Suicide Case

I stand on the edge of the cliff.1

Wind blows in my tear-streaked face.2

My hair flies about wildly.3

This here is a suicide case.4

The water crashes loudly.5

My heart beats with fear.6

I'm about to end all of it,7

And crush people of my heart near.8

My toes clench into the ground.9

But slip around the sand.10

After hours of slitting and alcohol,11

This is my final demand.12

Birds screech, wings gliding,13

Steel gray water awaits.14

I see the murderous sharp rocks.15

Death and pain will soon be mates.16

Depression makes my desperate,17

Now I just want to jump.18

Adrenaline rushes through me,19

And my heart now starts to pump.20

With fear making me stiff,21

I leap off and down, down, down.22

The cliff echoes my fearful scream,23

And travels right through town.24

I plunge into icy cold water,25

Rocks are scraping by my feet.26

I'm shoved against all solid things,27

I'll part with life, death I'll meet.

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  • Marta gold member
    1 day ago
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    A good poem, thanks for entering my contest.

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.

  • Marta gold member
    1 day ago
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    A good poem, thanks for entering my contest.

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


  • Lies4Truth
    November 7

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    It was great I like how you made it all flow It seemed sortof odd at the end And the your rhymes were good. Thanks for entering my contest