We're going to Grandma and grandpa's for dinner. I'm so excited; we haven't been there for months because grandpa's been sick. We'll have turkey and my favourite, grandma's home made plum pudding with all the sixpences she saves because "they have real silver in not like the 5 cent pieces that are mostly nickel" she says.1
And there will be presents. Grandma always has the best presents. Last year she gave me a dollhouse; she made all the soft stuff. Grandpa built the house and furniture. It sits in my bedroom so I can look at it and play with it everyday. It even has a pretend family just like ours, with a wood and cloth mum, dad, Jake, Sarah and me. 2
When we arrive at grandma's house we tumble out of the car. It was long trip. Sarah was sick and Jake pinched me when no-one was looking, so I cried.3
We stand on grandma's porch giggling to sing the Georgie porgie Christmas song, the one that goes 'we all like Georgie porgie, so bring us some here.' Grandma opens the door. She looks as if she's been crying; there are funny black marks on her face.4
Daddy reaches over kisses her and says "What's wrong Ma."5
Grandma cries for real and truly then and says, "It's your dad. All you have time for is goodbye."6
I don't understand, why we would say goodbye when we had only just come? But we tiptoe in to grandpa's bedroom and see him in bed. Perhaps he is sick again. Everyone went over to him and I snuggle close to make him feel better. He openes his eyes and smiles. Then he sort of goes away and grandma, dad and mum cry. My tummy hurts. And no one gives us any dinner.7
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I have written a story of 300 words or at least that's what my word count tells me. I hope it's ok.
What did you think? Please comment!
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Remember this title, returned the favor and here I am again. Love grandma poems or stories.
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A Very Big Congratulations for your winning entry!! Great job!
Let the ink flow and Have a Merry Christmas! 
Blessings, Sandi
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Congrats on winning bronze in this contest.
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Wow.
But OH. Well told story here and congratulations on the third place win! Oh. Sentimental it makes me feel. Well done, you should be very proud of your story here
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First off - your word count is right on.
This starts out so happy and ends so sad. isn't it amazing the impact you can have in 300 words? It never ceases to amaze me what can be accomplished in such a small space.
I like some of the little things that you have added in like the song, it gives this a sense of realness.
Thank you for this poignant story and good luck.
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So very real this reads, poignant, bittersweet thru the eyes of a child who didn't really understand what happened and why Christmas dinner was never served. A heartfelt pen that was a treasure to the heart to read. Thank you!
Best wishes in this contest! Have a happy holiday!
Sandi
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Oh, Lynne, this is so wonderful! I smiled and I laughed, and I felt every emotion imaginable. I do wish you luck in the contest, but I feel you won't need it! I truly love this! Hugs, Patricia
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'Kethry', I like your story, a little sad, a little joyous, beautifully written and a joy to read. Thank you.
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