Horseland-Series-Chap 3-Help her!

I stood there in shock. Dark-Moon (Erin's horse) was in so much pain! I felt so bad! I looked in my horse supply bag and urgently searched for some bandage...or at least something to ease the pain. Ah-ha! I had found some bandage! "Thanks for helping!" Erin said,her voice cracking from trying not to cry. Kelsey pulled out her cell phone and called our school and begged for them to send out somebody.1

"No!" I shrieked , yanking the gleaming silver cell phone out of her hands. "What the hay-stack was that for?!" Kelsey blurted coldly. I screamed,"They will find out about the hideout!" 2

"How about we call Conor?" I suggested. He was a family friend I had known since FOREVER! He was a boy at the Horse racing school near the hideout. 3

" Uh,well, I hate him for picking on me in 3rd grade during the girl-boy horse day at school,But if he can help!" Kelsey said uneasily. I dialed his number up and waited for him to pick up.4

"Hello?" he answered.5

"Hey! It is me Miami!" I said starting up the conversation.6

"Oh hey!" he said back in response.7

The conversation continued until I hung up and announced he was coming to help. Hopefully...that would be soon!

Will the horse ever be saved?

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  • Cocoly Docolies
    November 3
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    ahh suspence suspence! so good! your draggin me in so much! I LOVE IT!!


  • AzureFire Comet
    November 3
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    :))

    This is good! Lots of suspense.

    beginning: 3, language: 3, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 4, characters: 3.