraphs short, making for a better read that's easier on the eyes.

    This is a great start, one I would call "the first draft." So, get busy, Katie, and fine tune this piece!

    Lots of love and hugs, B♥nnieQ

  • wishintreeUK
    December 20, 2005
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    I appreciate your reading this short story Mal, hopefully, it will not always be this way... it seems no matter how we try to help, our efforts always get swallowed up in red tape and we never really know if the contributions we make to some of these worthy causes ever reaches these unfortunate ones.

    I do hope you enjoy the holiday festivities Mal

    megga hugs my dear friend

    ~Katie~

  • wishintreeUK
    December 20, 2005
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    Thank you so much for your support Sammy, writing a short story is a change, also, a different challenge. One thing I enjoy about story writing is that the plot unfurls as we write, it's like going on a journey, not knowing where you are going to end up!

    Always

    ~Katie~


  • Sunshine Always
    December 20, 2005
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    Katie, agree with Sammy here. It never ceases to amaze me that the human race still can't get it right. Your so right!!! With all we have achieved we still have homelessnes, hunger, suffering. Will it all come right or will it be to much to little to late...A truly excellent reminder to us all...Big Chrissy hugs...mal

  • Dreamweaver
    December 20, 2005
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    BEST EVER !

    My Dear Katie, You have surpassed yourself yet again. Not only do you excel as a poet, but also as a storyteller. I am in awe of your talent as a writer my dear Lady.
    This story word be by far the best you have written. It brings the plight of the unfortunate to the fore.
    I congratulate you my dear.


    Always,
    Sammy

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