The sun beat down on my back, no wind, no cool, crisp breeze to cool me down, just my two feet, tough like old sneakers, and a tired, giving-up mind. 'This was going to be the end of me', I thought, 'The end if I don't get out of here fast', I wiped my forehead with my sleeve, and suddenly collapsed.
A contest entry
- Stun Me in 2 Sentences by Lady Pixie.
175 points, ended November 17, 52 entries
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Comments
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great work- loved the imagery you presented here along with the dialogue that you tossed in. You hooked me and I'm left wondering what's going on
Thanks for your entry! 
Pixie
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Whoooo! I love this. Well written, interesting and long! but tastefully long! You're good at this
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