In the land of Oceaniakville, there were two cheif families, the Hippocampulets and the Montagobys. These two chief families hated each other, due to a deep feud that neither family could even remember. The families battled all the time, everytime they saw each other they fought.1
One day the Hippocampulets were throwing a masquerade party, and a small fish by the name of Romeo Montagoby had managed to get himself an invitation from his friend Mercutio. They dressed up and made their way to the party.2
At the party Romeo saw a beautiful seahorse, he followed her and took her by the fin.3
"Dude, you're hot."Romeo said.4
"Yeah, and you're not.Leave me alone."The seahorse replied.5
"Come on...give me a chance!"6
"Oi!Paris, come 'ere, give this guy a good talkin' to!"7
A large marlin known as Paris approached Romeo, who coiled back in fear. Paris was known as the strongest and most handsome bachelor in Oceaniakville, he was not to be messed with.8
"Oi!You stay away from Juliet, right?!"Paris yelled. Romeo backed off and was pulled from the party by his friend Mercutio.9
On their way home, Romeo decided to turn back for Juliet. He swam over the wall, and waited at her window.10
"O!She doth teach the torches to burn bright!"11
"Hey!You!I thought I told you to stay away!"Paris was behind Romeo, and he looked angry.12
"Yeah..I was just...er...getting my...er....toothbrush..."13
"Toothbrush?!Why would your toothbrush be 'ere then ay?!"14
"Um..i...er...leant it to Juliet..."15
"Right that's it!This is what lying Montagobys get when they don't listen!"16
And that was the last anyone ever heard of Romeo Montagoby...oh, and Paris and Juliet got married.17
Haha see Hayzie, told you it wasn't very good.Bit random lol hope you liked it :)
Comments
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Aww, poor Romeo Montagoby. *donks Paris on the head* I'm actually a mini-fan of R&J, never read the story/play, but sort of known the basic storyline.
I loved the name-twisting. Hippocampulets. XD lol.
This was a funny read. Lightened up my day from all those contest entries.
Well done!

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Yeah lol i didnt get too much about the fish in, just the hippocamp and the goby and the marlin, and the swim over the wall lol
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Lol
Despite what you said it is kinda funny. Its like the stinky cheese man stories. Starts like it is going to be something then stops. I wish there was more about the fish though.
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HAHA I LOVE IT!!! THANKYOU SO MUCH!!

GREAT JOB! ITS SO FUNNY!!


beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.





