Shales and Dylan were out from behind the car now, Shales sneaking left behind the building, Dylan right, distracting a few. Karissa stood up, ignoring her now scraped up legs, ducking under a glowing blue blade.
Author notes
I took this from chapter http://storywrite.com/story/347252
The link to my List is: http://storywrite.com/list/39842-Novel--Blood---Magick
I am in the middle of changing how it was writtin, I am changing it from thrid person to first person.
hope this got you hooked, I chose a fight scene 
Have an awsome day and or night.
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- Stun Me in 2 Sentences by Lady Pixie.
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I think instead of the comma after 'now' in the first sentence, a semi-colon would work better- but that could just be me. Overall this was a good two sentences and it did get my attention
Thank you very much for your entry 
Pixie
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interesting place to start! I like how this picks up right in the midst of a fight scene! also I love the name "shales"
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thank you ^^ Its a sentance from Blood & Magick
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i like this! a lot!
you're an amazing writer!
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tyvm
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Nope, didn't get me. I'm being totally honest lol
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its fine, i'm not very good at picking out lines that are attractive XD
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