Niikaluna, looked back over her shoulder,Bellesifur turned around to see, her weeping, her tears ran down her cheeks and into the small pond, when they hit the surface, they shone like liquid moonlight,surrounded by soil, "Please, Niikaluna, don't cry, as long as you believe in me I will always be with you...." and he disapeared like mist in the moonlight, and left her standing there, with his words ringing in her ears, I will be with you.....
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Its a very long sentence but I hope it works!!!
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Thank GOD you entered my contest!!!!
I needed a longer sentence, because people were giving me these scrawny sentences and yours has depth and a story to it. Great job, FINALIST!! Good luck in my contest!
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Cool.... I liked the words in themselves, but the spelling and grammer isn't good.... It doesn't seem to be a run-on sentence, but there are other puncuation marks I believe you used wrong, and you might want to try spell check.... With mistakes like that it makes everything harder to read....
but, we all make mistakes, now don't we?
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