EYEWITNESS 2 NEWS1
(A live news report)2
"BREAKING NEWS!3
A TORNADO HAS BEEN SPOTTED OVER KANSAS CIT-"4
"Wichita!"5
"WHAT?"6
"Wich-i-ta!!"7
"A TORNADO HAS BEEN SPOTTED OVER KANJITA CI..."8
"No! Wichita, Kansas"9
"A TORNADO HAS BEEN SPOTTED OVER THE STATE OF KANSAS..."10
"Its not that big!".11
"...WHERE MANY FARM HOMES ARE IN DANGER. MANY CITIZENS HAVE BEEN EVAC..."12
"No evacuation!"13
"NO ONE HAS LEFT THEIR HOMES AT THIS TIME, THOUGH THEY SHOULD HAVE.14
WITNESS CLAIM TO HAVE SEEN REMNANTS..."15
"Its intact."16
"..."17
"The House was intact!"18
"WITNESSES CLAIM TO HAVE SEEN AN INTACT HOUSE FLYING ...INSIDE?"19
"yes."20
"...WITHIN THE STORM. WITNESSES ALSO CLAIM TO HAVE SEEN AN OLD WOMAN...21
OH FOR HEAVEN'S SAKE..."22
"Tell them."23
"AN OLD WOMAN RIDING A BICYCLE IN THE STORM WITH A....WITH A DOG IN THE BASKET...24
OK...THAT'S IT. I'M THROUGH---"25
"Don't go!"26
"I'm done!"27
"Wait! Who's gonna do this if you don't?"28
"..."29
"..."30
"..."31
"UM, TESTING...TESTING...1...2...3..."32
(12-09-2005)33
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Comments
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Thank you, Tyler!
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'ALL STORIES WILL BE GRADED IN A SCALE 1-6 (6 is the best score)
Originality 6
Creativity 6
Content 6
Rule Compliance 6
Organization 5
Main Idea 5
Supporting details 4
Spelling 5
Punctuation 5
Fluency 5
Lead 5
Hook 5
My personal opinion 6
TOTAL 69
AVERAGE 5.31
RANK 2
Comments: This was very funny. My mom and I love it. Well deserved second place.
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'ALL STORIES WILL BE GRADED IN A SCALE 1-6 (6 is the best score)
Originality 6
Creativity 6
Content 6
Rule Compliance 6
Organization 5
Main Idea 5
Supporting details 4
Spelling 5
Punctuation 5
Fluency 5
Lead 5
Hook 5
My personal opinion 6
TOTAL 69
AVERAGE 5.31
RANK 2
Comments:
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aslanlight, I'm glad you liked this. I hope you do enter because the more the merrier! ~Doc
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Keith, I'm glad you liked this. ~Doc
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Tyler, I'm glad you got a laugh out of this. Thanks for an awesome sontest! ~Doc
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This is hilarious and I laughed out loud! I was going to enter with a funny one but I don't think I could top this one.
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Follow the yellow brick road, Doc. Hello Doc....Hello.....Can you hear me? Oh God, if I only had a brain.......
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holy shnit that was trucking hilarious! lmao
Anyway, what I meant to say was that this was vvery histarical. Ha! I was laughing so hard! -
LOL
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no no no...not the Flintstones background music when you read my comment please. think back to the music when the wicked witch lady takes off on her bicycle with Toto. being this is 2005, a new millenium, I don't drive away on bicycles anymore, only old hooptie Chevys.
how about an apology to those poor Kansas people? well, no worries, they have no power, no computer access since the last tornado anyway...
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NBG,
Thank you for reading my piece! I'm glad you got a laugh!
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Jo,
I have this picture of some Flintstone Chevy now.... LOL!!!
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OK...I'm taking my basket of Toto, pulling away from the curb now, pedalling the old Chevy away...
what happened to you Doc? you're making fun of Kansas now? these kind of reports are serious stuff out there in Kansas. heck, do you know what it's like living in Tornado Alley? gotta go now, the winds are starting to kick up...
I remain, Glenda the Good Witch from the North,
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LMAO i thought it was a crack up it was a really great write with a crack up end this is awsome
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spamwitch,
I'm glad you like it! Thanks for turning me onto the contest!
~Doc
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RAWL!!! OMG It's Dorothy too!! Funny Doc, very creative, and to the criteria as well, you've an awsome imagination, good luck in the contest, was such a brilliant criteria!!!
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