Warriors Of Destiny (Fiana Fail)

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                              "For the great Gaels of Ireland
                              Are the men that God made mad,

                             For all their wars are merry,
                            And all their songs are sad. "                        
                            From G.K. Chesterton2

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“Chroist almoighty, we started yesterday wit’ twelve hundred men, how in God’s holy name is it we’re only two hundred an’ eighty dis marnin'!” Sean wanted to know.4

“Yer mon Burnside’s a fookin’ eejit, that’s what!” replied Eamon.5

“Himself, General Meagher, was wounded when his horse was shot, I’m hearin’” added Domhnall.6

"More like drunk and fell off," retorted Seamus.7

“John, Ed, Danny, Jim form up!” said Sargeant Tyree using their English names. "An' you'll be keepin' a civil tongue in yer head when it comes to the General or I'll have ya' flogged."8

They were all that remained of the platoon of twenty five men.
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Last night, returning to the bivouac area, they hoped more of their comrades would return. That maybe they just had become separated during the fighting instead of senselessly slaughtered, but it was not to be.10

They were too exhausted, too discouraged to search the field hospitals with their grisly mounds of severed limbs piled haphazardly outside the surgical tents. Even if the wounded survived the surgeons, infections would take many heavenward. 11

In battle, discharges of gunpowder thickened the air, combining with saliva to form a gummy paste, parching them to the point where they croaked rather than spoke.  So they swilled water to cleanse the terribly bitter taste of sulfur and saltpeter from their mouths, spitting the gob on the ground. Then they choked down some hardtack and bully beef, too bone tired to go to the mess tent. Sean rummaged through the belongings of those not returned. Then passed a forbidden jug of uisge beatha, the water of life, to Eamon. 12

"Sure, Peder woulda shared if he'd been here," Sean said after taking a swig.13

"Slainte," said Eamon passing it to Seamus.14

The jug made it around before Tyree returned. "Lads, it's been a terrible day to be sure. But you'll be putting that away if ya' know what's best. These Yankee officers t'ink whiskey is the working mon's curse, not his privilege."15

He stalked away to avoid an argument for he was as disheartened as any of them and still had to maintain discipline. He was searching the field hospitals and replacement depots trying to locate his men since the lieutenant, two sergeants and corporals in addition to fourteen privates had been killed, wounded or captured during the day's hell.16

"I t'ink dem stripes turned him into Cromwell," Domhnall groused.17

"Stick a cork in it, Domhnall. Tyree's not a bad sort, he niver asked for dis, an’ no Irishman should ever be called Cromwell," said Eamon spitting on the ground at the mention of the name.18

In 1649, Cromwell fell on the Irish like a hammer from Hell. He indiscriminantly massacred men, women and children in the cities of Drogheda and Wexford, shipped twelve thousand 'indentured servants' to Bermuda and Barbados, and delighted in having Catholic priests drawn and quartered. Catholic ownership of land in Ireland fell from sixty to eight percent.19

Aves were said for those who were dead. And they slipped into tortured sleep.20

In the morning, they formed a line of march with the other survivors, and as several officers rode by, saluted as ordered by Tyree. The pontoons had been withdrawn or destroyed along with the other bridges across the Rappahannock, so for the moment they were safe until Stonewall found a ford and led his minions from hell onto their rear or flank. The column moved out.21

“Why does Lincoln let dolts crush his armies inta dust? Burnside has us funneled onto bridges an’ crossin’ a river under fire fer Christ sakes” said Eamon as they marched.22

The day before they had been forced to cross the Rappahanock on pontoons as Confederate sharpshooters and skirmishers shot into the masses of tightly packed men.
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“Seamus, why’d ya’ keep wipin’ yer face?” asked Domhnall.24

“When we wuz crossin’ de dam bridges, didn’t one of those rebels blow poor Eoghan Mahoney’s brains right out the back of his head all onto me face! Even now, I fail it on me face.”25

“Would yez’ be switchin’ places with himself?” asked Tyree. “Put that bandana away else another of them divils chooses ya’ fer a target.”26

They had spent a cold, fireless night in Fredericksburg. In the morning they had formed up trying to take advantage of the shelter provided by the buildings.They were stationed on the Union right. They were to keep Lee and Longstreet pinned to Marye’s Height while General Meade broke  through on the left. But even though Meade found a gap in Stonewall Jackson’s front, Burnside sent no troops to Meade to exploit the breakthrough. 27

When the attack on the left failed, Burnside order the right to advance and take Marye’s Height. Before them was a cleared field four hundred yards from the base of the heights.  The field was bisected by a ditch fifteen feet wide, five feet deep and filled with three feet of water. Again, the troops were funneled into narrow bridges that crossed the ditch.28

“An’ den, even wit’ half the Confederate army dug in on top of Marye’s Heights, tell me why  wit' over forty t'ousand troops dey send us up it one brigade at a toime,” adds Sean.29

The Confederates had over three hundred pieces of artillery, many of them sighted on this field. Longstreet said “A chicken could not live on that field when we opened up on it.” Nor could the brave men being sent to their deaths by commanders across the river. Confederates started hammering the Yankees with solid shot and shells that tore huge gaps through their lines, visible gaps that seconds before had been soldiers.

“Didya’ see what happened to Declan McDermott?” asked Sean reliving one of the horrors of the previous day. “He was marching next to me when we formed up after the ditch. One of them shells took his trunk clean off his legs. Bejaysus, didn’t he take t’ree more steps before his dead legs fell down. 30

They had formed at the base of the heights. Meagher a tough Irishman the English had exiled to Van Dieman’s Land (Tasmania) for his part in the failed Irish rebellion of 1848, was their commander. 31

“Aye,” said Domhnall, “and den dey switched to canister and grapeshot. I saw Finbar staggered and when I tried to help him, he had no face. From his waist up was just a sheet of blood, his t’roat shredded, his jaw torn away so’s he couldn’t even scream, t’was just a gurgling sound. I t’ink he drowned in his own blood. And da’ Lieutenant holding his sword, marchin’ forward calm as ya’ please, until a piece of chain from da’ grapeshot took his hand off. Da’ sword flipped backwards, stuck in da’ ground an’ his hand still grippin’ da’ hilt. Couldn’t stop da’ bleedin’ wit’ blood gushin’ and shooting out from every vein. But he kept advancin’, it was like he just got tired, lay down and just went to sleep."32

Their battle cry “fag an bealeach” or “clear the way’ rose up to the Lee’s army in both Gaelic and English. Many of the troop had been born in Ireland and had yet to make the hated English language their tongue. The Irish Brigade of the New York Fighting Sixty Ninth charged uphill at the well entrenched troops who poured a withering fire into them. 33

The rebels were lined up three deep on a sunken road behind a stone wall. Even though the range of their rifles was four hundred yards, they waited until the Brigade was one hundred yards out, point blank range.34

“When I was a kid, I climbed a tree to get the honey out of a hive,” said Sean. “But Chroist, I nivir heard a buzzin’ da’ likes a when dey opened up on us from behind dat cursed wall." 35

"God A’moighty, it was like a scythe passing over a wheatfield. I don’t know how any of us survived,” said Seamus. 36

Confederates would later tell of one brave soldier who made it to within thirty yards of the wall. Most of the dead and wounded never got within seventy yards of the wall before the attack was mercifully called off.37

 Afterwards, Lee said “It is well that war is so terrible, or we should grow too fond of it."38

Eamon said “Meagher t’inks dis foightin’ will ‘clear da’ way’ for us if…when we git back home.”39

“In a pig’s oye, da same “Irish need not apply” signs’ll be everywhere just as before,” countered Domhnall. 40

“Me Da says de only t’ing a vote’s good fer is a point o’ whiskey on election day” put in Sean. 41

“Yah, before dey cartcha’ off in a Paddy wagon wit’ da’ rest a’ da’ drunken Paddy’s,” said Eamon.42

“Aye, doncha know dey leave da more valuable darkies back in Washington to dig trenches and build fortifications. Us dey t’row inta da’ meatgroinder, just like at Antietam,” growled Domhnall.
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At Antietam, command confusion resulted in the Irish Brigade charging the center of the Rebel line entrenched behind a sunken road so a flanking maneuver that broke the Confederate position could be executed. One of the Confederate units defending Bloody Lane was the Irish Regiment, commanded by General Thomas Cobb. And as always, the fighting between Irishmen proved savage. 44

“Doncha go talking about flamin’ Bloody Lane. It was dere we lost our own Captain McGonigle,” said Eamon crossing himself. He would never forget the sight of the Captain's head exploding like a watermelon dropped from the top of a barn. The headless body sat ramrod straight atop the horse until it toppled sideways out of the saddle. 45

“An’ a good mon he was,” agreed Sean. “One a’ da’ stretcher bearers dey let pick up the wounded told me we killed General Thomas bleedin’ Cobb, da’ bastard in charge of da' Rebel Irish regiment today.”46

“We t’ought sexty percent casualties was bad,” said Eamon “Chroist, dey took all the meat off da bones dis toime.”47

“Meagher says we made it higher up the heights than any other unit,” said Tyree.48

“Guess dat makes us da tallest midget,” Sean wisecracked.49

“More like eejit,” countered Eamon.50

The Irish brigade served at Chancellorsville again suffering heavy casualties. Meagher was refused permission to recruit replacements and resigned. By the time it reached Gettysburg, the Irish Brigade could muster only six hundred men, little more than a regiment.
It was disbanded in eighteen sixty four and the troopers were absorbed by other units.51

During the Civil War one hundred twenty seven Irishmen, from all branches, received the Medal Of Honor for their valor. Most were born in Ireland and emigrated to America.52

The Fighting Sixty Ninth, heavily laden with Irish surnames, would be resurrected and serve with distinction in World War One. They did it because no one could doubt the valor of the Irish Brigade that had been established at such a terrible cost.53

Author notes

Fiana Fail means Warriors of Destiny
Meagher is pronounced 'Mahr'
Eamon is pronounced 'Amon'
Domhnall is pronounced 'Donall'
Seamus is pronounced 'Shay mus'
Uisge Beatha is pronounced 'ooiske bayha' or whiskey
Slainte is the Irish toast pronounced 'Slan cha'
The Irish pronunciation for "fag an bealeach" is fa a ballagh.

Many of the soldiers who served in the Union forces were members of the Irish Republican Brotherhood and kept alive the flame of Irish freedom in their adopted homeland.

Fian, Irish for soldiers, traces back to the legendary hero, Finn Mac Cumhaill (McCool). The Fenians, as they were called, later inspired the Irish Republican Army to form the Flying Columns that drove British soldiers out of the countryside clearing the way for the final formation of the Irish Free State in 1921.

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  • corrupthoughts silver member
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    Ah man, Ah dude... I looooved this... Too much accent? fuck no (pardon my French). Reading the first bit instantly sent me back to memories of reading Trainspotting for the first time. However, on the same note, I can see how someone who is not familiar with the Irish (or Scottish, since I mentioned Trainspotting) accent, could be a little confused.

    I could find no mistakes, at all, but instead found these lines I adored, and just had to point them out as something to keep the interest of others;

    para 11 - "Even if the wounded survived the surgeons, infections would take many heavenward" -- I really, really like that line. It is worded perfectly.

    Around para 25, when Anonymized explains why he is whipping his face; that, is a great additive to a war based story.

    para 38 - Jesus, man. Another harsh truth. very well said.

    Ok, this is a piece I am (clearly) very fond of. One thing I admired most, was how the story moves back and forth from the warriors at a bar, remembering the events, to the actual explanation of the events themselves. It is a tactic that can easily get confusing, but I followed it very well and thought it was put together beautifully.

    On top of that, you stay very true to unique military terms to that time (and many we still use). It was those word choices, that really put me in battle with those men, as someone familiar with them (as much as the accent), I was immersed in this piece, vividly picturing all if it.

    Also, great piece to start, lovely little rhyme for the content.

    Over-all man, very well done, thanks for entering and good luck!


  • Stars-are-Blind93
    November 23
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    this was a nice history explanation!
    the accent wasn't too much, it was actuallyeasy to understand

    good luck!
    you'll get a nice clap


  • ZsadistsGurl34
    November 19
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    This is really good... Your very talented!!

  • graybeard
    November 19
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    Hey seamus,
    This was one history lesson I thoroughly enjoyed. I think it's highly probable that many people are unaware of the facts you listed here. I certainly don't remember anything like this from my school days. It did take me a minute to get into the flow of the brogue, but after that it worked just fine.
    I did notice a few things you might want to look at.
    Para27-line6 Strike 'the'
    Para33-line2 Strike 'the'
    Para53-line3 They did it because no could doubt the valor of the Irish Brigade that had been established at such a terrible cost. I think you need to change 'because no' to 'so no one' or something along those lines.
    That's it
    Steve

  • Mistical
    November 17
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    A hard story to read

    Sure your returning to ancient roots but what of the people that can't follow?

    However a fair good story with alot of laughs.
    Chroist
    Tae be fair I don't know the language that well.
    but is it no Christ?

    Or am I thinking of English?
    Author notes
    Fiana Fail means Warriors of Destiny
    Meagher is pronounced 'Mahr'
    Eamon is pronounced 'Amon'
    Domhnall is pronounced 'Donall'
    Seamus is pronounced 'Shay mus'
    Uisge Beatha is pronounced 'ooiske bayha' or whiskey
    Slainte is the Irish toast pronounced 'Slan cha'
    The Irish pronunciation for "fag an bealeach" is fa a ballagh.

    Many of the soldiers who served in the Union forces were members of the Irish Republican Brotherhood and kept alive the flame of Irish freedom in their adopted homeland.

    Fian, Irish for soldiers, traces back to the legendary hero, Finn Mac Cumhaill (McCool). The Fenians, as they were called, later inspired the Irish Republican Army to form the Flying Columns that drove British soldiers out of the countryside clearing the way for the final formation of the Irish Free State in 1921.


    was the bit I understood the most though!


  • BigBadWolfMistress
    November 17
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    I like it a lot. it's interesting and kinda makes sense, but again its me.

    Keep writin

    Lady Crescnencia


  • WillyLee silver member
    November 17
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    No, not too much accent. The soldiers' conversation was natural and easy to understand, such that I could almost hear them speaking, and the general meanings of unfamiliar words could be gleaned through context. There's a lot of historical information in this story, conveyed in a way that keeps it interesting.

    I understand that these were brave men who probably tended to keep some feelings private, but considering the nature of their ordeal being such that only four of twenty-five men remained alive, their physical and mental situation would I think have been far more intense than you describe it; perhaps it's indescribable.

    I would like to have learned more of what each man felt inside himself. Still, I like the story quite a bit. It caught and held me all the way, and I learned a bit of history which I will not forget. Nice work.





  • Keyirna Raineheart
    November 17
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    I can hear the men speaking when I read this. It hits close to home, and I remember my great grandfather telling me stories about how his grandfather couldn't get work in New York, because he was Irish. The referance to 'Irish Need Not apply' reminded me of that.
    Thank you for this story, many people forget that the Civil war was not just Union and Confederate soilders fighting, but Irish, and German, and Italian, and Africas who had chosen a side, fighting to preserve what they felt was right. So again I say, thank you for this piece, it was lovely.

  • Jayfeather 101
    November 16
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    Great story! I thought this was going to be one of the Warrior cat series by Erin Hunter but, this REALLY caught my eye! It's dramatic, exiting, and most of all... BRILLIANT! I encourage you to write more


  • Rorshach gold member
    November 12
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    A very interesting history lesson, brought back to life with convincing and often times funny dialogue.


    • seamus gold member
      November 12

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      Fiana

      Thanks for the kind remarks. As discussed, I have a predilection for Irish themes. May expand this a bit for another contest.Thanks for reading, I'll return the favor soon. For some reason this and Chances did not show up on my account page.


  • gerifitzsimmons Greeters member
    November 11

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    Seamus you deserve a gold for this one; but sorry I'm not a judge.

    As for the Irish brogue, it’s a little heavy, but no problem for me. The nice part is you didn’t let it carry over into the narrations so the plot moved along smoothly. You have a talent for painting colorful characters and the reader can ‘See’ as well as ‘hear’ them. The back-story you filtered through out the conversations, kept the reader well informed.

    Have you ever tried working on a novel; you have a lot of potentially interesting information in that history lesson at the end. You certainly have done some heavy research on ‘Our’ nationality. My own tends more towards the later days of ‘Republicanism’ in Ireland and forced emigration to so many other lands. Good thing we left through—with the amount of Irish I’ve found in the World, if we all stayed home—the Island would have sunk long ago and made the Brits ecstatic.

    As for emotional response, you gave me the pleasure of experiencing humor, sadness, anger, disgust and hate; combined with a 'Hell' of a large dose of 'Pride' in being Irish.

    Thanks for the read .

    Geri


  • onaya3
    November 11

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    Aye, tis a grand chapter to be sure...

    ...and well worth of a three clap approach to thee I felt like crying out to the soldiers, "may you have the luck of the Irish!" Yet reading the language dripping in Guiness was also like reading the ole Scottish Balads in my Norton Anthology Of Poetry complete with the explanations at the bottom

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


  • Taliesa silver member
    November 9

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    Excellent! great dialogue and insight

    Your dialect really flows and shows the wit of the Irish character. Maybe, before you do the historical wrap-up, you could show your gang going off into another battle, just for the sake of carrying out a plot.

    Yes, i once was a proofreader. this fine piece could be improved with a few changes in punctuation: 'hearin,'; Jim! Form up! or Jim--form up!; p12 'That maybe '(no comma); p31 'sakes,'; 'a tough Irishman' (no comma); maybe a couple other places.

    I think a line or two explaining the Irish hatred of Oliver Cromwell would be helpful, as you mention him

    p47 good lines

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 2, ending: 3, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


  • Tricia3 gold member
    November 4

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    I do so enjoy your writing and I love the accent. I've always loved an Irish accent and I don't think it's too much. Thanks for adding the pronunciation to some of them. I can read most of the regular words, but not the names and places.

    Great and good luck in the contest.

    Trish

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