We fall in love with dropping stars
Desperate to know we're not alone
We fall in love too numb to know
The truth that we are all alone1
We fall in love in hope to gain
Things worthy of our love, our pain
We face the world, we win the race,
We rise above in love, with grace2
We fall in love, love conquers heart
We fall in love, love tears apart
Love conquers hearts, fragile and strong
Love ruins hearts and heals along!3
We fall when knowing we won't rise
We fall in love with dark blue eyes!
With hair as black as moonless night!
We fall in love with lips and height!4
We cease to be, we all dissolve
When falling in love, worlds revolve
Around the looks of whom we love
We fall in love with purple dove5
We fall in love with Lorna Doone!
With Humpty Dumpty, dawn, dusk, noon!
With birds, and trees where birds reside
We even fall for low, high tide!6
We fall for bride, we fall for groom
We even fall for just perfume!
We fall when we don't know we will
We even fall for our free will!7
We fall in love with bright, full moon
We fall in love and fall too soon!
We fall in love with rhymes and songs
We even fall for forks and tongs8
We fall in love with books and pens
We even fall in love with hens
We fall in all expected loves
We fall in love with pair of gloves9
We fall in love with fall in love
We love to fall in fall of love
We fall like hell, we fall in grace
We even fall for outer space10
We fall in love with verse and prose
We fall in love with wilting rose
We fall for trees and honey bees
We even fall for morning breeze11
We fall in love to live a life
We fail in love, we don't give up
Go fall in love with day and night!
Go fall in love with every sight!
Author notes
It was a chat which got converted into a poem 
Here is the link to the original poem which includes alternative pieces from me and my brother 
http://storywrite.com/story/354034
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What do you think of the idea of falling in love with everything?
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hmmmmm..... Poetry isn't all about ryming. Poetry is more like a canvas you paint with elegant and colorful words. In this piece, you use 'We even fall...' numberous times. My advise is that you a little bit more extensive word choices, and give a little bit more thought to what your writting. I don't mean to be rude, but I think you sacrificed a little too much of its meaning for the sake of ryming.
I'm sorry if I sound utterly rude and a total jerk, but I just want to see your best. Try to go back and see what you can revise, it doesn't have to ryme to be a poem. Thanks for entering my contst, and best of luck! -
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No no no no
Why do you think you are being rude when you are just being critical?
anyways, you pointed out right, this poem has more ideas in less words which is against the norms of poetry =] but this was just kind of a ranting thing.....I might rewrite it sometime later...for now, I am happy that I can make myself rhyme and can stick to meter for 48 lines in less than an hour
And the comment that it doesn't have to rhyme to be a poem, I will just say that I think of poem to be more than rhyme too, but not without rhyme
once again, I am glad that you were critical, people like you are getting rare on SW...
Hope to hear from you often!
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Very nice. A bit Suessian, but that suits me just fine. I love the idea of falling in love with everything. You cover it all in your rhyme.
~Mab
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I am glad that you liked it...just one thing..what do you mean by suessian?
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Like Dr. Suess. One of my favourite poets of all times, I might add.
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His poetry is very good....I like people who not only stick to meter, but also contribute to its versatility
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Covered
I think you have probably enumerated it all. Again, I appreciate a piece like this as a welcome pause from some of the darker stuff that, though very good, frays the soul just from the act of reading. Thanks
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We seem to be such fickel creatures don't we? Fall in love with so many things, but it's still a great poem. ^-^ I'm going to be going to read that original poem!
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It is the beauty of love that we fall in love with so many things and yet there always is room in our hearts for MORE!
I am glad you enjoyed it...happy reading!
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this is a good poem with a great rhyme and flow. The only thing I caught was last stanza second line: We fail in love, we don't give up (it didn't rhyme with the first line of the last stanza like the rest of the piece's format did-- perhaps you could say something like 'We fail in love, but forget the strife' instead? I dunno.. just tossing out an idea/suggestion there. Poetry isn't my strong point)
Overall, great work.
Pixie
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Yeah...I know about the last stanza...its amazing that everyday, one of my poems disobeys my laws and corrupts the second line of the last stanza!
I will try fixing it....thnx for your appreciation!
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ahahaha i think i've fallen in love with this poem! nice job lol it's brilliant "we fall in love with fall in love" hehehe.
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good to hear that you liked it!
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