The second I enter the dream, I know there is something wrong. I am standing in a graveyard, where a musty smell drifts on the air; and a silvery mist rises from the frozen ground, encircling me as it meanders towards the night sky. At the lower end of the cemetery stands a small chapel. I begin to pick my way towards it, through masses of unattended graves, but I am halted by a sharp cracking sound coming from behind me. I spin round just fast enough to see a silhouette stoop to hide behind a tombstone, not far from where I am stood. I am not alone.1
I freeze in my tracks, scanning the area I saw the strange shadow; hoping to discover exactly who - or what - this apparently shy figure is. I kneel down beside a nearby grave, and peer out from behind a lichen-covered headstone. The shadow does the same. Then, without warning, the mysterious figure begins a slow, purposeful walk towards me.2
Suddenly, I realize the potential danger if the situation, and stand up. Still the figure advances. I turn to run, but not being the most sure-footed person on the planet, I trip; knocking my head on a nearby gravestone as I tumble to the ground. The last thing I see before I black out is a pair of olive green eyes staring directly into mine. 3
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High up in the north of Dreamland, over the Dales and through the Tangled Woods, a majestic and gothic castle stands. Home to Aldezhar, it is a terrible place. Dungeons deep in the body of the building harbour nasty secrets, whilst the Lord’s chamber itself is decorated with all sorts of grisly tokens from the countless murders he has performed. The bedspread is a patchwork of human skin, and his collection of shrunken heads is by far the most extensive in the land; but Aldezhar’s personal favourite is the black and silver chest beneath his desk.5
Inside the chest, if you ever took it upon yourself to open it, you would discover Aldezhar’s collection of spleens. Each of them has been sucked of all its juices, Aldezhar having sucked the bloody snack from them himself, savoring the diverse assortment of flavors his victims provide. Aldezhar has always had this bizarre obsession with spleens. He is addicted to them as a smoker is addicted to cigarettes, always craving his next blood thirsty feast.6
And he has already chosen his next victim. He has managed to trap her in Dreamland, with the help of his demons. Sat now, at his desk, he is watching her in his crystal ball; watching as she trips over her own feet, and falls to the ground; knocking her head on a headstone as she tumbles to the frozen ground of a graveyard.7
Author notes
The second chapter of my Dreamland series.
'Starring' - Aldezhar based on an original concept by Theonenobodywants (Formally Lucifus Black).Spleens and all, Jesse!!!
Hope you enjoy it !!!!1
Shadow xXx
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This is turning out GREAT!!! lol... i know Jesse... sounds a lot like him.. lol... great story, i can't wait for the next chapter!
beginning: 4, language: 4, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 4, characters: 5.
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awsome
that thats awsome....i loved it.. -
This is great!! lol very intriguing! i hope my character is out in! lol
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great, I want to read more. silver hair is cool *wink-wink*
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Wow, this chapter is just as good as the last one, I'm gonna have to keep reading, since meh just loves a goode story lol cya later
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Craving more....
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this part of the story is as good as the first part i love the imagery, also how you make the main character real like she could be anyone 'I turn to run, but not being the most sure-footed person on the planet, I trip;' it makes her seem more real i like the way you.ve split the story to i a big fan of the style of writing please write more!
Jacqui
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this is a nice story i like the concept of dreamland look forward to reading more
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Write more!!!!!!
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excellent!
i love it!
i particularly like this part
"I turn to run, but not being the most sure-footed person on the planet, I trip; knocking my head on a nearby gravestone as I tumble to the ground. "
that sounds like something i would do,i am such a klutz.
so far the story sounds awesome, i like the spleen sucker, he's dark disgusting and dangerouse-the 3 Ds
great job
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sweet, this i like this, i wonder who the shadow is, i can't wait to see the next chapter, thanks for telling me it was out, i added you to my favorite, and i will be looking forard to see what you come up with next. i can't wait.
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sweet. this was awesome. so capturing. please keep them coming
this is a wonderful story so far!
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Very dark and disturbing. Disturbing is good
Excellent so far!! Can't wait for Ch3!!
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W()()T
YES!!!! THANKYOUTHANKYOUTHANKYOU!! You make me seem so cool . I love how this is turning out so far! Keep cranking out chapters, i'm eager to see how nasty i get XD.
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awesome
omg, I'm completely addicted!!! I've never read anything like this and I can't wait to read more! -
As I read each chapter of Dreamland the more I want to become a character. You really are doing a great job with these chapters. Oh and good luck with that contest. Maybe next time I'll be reading about Jazella! Or maybe not, nevertheless is was awesome!!!!!
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way to go, that's a nice contunuation
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this is awesome!!!! a great chapter 2! i can't wait to read the next part!
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OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Write more!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Suspence is sooooooooooo EVIL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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wooooooo! I LOVE JESSE!! He rocks ass....lol. His character is awesome aswell, im glad you made him the bad guy, lol. It's really well written, could be longer, but otherwise really good. Keep the ink flowing, i like the way this story is going
xoxox
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WOOOOOOOOOOW....this TOTALLY ROCKED! I LOVED IT! sorry had to get that out this is amazing! it just keeps getting better and better i cant wait for more!!! am totally adidcted to this!!! amazing write! keep it up and write more!! heehee love you for ever hunni mwah
kerri xXx ♥
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