Rani's Confession

You're a vampire, I a slayer against your species. I should kill you; make you wish we'd never met. I should destroy you, thus claiming the world out of vampiric rule! But there's something about you that's different...1

You feast on human blood, but you make it painless and polite. You don't have that killer aspect to you at all. 2

In fact, I actually accept you despite your race.

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I don't have any of it posted. It's still the extreamly rough NaNo version. If you like it, I start editing in December.

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  • Bonko The Clown
    February 2

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    I'd add a werewolf and maybe an abominable snowman. You don't hear those used very often on Storywrite. A good battle between an abominable snowman and a vampire would be exciting to read about.


  • Tiger-Lily gold member
    January 20

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    Agh, this has a major disadvantage no matter how much I try to be objective. I'm out of my vampire love stage. As in, so far out of it, I steer clear of the "Vampire Section" table at bookstores.

    The star-crossed lovers thing is a fun idea to play with but I didn't really accept the reasoning for this vampire being "different". It sounded way too Twilight to me. You should probably know I loathe vampire-romance. So when I do write vampires, they're not loving creatures.

    But nonetheless, well written in other aspects. Thanks for entering.

    ♥ HT


    • Kage Kokoro
      January 20
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      It isn't love, it's acceptance. Those are two different aspects right there.
      Also, he's different because in a world were vampires have enslaved the human race, he disagrees and thinks they should have free will.

      It is NOTHING like the damned, acursed book Twilight.


      • Tiger-Lily gold member
        January 20
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        Thank you for the last sentence.

        Taken in the context of their world, this is definitely a secret. Maybe the gravity of this wasn't put right. So I didn't get how important this was. That's what I was judging on.

        - HT


  • Cranberri
    November 15, 2009
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    Rani and her gay buddy!! lol


  • Sonic Banana
    November 14, 2009

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    RANI????????????????? NO WAY!!!!!!! THAT'S THE NAME OF AN EVIL TIME LORD IN MY FAVORITE SHOW HEE HEE HEE


  • CodeLyokoLover
    November 14, 2009

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    IT'S GOOD. I THINK U SHOULD WRITE MORE, I WOULD LOVE 2 READ MORE.

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