I hate everything about you

i hate everything about you 1

the way you walk2

the way you talk3

how you think you're all that 4

i hate everything about you5

your smile 6

your laugh 7

even that smug little look on your face8

you wont just leave 9

you wont just die10

you'll never go away11

i hate everything about you12

why do you make me do this13

are you insane or something 14

i cant breathe around you 15

i hate everything about you16

you thought you had me17

i was just a trophy 18

a prize for looking good19

now who looks what 20

i hate everything about you21

that's why i did it 22

that's why i killed you 23

i couldn't stand the pressure 24

you little bastard25

i hated everything about you26

the way you looked at me27

the way you laughed at me28

the truth of the matter is 29

you were the prize for me30

i hated everything about you31

i showed you off 32

like a dog to my friends33

they said you were cute 34

like a puppy dog 35

i hated everything about you36

isn't it ironic 37

how life can turn itself 38

i guess that's the game39

now don't you....??40

-hate everything about me?- 41

Isn't it beautiful 42

the sound of the music you must face43

the sweet melody 44

of vengeance and rage45

succulent and desirable46

once more left to think47

on why you make mistakes48

i can hear it now 49

even out in the orchards50

as pictures of the field blow through my mind51

standing over you 52

the piano 53

now the harp54

mixed music such a beautiful nature 55

to hate everything about everybody56

i can see it now a ball room 57

full of dancers58

in beautiful golden dresses59

flowing on the ground 60

as they are spun61

and once more by their gorgeous dates62

dancing to the music of your sweet death 63

flowing through your mind64

as we turn to speak once more ever so 65

face the music and love everything about yourself66

-because i hate everything about you-67

Author notes

this is for all those overbearing men who think women are just trophys to go on their arm we have minds too you know and i just spoke mine...

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  • Deiago
    December 14, 2005
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    Heart felt

    Hate is such a strong word but then again so is love. The text in this poem really sends a message. Love it

  • Teranika
    December 14, 2005
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    Wow. I like the message and the way it's written, but I didn't like how only some contractions had apostrophes (sp?). I guess that's just a pet peeve of mine.

    ^_^

  • poetic mairin
    December 14, 2005
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    Good

    In most poems, it sounds good when a line is repeated...but You can't continue to do it throughout an entire poem if it going to be extremely long. Other than that mute point, I like the poem very much, and I also would just advice you to use proper grammar..i.e. capitalizing sentances and putting in some punctuation...

    Blessed be and Slaitne,
    Mairin


  • lovesong
    December 13, 2005
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    thought i don't usually read pieces like this it was nice to read. it seems like the writing style evolved toward the end of your piece. keep up the good writing.


  • Sullen Stranger
    December 11, 2005
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    I think it's very well written, good pattern and emotion.


  • Sullen Stranger
    December 11, 2005
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    so, you don't know men huh?

  • Big Hearted one
    December 9, 2005
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    good but too dark

    this was good but to dark for my taste

    i hate everything about you
    the way you walk
    the way you talk
    how you think you're all that


    once again good but to dark for me


  • sounds like rain
    December 9, 2005
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    I think most girls/women have been with a guy that was a total jerk, that just sorta used them. I've been there...good poem/story thing. The imagery is good...the end is awsome with all the ball dancers dancing to the music he has to face. It's sarcastic and caustic, cold and very good.

    Good read.

    -Meg


  • spamwitch
    December 9, 2005
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    Angry write about something that I have been a victim of myself, so I appreciate the angry overtone, funny thing is that this guy who did not care about me one bit, was doing this and not to say I'm am monserous looking, but not really the trophy type ya know..Sad part, was I truly did care for him.. Thanks for your contribution to the cause! Put them in their place but good.


  • ionabus
    December 9, 2005
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    I love the flow to this. It has a really good beat which I feels amplifies the hate expressed. Nicely achieved and a very good topic to write on woman just being trophies.


  • -PrettyNightMares-
    December 7, 2005
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    hey sissy i know it is a little late for this but i love you i have just had a bad day at school and i really need to talk to someone please call or write oh yeah i do like your poems tho..

  • Christopher Sicard
    December 2, 2005
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    She wasn't plagarising anything. There are millions upon millions works of art, music, literature, and poetry in the world and new ones are being created every day. If you have written a poem, it's most likely that the title you used has already been used. Her title was just more noticable because it was in pop-culture recently. I have a poem called "The Red" and I'm not stealing anything from Chevelle. Just thought I would clear that up for you.

  • angelofthecentury
    December 2, 2005
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    you know you dont have to be so rude about it you can ask and uh the only thing i ever heard that on was a song and i wasnt even thinking about the song i came u with the name after because it says that so many times and further you will be blocked from viewing anything get over your self pathetic...-cassie-

  • Darc Soul
    December 2, 2005
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    excellent

    wow lots of emotion and this story describes what i think of someone so i can totally relate to it. you did an excellent job at it. thanks for sharing and keep it up..............................................................


  • Ethereal One gold member
    December 2, 2005
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    very well written

    This is very powerful and true in many situations. Not just to use as a trophy, but use as a sexual toy for their own satisfaction! They do love playing the game and smiling that conniving smile, all the while knowing they are just using us.
    You expressed your emotion well in this poem.

  • armysoutherngal
    December 2, 2005
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    really good

    this is pretty good! you should read my poem entitled "TO guys love Girls" our poems have the same message!
    Men think that they are all that, they call this planet a man's world... Kiss my butt women do all the work we bore the child and bring home the bacon, men just scratch their butts and try to get the hottest girl that will ""be"" with them, so they can go to their friends and say "look who I got"
    I feel you honey.
    armysoutherngal

  • lordmonkey
    December 2, 2005
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    .
    Edited on Dec 02, 10:03 p.m. because 'Delete'd by request from those who didn't get the joke'.

  • lordmonkey
    December 2, 2005
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    .
    Edited on Dec 02, 10:03 p.m. because 'Delete'd by request from those who didn't get the joke'.

  • Kristina198989
    December 2, 2005
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    great

    great job! i absolutely love this. you have talent. keep it up. i hope to see more from you soon .

  • hasty girl
    December 2, 2005
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    very good. i like the way you write this

  • angelofthecentury
    November 29, 2005
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    thank you sweetie


  • -Jarred-
    November 29, 2005
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    wow....lots of emotion...very very good! keep it up

    ~Jarred

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