Bad bad boy, come here, NOW!!

My name is Darren Thomas. I'm eighteen years old and I'm in the twelve grade about to graduate.1

Okay, here I am walking in the hall way on my way to class and I get pulled into the closet. I feel someones hands on me and their nails going up and down my arms. "Who is this?" I asked. Then lips start to kiss my neck."Don't you remember me?" I hear a girl say. Her voice was all husky and sedutive. "Susan?" I say. "Yeah baby." She starts to kiss me over and over again. I start to get a hard on but, before it gets out of control, I push her away. Why would she be doing this? I asked her the other but, she had said no, so why?2

She got on her knees and took my dick in her mouth and I moaned. Right than and there the door brust opened. In the doorway was the Dean and he looked really pissed. Susan didn't seem to notice 'cause she was still on her knees sucking me. I was to deep in the sensation that I just let her keep doing it. "YOU HAVE BEEN A VERY BAD BOY, MR. THOMAS!" He yelled at me. Oh thats right the dean is her father. OH MY GOD I am in some deep shit. He then sees her and is so much shock that I didn't care if I hurt her. I yanked my pants up and left. Thats the last I've heard of Susan and he father, ever again. 3

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  • corrupthoughts silver member
    November 6

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    You didn't read the actual point of the contest, did you?

    Eh, either way, I got a kick out of this. Reminded me of my highschool actually.. minus the dean..

    It was funny, but completely not what I asked for... also, you had a few errors. you say 'I asked her other' and I think you mean 'out'. Also, last line you left out the 'r' in 'her' here; 'he father, ever again'. It felt like a journal entry to me, almost.

    Well, thanks for entering and good luck?