On a cold winters day Lily was walking down the New York streets, when she noticed an old woman, huddled against the cold, wearing a threadbare blanket. She had an odd assortment of things laid out in the snow and an old empty coffee cup. Feeling sorry for the old woman Lily stopped to make a purchase.1
"What would you like dearie?"? the old woman asked in a low whispery voice2
Lily bought three things. A tube of crimson lipstick, a black cat collar with silver spikes and a juicy red apple.3
She gathered her purchases, thanked the old woman and continued home.4
Once inside her apartment Lily went to her mirror and applied the blood red lipstick. Rubbing her lips together she noticed a strange tingling sensation. It passed almost as quickly as it came, so she soon forgot about it. She then tried on the choker. It was a little tight, but still comfortable.5
Finally she sunk her white teeth into the bright skin of the red apple. Her choker suddenly tightened and out of panic she tried to swallow the piece whole. The apple lodged itself in her throat. Lily tried to cough, but she couldn't gain enough air. Her jaw had clamped shut and she was slowly losing oxygen. She struggled to remove the choker, but she failed and felt herself getting weaker and weaker. As she surrendered to the darkness she thought she heard a low whispery voice say "Mirror, mirror on the wall who's the fairest of them all?"6
When the coroner viewed the body he found cause of death to be asphyxiation. He never noticed the venom lipstick, the shrinking choker or the arsenic coated apple.7
On a cold winters day a psychopathic old woman was walking down the New York streets, looking for a new selling spot. She found one and settled down to wait for her next victim.8
Author notes
this is the story version of my contest poem.
i wrote this first,but had to change it so the poem is kinda different.
let me know what you think.
What did you think? Please comment!
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great one not that bad.
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glad you liked it
but its a snow white kinda story.
you have good ideas,but i dunno.
i give you full permission to continue them if you wish
just make sure you ackknowledge me in your comments
the reason she does it is because she is evil/insane and wants to be beautiful.she think s by killing pretty girls she will be.
oy new idea popped into head,vampires...spells...blood...
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AWESOME!!!
HOLY SHIT! That was one of the best stories that I have read of yours so far. Besides from the others this one is the best! I really like how you drescibed, after she had died that is, the venom lipstick, shrinking choker and the arsenic coated apple. But, you know what I think would be even better? If the story went on. What if one of the next "victims" didn't use the stuff bought right away? What if one of the "victims" just bought something to give her money and threw the stuff out? What is the outcome of the old lady doing this? Is it for beauty? Or for sheer pleasure? I think you should continue this with something really out of the ordinary and that no one would expect. Maybe it's not really an old lady. It could be a man in disguise trying to trick the people so he could have a pleasure of killing people. Please, continue. -
thanks glad you liked it
if you havent already,read the poem,you might like it
thanks again,peace -
This is a great story!!! Seriously. Well done!!!
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still good as ever XD i love the dark poems that tell a complelling story XD
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lol
i guess you really liked the story!
thanks for the kind words,glad you liked it
you put a huge smile on my face!
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I LOVED THIS SSOO MUCH!!! It was totally much better than the poem, as I said it would . Great Job Lady!! You did an EXCELLENT job, props to you girl. The imagery and detail was awesome, and very thorough. Great Through-and-Through!! Congrats to you
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With Love,
ArchAngel
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