and now we are here1
once more this murderous story2
and pick up where we left3
i take her from the closet 4
to a dark secluded alley5
torture her a bit6
ill go Hannibal without the eat7
and cut some flesh from the bitches face8
how do you like that i bet it felt good9
i know it did for me relieved some stress10
the whip of nine tales is always fun11
i hit hard and remove slowly12
and watch it tear flesh and meat 13
from her weakening body14
the music grows louder 15
she hears it i can tell16
as she screams out in pain17
i laugh maniacally don't you love it18
her wretched screams worse then yours 19
they tear at my mind and soul20
but i do not let it bother me21
i am better than that stronger to 22
i have a name or too for her to 23
as i blow smoke into her face 24
and pour alcohol onto her ever burning flesh25
i call her a slut,26
tramp and a whore 27
she denies what shes done 28
and knows its a dumb move29
i caught the bitch in my bed 30
i don't need more 31
i bring out the needles32
and put them in her eyes33
cross your heart hope to die 34
bitch got a needle in her eye35
feel the pain i yell36
as her body wretches in horror 37
i have no ash tray so i put it out on her skin 38
I'm not done yet no where close 39
are you having fun watching this i sure hope so...40
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Comments
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gasps quite intense.... a bit more violent than what i typicially like to read...but quite good none the less...
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Hmmm... This was pretty good. I'm not into he whole blood and guts thing. I like the part about putting needles into her eyes. It made me laugh.
Anywho, something that really bothered me was the Roman Numerals you used. In proper Roman Numerals, you're not supposed to use four of the same numeral in a row. So, the number four is supposed to be IV. Keep writing. ^_^
Hell Angel
Edited on Dec 02, 10:33 p.m. because ''. -
lol thanx whoa you kno what im watchin tv i swear they jus said there was a drunk barbie lmao
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goodness the violence!! its great
Jarred
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