PLEASE NOTE: The spelling is like that...I've had a lot of comments on it. Its too emphisis the dialect 1
The small creek rolled through the village of Tampic. A boy sat at the edge, he dabbed his fingers in and out of the water. On the otherside, fishermen used their rods to catch the biggest fish, and brag to one another. Maric's Creek was a peaceful creek. 2
Far near the mouth of the river, laid a small-semi abandoned-house. The house was an old gray shack, that on the outside was covered with a thick coat of mold. A small brick chimney covered the top, as black fog steamed out of it.3
This was the house of Burton Myon. A vicious man to the locals. Noone had ever been near the house...the ghost house as it was called. It was even said that Burton never left the house. You see Burton was not a people person. At the age...well I'll explain more on that later...now back to the story...4
Darrel awoke out of his bed early in the morning. After a quick stretch he looked around. It was saturday...his favorite day. There was no day time activites...no school...his day was free. He threw on some playing clothing and began to run outside.5
"Darrel...where do ya think yer going!" his dad yelled as Darrel grapped at the door.6
"Jus' outside ta play with Justan, pap" Darrel said looking at his father.7
"Did ya get yer work dun!?" 8
"Aw...pap! C'mon! Its the weekend! Its ma time off from work!" he wrestled back.9
"Don' ya mouth off ta me boy! Now go get them chores dun! Now!"10
Darrel threw off his working cap as he sluggishly walked back up the stairs. "Dang pap...alwuys bossing me around!"11
He squared up all the piles of junk in his room, and took a seat next to the window...Justin started throwing rocks at him.12
"What the hell ya think ya doing Justan!" Darrel yelled down at him. Justin smirked a small smile at him.13
"Geez I star' ta wonder whys I hang out with ya, Darrel! Damn straight whipped by yer own pa! Its sad...haha. Now get down her! We got thungs ta do!"14
"Awh shucks Justan! You knows I want to! But I'm too busy as it is! Geez i sure is sorry"15
"Fine...suit yer self! I'm headin' down to Maric's Creek...theres some sort a gatherun goin' on down their..." Justin turned to walk away.16
"Hold yerself! Gatherin'. What da ya mean?"17
"Come on with me, Darrel...lets find out!"18
Darrel looked at his room door. He was hesitaten to go. "Alrighty than...i'm a goin' you hear me? I'm a goin' give me five secunds!" Darrel slid out his open window and together him and Justin headed towards the creek.19
One more story was connected with this creek...this was the story of Barson Bead. Barson Bead may sound like an odd name but that is because it is a small store. Owned by Isaac Bawson and Jacob Bead. Two men who came from the far town of Likensburg. They were strangers to the village...it was very suspecious...but again...another story...for a later time. 20
"Jacob have we receieved those bolts from the Burgman Family yet?"21
"Nah..not yet...those damn hicks are holding out on us..." he threw down the book. "Why the hell are we here Isaac. We haven't heard any news on-"22
"DON'T...we can't talk about that right now..." Isaac said rushing up to Jacob. He placed his hand over his mouth. "Jacob...thats a secret...if that gets out...you know that will spread threw this town like wildfire...now get in your spot we have a customer"23
An old man walked into the dim shop. "Hmm...wha' ta buy...this seems like a nice shop" he chuckled as he walked up to the counter. "Hi, i'm Darun Matrix...its a pleasure ta meet ya" he stuck his hand out.24
Jacob looked at Isaac as Isaac gripped the old mans hand. "Hello Darren...what brings you here?"25
"Thought I'd meet de new shop keepas. Ah I memeber when ole Pat Robbinson owned these place...a la more rugged den this...but still it waz nice..." he placed a lemon drop on his tounge. "mmm...ya guyz want one?"26
Jacob tensed up even more as the man went on. Isaac must have realized that for next he said: "No thank you sir...but I am truley sorry as you see we are still preparing for opening day...so if you will excuse us and let us get back to work, that'll be great"27
"Ah...I sees...well boys...I's be seeing ya around" he tipped his hat and walked out.28
"Damn...hicks! I can't stand this place! How long do we have to stay?"29
"Calm down Jacob. Now you stay here...I don't want us to go out there and be the center of attention. Theres a gathering of some sort going down at Maric's Creek...I figured I should go see it...don't worry...I'll tell them you're sick" he grabbed his walking hat and headed out the doors.30
Is the start(Darrel, Pap, and Justin) to similar to Huck Finn? How did I describe Jacob and Isaac's personality?
Comments
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Actually I totally love it haha. I never read huck finn so...I dont know
But I really liked it. You have the hick accents down good!!


