The First Day Of School (part three)

Omar was missing.  Nobody knew where he was the next day.  The teachers hadnt seen him either.  The bell rang.  Everyone walked to class.  Omar's girlfriend walked in first.  "Aaaarrrrrrgh!" she screamed.  The class ran in.  Omar was on the floor- dead.  His girlfriend, Ashley was crying.  The teacher called the police.1

School was cancled that day.  Ashley was with her friend.  "Ok.  This is getting too weird," Said her friend.  "I know.  First Jenny, then Omar.  Who will be next?  I mean, what if WE die?" said Ashley worried.  "I don't know, Ashley.  I just don't know." said her friend.  "Has this school gone mad?  Who would kill an inicint teenager?" said Ashley.  2

It was the next day and Ashley was waiting for the bell to ring at school.  'There better not be anything weird today.' Ashley thought.  Ashley went to her locker to get her stuff because the bell was about to ring.  She started to hear voices echoing in her head.  "Ashley" the voice repeated.  It got louder and louder. "Hi Ashley," said a weird voice behind her.  She looked behind her.  It was Omar and Jenny.  Ashley froze.  She noticed you could see right through them.  Ashley saw him take a gun out of his pocket.  She ran. "ASHLEY!  WE NEED YOU TO JOIN US!  WE'RE LONELY!" they said.  Ashley ran and ran.  Then she reached a dead end.  She heard a gun shot,saw a brite light, and died.3

POW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!4

Author notes

Thanks for the advice from the people who read the first and second book!  Its alot better.

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  • dreams b4 doubts
    October 23, 2005
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    Wow I read all of them and they were very good!!!! You are a great writer. Good work.