A place to be

My favorite place for me to be.1

Is a place, that's just for me.2

It's an open window that's in my mind,3

where the memories treat me so kind.4

It's different every time that I go,5

beautifully peaceful & time goes so slow.6

Smiles of the past of family and friends.7

Amazing sunsets, and any heartbreak mends.8

I can't think of a better place to be,9

when I'm thinking about you or me.10

It costs no money, no tokens or gold,11

and won't be a strange place when I am old.12

And I can come back anyway or anytime,13

without having to have any reason or rhyme.14

In my mind I can go any place or anywhere,15

without taking a day to get myself there.16

Where snow capped mountains and rivers run free,17

the bluest of skies and sweetest of serenity.18

A place where I hold the most cherished places,19

blossoming fields and the most wonderful faces.20

I can close my eyes & talk to the man upstairs,21

give him my praise and share all of my prayers.22

and I can be back home at the one drop of a hat,23

I can do all this without leaving the spot I'm at.
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  • Jalalbad
    September 22, 2008

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    I like this poem because it relates that the Kingdom of God in in us. That's what I thought about this write...

  • Mark Rickerby
    January 17, 2006
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    Nice balance and rhythm. Great philosophy, too. If we teach our hearts and minds to get along together, we don't have to go anywhere to be happy. We all have individual universes contained inside our own heads. Your "happy place" sounds great, but where and how did you get the post card? lol

    Nice one!

    Mark

  • cherche -d -ame
    January 13, 2006
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    I have seen quite a few places in this world , however a vacation that I solely take in my mind is definitely the best yet, for as you say...it is free and one can travel lightly. Your rhyming is perfect in this ( it lends an upbeat tone to the entire write) and may I ask...is the picture maybe Mt.Rainier?
    z
    reenie

  • JurneesRainbow
    January 12, 2006
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    2 Thumbs, a toe, and an ear hair up!

    Hi, I really like your poem. It's a different angle, which is always nice. The picture is beautiful. Thank you for entering.

    ~BettY~


  • Frogzter gold member
    January 8, 2006
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    ANother lovely peice! Thanks for sharing this and good luck in the contest!
    Frog


  • Frozentearz
    January 8, 2006
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    Once again some wonderful thoughts put to pen
    thank you for sharing
    FrozenTears

  • Esperanza
    January 2, 2006
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    This is an excellent poem! You did a marvellous job with the rhyme scheme, and you vocabulary is amazing! This poem has a very nice flow. I love the second stanza! You chose the words to write this poem very well. I really enjoyed reading this. Great write! Good luck in the contest! Thanks for entering.
    ---Esperanza

  • Dare2Dream
    December 29, 2005
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    Wow this one's HUGELY enjoyable! Definitely one of my favorites in this contest... however if you don't mind me saying so... line 2 in verse 5 sounds a little 'crowded' if u know what I mean... it doesn't read like the rest... but tell ya what... I told you not to exceed 12 lines but this is one of the VERY few longer ones I absolutely LOVED.. this was awesome! Thanks for entering my contest!

    Dare2Dream

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