Silently slipping away

Snow is falling to the ground and I find myself numb to the core. Life is slipping away.

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This may be something to a story I may write in the future, I don't know yet. Writer's block is killing me right now.

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  • Lady Pixie Greeters member
    November 4

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    I know how writer's block is I'm suffering the same issue myself right now. Anyways, this was a good hook. Although I feel that the first sentence came off a bit fragmented. I don't know.. maybe it's just me but I think there should be an 'is' after 'Life' to make it seem more complete... Or perhaps, it would flow better if you switched the two sentences around? Only a suggestion, though

    Overall, it was a good hook that drew me in and made me want to read the potential story behind this. I'm curious with it, now. Good work. Thank you for entering.

    Pixie


    • HypnoticHeart
      November 5
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      Thank you!

      Thank you for the feed back. I will take your suggestion into consideration.