A Poem Written in a Dream

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"Good morning to you, Anna... I just wrote a poem in a dream! I'm posting the story now..." 2

The Dream3

There I was in Rota, Spain, at the Naval Base. I had just made my bed. I didn’t have to, it was voluntary; the room looked quite similar to my son’s messy college dorm, and the bed just like his bed that I had persuaded him make! My friends were there, an unlikely mix drawn from my childhood years through my adult life. We were not on duty that day so we decided to go to the local town. One friend showed me a cloth map of the area. I marveled at how much land the US Navy was leasing, an entire bay! I thought of all the beaches and resorts that could be built there, and how much oil there was floating in the water right now. I then marveled at how much desert there was in Spain and France, as they both were nearly 100% desert on this map! Where were the French vineyards in all that desert, I wondered. Then I saw the tiny seaside Spanish village we were headed to…4

I found myself in a mall, as if Spain had American-like malls! I sensed my feeling of being uncomfortable walking through the mall with my friends, as I was used to being a maverick and on my own- never did like to follow in or lead in a pack. One of my ever-astute childhood friends found a kiosk in a brightly sunlit corner that was giving away fabulous prizes, and he rushed over. We all followed. After a few friends unsuccessfully tried, I approached. The lady eyed me with a critical eye, I assumed because she was not going to let just anyone try, as it was a high-class operation. I looked like a country bumpkin in my hat and my plaid hunting shirt, but she perhaps saw something in me worthy of a trial. The task was to write a Haiku. She gave me a little clear plastic-wrapped granola-like health bar as an acceptance gift, and it smelled divine. I went to the lady at the next table. She was a plump elderly lady sitting there at the little round table in a colorful, flowery dress, and with the sweet demeanor of Edna Sweetlove. She handed me a tiny metallic pencil about a half an inch long with half-broken lead that could barely write, and that my hands could barely hang on to, and tiny piece of cardboard that the pencil could barely write on, much like a cheap pen on the cheap, waxy-paper of a cheap drugstore notebook. I jokingly asked the lady, “Ok, who is this to?” She replied in a serious, deep smoker’s voice, “Vial Lynn”. By her body language I sensed that it was her name. So I began to write this Haiku in my dream…5

Vial Lynn fled south… 6

(here my friends were joking, and scribbling things on the piece of cardboard. 7

I brushed them away, and concentrated, struggling with the tiny little pencil in my hand…)8

when her love’s heart iced over;9

frost is in her eyes.10

I handed the cardboard with the scrawled poem to the lady, and her lips, perhaps not having moved sideways much in the last few decades, slowly smiled. Not only did this country bumpkin write a proper Haiku, I could see in her eyes, but I had touched her heart just a tiny bit, I thought, with an unsuspected love poem...11

Then I awoke, as I am in the habit of grabbing a pen and notebook when a line or two strike, and I immediately realized I had just written this poem in a dream! 12

Author notes

I had told my AP daughter Malzy while late-night AIM'ing with her that my body was screaming 'sleeeeep sleeeeeep' and my brain was screaming 'wriiiite wriiiiite'. I jokingly told her that I would simply write in my sleep! Little did I know it would actually happen!

I am just glad the kiosk lady didn't say, 'Write a Villanelle'! Now that would have been a feat within a dream, and more of a feat remembering it long enough to type it up upon awaking!

I was so proud and amazed that I IM'ed my only two friends online at the time, Zonia, and my AP sister, SweetSilverNinja...

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  • SexyAngel0418
    December 19, 2005
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    That is sooo awesome AP dad!!! It's kinda wierd but awesome anyways!!! LOL... Great job and I'm glad you posted it!!!

    Hugs,
    beth

  • Catressa
    December 19, 2005
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    Sheesh see I have a gutter mind, my writes would be erotic.. lol

  • always smiling
    December 19, 2005
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    out standing that is awsome congrads i luv it

    Edited on Dec 19, 6:01 p.m. because ''.


  • whispersoftly
    December 19, 2005
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    lol its not a fantasy then you do actually sleep! flipping heck!!!on one of those rare occurances that your head must have touched a pillow! you wrote that, bro you are truly talented! well done i think this is wonderful xx Cheryl


  • bluebethy
    December 19, 2005
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    very nice loved the story that went along with it lol


  • B Chandler Greeters member
    December 19, 2005
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    from all points of view, the mind and body combined has its own mystery and even though there are ppl trying to figure out how that works...theyll never know and this is coming from an empath's pov. as for the write itself, i loved how vivid it was ...like watching tv only in color
    Aunt Rae


  • Breaking The Girl
    December 19, 2005
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    Really awesome. Just the other day, I was dreaming that I wrote this FANTASTIC poem, and during the dream (being that I was half awake, when I was dreaming)I remembered every word, and vowed that I would write it, upon awakening, and as soon as I woke up... It was gone. *sigh*


  • IrishYndina Greeters member
    December 19, 2005
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    Yay! I'm so glad to hear I'm not the only person who writes poems while I'm sleeping lol. The last one I wrote was only four lines long (the short poems definitely seem to work best while sleeping) and was mostly in Latin (which I don't even speak ). But it works, and I even like it (it's called Classics, if I've happened to spark your interest).

    Anyways, I really enjoyed both your haiku and your dream. And the name Vial Lynn - perfect! That's the great thing about dreams...why never know what's going to be dragged from our subconscious next Thanks so much for sharing and happy poetry-filled dreams to you

  • effundo
    December 19, 2005
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    At first I thought here we go but i read through and its pretty punchy and not didactic in the slightest.

    Hope you get a few hits their an impatient bunch on here when it comes to sister story site.


  • December 19, 2005
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    This is really good. The story is full of imagery. I love the way you took a dream, put it on paper, and turned it into a wonderful story. You are a talented writer. Thank you for sharing.

  • Fated Circle
    December 19, 2005
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    different...thats all i have to say about that. although i did enjoy the name. Vial Lynn...how wonderful is that her name is so in tune with melody.
    -nick


  • Anna Emkah
    December 19, 2005
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    You are such a funny man.... I was glad that it was only a Haiku Believe it or not, I woke up with some lines in my head this morning as well. And the first thing I did was jump out of the bed, grap a pen and notebook and writing them down in my bed (I had just got a nice cup of tea from my husband there) and then wrote the rest of the poem. We are funny people eh, the AP poets. lol. Next time you have to travel in your dream to The Netherlands... I am so curious what will happen there. Anna.
    Edited on Dec 19, 9:19 because ''.


  • Edna Sweetlove
    December 19, 2005
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    People are dreaming of me.................... nightmare more like if they saw the swollen state of my ankles and the creases round my eyes. Laugh lines? More like fucking abysses.


  • wbiro
    December 19, 2005
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    Thank you kindly, SweetSilverSister! mrroowrwrwrwrrrrrr...!


  • December 19, 2005
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    Amazing!

    Wow! You are truly a writer, a poet with talent of words beyond compare! Can you just imagine that, that even in your sleep you write, and then you dream and you can remember your dream! Oftentimes, I dream but it is not worth writing at all, not like yours, an adventure in Spain, and even that you were writing a Haiku! That is fantastic, don't you think?
    This story is well written and purely amazing and beautiful imaginary!
    Good work brother tomerick! Well done!
    meooooowwwwwww

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