"AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH! I'm on FIIIIIIRE!" I shouted running out of the burning building. As the blinding pain seared my flesh and made my soul cry out in agony, those in the crowd began screaming in horror.
I don't blame them though, I mean I wasn't much to look at before, let alone on fire. 1
"OHGODPLEASESOMEONEHELPME!" I continued. The shrieks got even louder as I shouted and I continued flailing wildly and smashing into things since I could not see anything anymore because of all the fire searing my eyes.2
I had wondered if anyone had heard me through the crowd but shortly after I heard "PASS! PASS" then shortly after "That's fire extinguishers dumbass!". "OHMYFUCKINGGODHELPME!" I shouted before remembering to Stop,drop and roll and flopping to the ground. 3
After rolling some I felt considerably less on fire. Then just as suddenly as that, I felt suddenly on fire again. "Holy Shit that dude just set him on fire again!" someone somewhere screamed. Moments later I died.
Author notes
True Story... very painful.
Comments
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mysterious
I say mysterious because I feel that it may have some meaning to it that goes farther than what you wrote. It's like, (forgive me if my interpretation is incorrect) you feel that everything is out of control and when you finally get things to calm down, something else is thrown at you and burns you like a fire and you feel like a dead person. That's just my interpretation and I think that this is an amazing short-story.
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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What the hell?
Story of my life right there. Lol
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Are you a witch or a lumberjack?
Cause I'm gonna sue you.
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lol, nice.
This reminds me a lot of the woman who committed suicide in a mall (I forgot where...but it was on the news, I swear!!). She put herself on fire and told everyone not to touch her. She ran, and screamed her lungs out...made it to the pavement outside...and yeah, someone put out the flames on her.
Apparently she didn't manage to die, but she did manage to get 3 degree burns. She got about... more than 70% on burned tissue. And yeah... it's not something recommended on doing when trying to kill one's self.
Great piece though. xD It sounds funny (omg, how sad x__X I'm making fun of a person that died in flames!) but wow...it's creditable (almost, but still creditable 
--however that is possible... it is).
Lol, but it could've used some spacing and more wording. xD
Great job though. A short description's fine anyway.
beginning: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, characters: 5.
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