my [ex] love

1

To be honest 2

It hurts me 3

Really bad 4

Just whenever 5

I think of you 6

But 7

To make you happy 8

And to keep your smile 9

Upon your face 10

It’d be fine 11

To piece my heart 12

Cuz all I want 13

is you 14

to be the most happiness 15

and that’s all 16

the reason 17

I let you go18

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my boyfriend broke up with me today - 11/12/2005

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  • Cheeky paper
    January 7, 2006
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    Hey lovely girl ,

    Thanks for the comment , well , there isn't that bad about me and cherad , we are still be a good friends for each other , whatever he was thinking about I'm respect on them and I'm happy to see him happy with Sarah , that's nice for him to found his soul mate. Anyway I'm still ok , still keep my head up

    Many nice guy waiting for me out there! lol

    I missed you too! how was the trip in Aus! I know it was great , wasnt it? Talk to you soon!

    Love , paper xxx


  • January 7, 2006
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    Hey sweetheart.
    I'm really sorry that things didn't work out. You are a wonderful girl and i'm sure that some great guy will come along and sweep you off your feet, soon.
    I don't know what Cherad was thinking - He's one of my best friends and even I don't know what he was thinking.

    Anyway Pretty Paper Girl
    I must go. I've missed you lately but hopefully we can talk soon.
    Love you sweetie.

    your friend,
    Kalah.
    xxx


  • Cheeky paper
    December 24, 2005
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    Hi Amanda , thnks for your comment I'm truly appreciated on it , I know being hurt like this's suck but i have no choise , even now i've still have feelings to him .. dont know what to do as well , thnks once again.. I'm off to read yours now
    -papergirl-


  • December 24, 2005
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    Lovely

    This is a great poem. It's beautiful. I love the emotion put into it as well. Lots of people can probably relate to this, which makes it an even better write. I'm sorry this had to happen to you as well. Being hurt like that sucks. Well I hope things get better for you. Also I wanted to tell you I wrote a new write called: Never(Revised). I guess people think it's better then "Never". Well Lovely write. TTYL SINcerly -Amanda*

  • Cheeky paper
    December 14, 2005
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    hehehe Thanks so much Nika , I love you a lot and it's okie about what akunin did with me , dont too mad , thnks for being there for me always .. say hi to Dasha and Danil for me too , they both are wonderful friends ..
    xxxx papergirl


  • Regal Aurora silver member
    December 13, 2005
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    MUST KILL AKUNIN!!! he just makes me SO mad. i cant beleve he would actually hurt you like that.
    <3Lia


  • December 12, 2005
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    i liked it too.... very much!!!!!!
    very different and original and well written
    well done great write!

  • Cheeky paper
    December 11, 2005
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    Thanks so much for da comment 1heart1love1soul hmm .. maybe my happiness isnt with a guy , i dont know i cant trust them again , guys always hurt me badly .. anyway thnks once again..
    xxx papergirl


  • December 11, 2005
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    Well done. Plain and simple. I like that. Good one. I hope all is good for you though. You'll find your own happiness. It just takes time, know what I mean. And so keep writin the way you do and take care your selfy.

  • Cheeky paper
    December 11, 2005
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    Hi Xxbrokenxnside69xX thnks for the comment by the way this is a poem , it didnt let me post as a poem in some reason when i posted this piece then i loged in to writestory.com and posted it on .. hehehe anyway im glad you liked my piece
    xxx

  • Cheeky paper
    December 11, 2005
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    Hi girl , thnks for da comment , yeah its really hurt and i dont really know what to do , my sister told me I should to be happy and let him go to be with someone he loves now , for his happiness.. well , i m try not to cry but hey my tears is really flowing along my cheeks right here .. thnks once again! I know things will get better but how long it would take? forever? lol
    love ya-


  • December 11, 2005
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    awe gurl im sorry and i love this poem it was sad! and well im here ya know! loved it! gr8 tjob
    ~Emily

  • That Special Girl
    December 11, 2005
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    I am sorry, Love. I know this might hurt for a very long time but I promise you things will get better.

    This was a very sweet poem, though. Wonderful write!

    ♥♥


  • December 11, 2005
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    short but straight to the point, it was cute, liked the emotion in it. Lots of people can relate to that. Keep it up!
    Kelsey


  • xXxbecca10o8o7xXx
    December 11, 2005
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    this is a reallly great write i loved it and i loved the emotion in this piece i can totally relate and this is a very heartfelt piece i really liked the flow but this is more like a poem then a story but i loved it anyway great write thanx for sharing this with all of us here at allpoetry keep it up!!! you are a amazing writer and this is a amazing write
    LoVe Ya
    ~BeCcA~

    you are a great writer
    keep up the great and awesumly awesum work!!!

  • beautifulbrat
    December 11, 2005
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    i like this. its full of emotion. yea it hurts to lose someone that you love. great write though. keep up the good work

  • Yami
    December 11, 2005
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    exellent

    I liked it....and I can really relate to it.I love the emotion you pou into it. and I am really sorry for your loss.. great write

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