"I want to go to the beach!" I slammed the door behind me. I was 6 years old and had a huge attitude. This morning I wanted to go to the beach, but my mother refused. I would show them!1
I locked my door and turned up the volume of my hi-fi. I opened my window as quietly as possible ans slipped out, a bag with my towel and sun tan lotion in my hand. I made my way to the beach as quickly as I could.2
Arriving at the beach I was surprised at the amount of people who were there. I yelped as I was jostled from behind. My eyes went wide as I saw the two giants(to my six year old eyes in any case) who ran into me. 3
I set my bag down and quickly stripped down to my bikini, adding sun-tan lotion. I decided to cool of in the ocean before I worked on my tan. I returned to my towel about 15 minutes later, only to find my father standing there. He immediately started scolding me, but he suddenly stopped mid-sentence, his eyes wide.4
I tuned around and was flabbergasted, all the water had disappeared! We stood there in total silence, I guess that was why we heard that funny noise, like an airplane taking off. 5
I didn't know what to make of it, but soon all thoughts about the noise disappeared as I saw a giant wall of water rushing towards us. We stood there paralyzed, one thought screaming through my head..."It's all my fault"6
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i fell so sorry for the six year old girl i just fell like saying "It is not your fault! you can't make the tsunami come no one can stop it and no one can prevent it!"
it was at firs a story that reminded me of well a kid just being a rebel and disobeying her parents but then i trend in to a tradgaty just from her veiw oh please i fell so sad now
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I like this a lot...it's short, sweet and really gets to the point. Is this about the tsunami in Asia last year? A very relevant topic considering it was recently the anniversary. I like this a lot, great write!
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Uhm thats about it. They die right after that I guess
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This is so, so, so, sad and beautiful.
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This is a very good and unique write. But what happens? Are you going to add more sometime, I think this could turn out to be a really cool short story. Anyways good job and keep it up!
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Pretty good
I like it it alot.
but kinda sad in the end T_T
Well good job!
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I can't read this on the computer I am at today - too much glare off the screen and the colours don't stand out enough. Will get back to this on my computer at home later. Sorry. Will applaud anyway, even if I haven't read it yet.
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