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Of course each side blamed the other. No world leader would shoulder the responsibility for the cataclysm that finally snuffed out the sun. Nobody pressed the red button. No one retaliated. No-one burned the cities with searing heat. No one darkened the sky with a permanent veil of cloud. Deep in their concrete bunkers in the bowels of the dying Earth, the Presidents blamed the Generals, the Generals blamed the Prime Ministers, the Prime Ministers blamed the Heads of State, while the electric fans wheezed to pump in fresh air from the dust-laden sky. These men and women were too important to die. Give them Time.....2
On the fields of battle, the armies, frozen in eternal advance. A fine frost silvered their dead hands, their fingers crooked around the triggers of death. Those who retained complete bodies became fine white memorials to the cause of War. And the hands, the legs, the heads scattered around the field became ice-sculptures of rare beauty. A smothering snow began to fall, white mixed with black, mixed with white.......3
"Mummy, I'm cold. Mummy where's the sun gone? Won't he come up today?"4
"Hush darling, Mummy will sing you to sleep."5
"But I'm so cold. My fingers are cold, my nose is cold, my ears are cold.....6
"Rock a bye baby, on the tree top...."7
"My heart is cold"8
"When the wind blows, the cradle will rock"9
"Cold......"10
"When the bough breaks........"11
And outside, in the gathering darkness, in the woods, in the forests of the whole wide World, the trees were going to sleep...12
Author notes
Nuclear Winter.
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Better dead than red¿? Or perhaps both…
Indeed – I sort of expected a punch line – some ironic comment perhaps about fixing global warming before we went… but I entirely agree with the promulgation of such information – everybody should be aware of what is done to ‘make a profit’ …Oh man your works have come to naught – by short term profits you’ve caught!
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Please God no. This paints so succinctly an appalling prospect. Well written,Keith.
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Wow...
This is really good, you've done a great job of the description and it flows well. Good job.
Rae.
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C'mon Ty, why did I only score a 5/6 for Spelling. Oh, now I see it, i misspelt kataklisum. Oh, rats! And I lost two points on the lead? I'll need to put a touch more graphite in my pencil. And what in the name of the wee man is a Hook? I reckon J.M. Barrie ought to score pretty highly in that area. Well, son, you keep plugging away on your calculator. Perceptive comment, by the way. It was all right for me, too. Here, I've just noticed you've got 13 categories. Are you tristadecophilic? Certainly makes the average harder to work out. Keep up the fitba, laddie.
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'ALL STORIES WILL BE GRADED IN A SCALE 1-6 (6 is the best score)
Originality 4
Creativity 5
Content 5
Rule Compliance 6
Organization 5
Main Idea 5
Supporting details 4
Spelling 5
Punctuation 5
Fluency 4
Lead 4
Hook 4
My personal opinion 4
TOTAL 60
AVERAGE 4.62
RANK 7
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I recycle myself
As I said, we need a brave and fearless, honest government to stem this huge tide. Bleak eh? -
This was great! Awesome work!.... Again... lol
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Very well done! What makes it so terrifying is that it seems so real. I especially like the little boy talking to his mother while she sings him to sleep... very touching scene. Great job bringing this horrific scenario to life!
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EXCELLENT JOB!!!!!
WoW, this is si sad, however we never know whn this will happen, i feel bad for the children mainly,... you have done a great job here, thanks for shring , tour friend Angel
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Awsome description here, very eery and visual! This contest was certainly a challenge, and you've risen to it, great write!!!
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Well Done
What a vision of the future you had there... what an unending horror that would be... No warmth, no sun, no one to keep the children warm...it's like a disaster movie..well done. Dee
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Wow! Totally intense, riveting and powerful. Good job!
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Awesome!
Awesome! Very intense! Keep it up!
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