My common sense has been cut away
The last strand holding my rage at bay
Not one person shall stand in my way
As I hungrily draw the knife1
From hell itself, my rage is born
Rampaging through a city torn
Twisting flesh with bitter scorn
The innocent die tonight2
Thrashing my victims to no end
Their insides I shall maim and rend
To the Reaper, I won't send
For death is too pleasant a fate3
Manic homicidal lust
Grinding organs into dust
None of them 'ave even fussed
Stricken dumb with pain4
Carving faces one by one
My bloody ritual has begun
Infernal slaughter just for fun
Inhuman, barbaric wrath5
Crimson has engulfed my steel
Dripping tears of bliss unreal
Plunging it deeper to reveal
The juice that I so crave6
Sparkling as it hits my tongue
Flowing out my victim's lung
Intoxicating, my addiction young
But drunk, I am not7
The watching folk, they throw a fit
But I don't even give a shit
No remorse, no, not one bit
'Cause I am criminally insane
Author notes
This is simply a copy of a poem I wrote and posted on AllPoetry. If anyone viewing this would kindly post their comments on the AllPoetry version, that would be greatly appreciated.
EDIT: AllPoetry version at http://allpoetry.com/poem/5859543
For the purposes of being objective, the judge probably shouldn't do this. 
I also apologize if it's a bit graphic, but the rage I attempted to capture wouldn't quite be complete without it.
A contest entry
- Darkness and other sorrows.(poems) by Lies4Truth.
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Comments
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Sorry, I don't want to have to dig through allpoetry to find the page to comment on. It's a great poem and portrait of a criminal mind. I like the flow of the poem. It's quite good.
~Mab -
Well you can definatly see the anger. The description is wonderful, and so graphic which I always enjoy. The flow was also good and how you progressed from line to line was wonderful The emotion is Great! and you portriad it well. Great job and thank you for entering my contest
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