military saints promptly imprisoned1
in my eye’s line of duty 2
play with emotion’s atypical acne3
with stinking (((mayday calls4
but guess roses don’t have cell phones5
when ring tones get redundant6
and the shower of your elliptic hot-&-freezing phrases7
is weak like 8
someone dropping by the ceremony you were supposed to attend9
poetry wipes10
the retina11
the freshly unheard12
the fall’s lower lip13
yet not its saliva14
not the pre-historical unaccepted15
with a scrap of Adler’s apparent tear16
and noisy sonatas of a crazy Thanatos17
i could possibly keep rain here18
next to my19
sensual sanctuary20
that is21
never to be touched22
build rusty brick walls23
for dirty food stores24
bring me no clothes25
no umbrella26
no tissue27
in fact i learned quite quickly islands are really nonexistent 28
stripped making love to the fabled29
and disgusting orgasms lost to the )apparently( blind30
i can’t leave doors open for you31
because, you see, i forgot my keys32
stuck to average ~e~iq’s33
and prominent issues34
forgive me for making poverty green35
with your name36
and yes change is the mountain37
whose top38
has cracks here and there39
--cavities restored in its oaks’ teeth—40
blonde angels await their prey41
i throw it with remarkable gestures42
out of un-routine43
clean |in our schizophrenia| where we shouldn’t be44
my dear doc, come the hell here45
to say i’m unable to breathe like one ought to46
time to go, folks, the cemetery is empty with thorns47
i’m throwing it48
like todays49
like heres50
like myself.51
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Once.53
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Author notes
Well this is about some personal facts and feelings I can't talk about.. but I had to get it out. So here it is, sorry no one is likely to understanding 
What did you think? Please comment!
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good poem, thanks for my comments and the corrections on 'the curse of the first born'
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This is so ironic, considering your picture prompt was a girl wrapped around in toilet paper -- if i do remember correct.
This is different from what I've seen of yours. But it was a nice read.
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Yes, you remember correctly. Though I wrote this one a couple years ago and want to do better now
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confusing in the extreme
Well di, while i cam appreaciate the effort that went into writing this piece, i feel as mixed up as you.
Ps...i'm going for a liedown in a dark room. -
i think that was a rather original poem and ive never heard anything like it in my life. good job. i dont think anyone else ever will be able to get it but it's your way of expressing yourself as i have mine so congrats!!
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Thank you, Alicia. Indeed, I was feeling down when I wrote it. It's just too personal so I'm sorry I couldn't be more specific.
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Wow. Very deep. It kind of left me feeling like "Whoa... what's this mean", but then again, it left me feeling kind of down. Very deep and beautifully written. Thanks for entering my contest!
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Powerhouse write
this is abstract meets found poetry.
I loved how this POPS out to the reader in more ways than one angled views
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Thought Provoking
Don't know how or what to comment as I got lost pretty early on. Hate to be such a dunce, but I just don't understand. Sorry
My failing, not yours.
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This poem threw me a curve til I saw your comment at the bottom of the page then it snapped on me deffinately a scream at a torn
Up and very withered society filled with deep images that made me think brilliantly penned thank you for allowing me to comment on your work.. -
Political??? :-O Wow. It was... well this is actually a very personal poem... About society? Maybe. It was like the only way to express some feelings. Thanks for the comment.
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good poem keep up the good work
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Interesting
I didnt really understand it , it seemed somewhat political to me .. But I found myself enjoying the content .. it was a mixed feeling .. Thankyou ,
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