She sat elegantly at the party, legs crossed, sitting down on a chair somewhat bored with the meaningless chatter of the elders and the children. After all this was a birthday party at a museum, though she usually found museums so riveting and exciting, the woman was giving a presentation on liquid nirtogen and had handed everyone objects, the girl had a red rose in her hand, she knew that red roses where the symbol of courage and love. She stared at it and sighed to herself, silently twirling the rose in her hand. She drowned the voices of everyone else around her only concentrating only on THAT rose. Silently the memories flooded back, of a past love, the memories of self-mutilation and all the things that bothered and killed her internally. And then, the thoughts were interrupted by the presentator, she said called the yound girl up to freeze the red rose. Standing up still in the trance of her memories, she decided to make a vow then and there. A vow she could never keep but she had to. Silently she arose and walked, thinking to herself. 'Today, I make the vow upon this rose. . . to never love again. . . I leave my heart in this rose, Never to be doomed to fall in love again. its too painful to bear. . ' slowly she walked and handed the rose to the woman who smiled and dipped the rose in Liquid Nitrogen, freezing it upon a few seconds of contact and pulled out of the frozen rose and handed it to the shy girl, and she went back to her seat. . . silently she destroyed the rose, just like the frozen flower she destroyed, her heart and the rose died that day, only to sound shattered a few years later, unable to keep the promise she made that day so long ago, once again her heart slowly unfroze from its grave. Till this day the promise is broken and now the girl who is much older has found new love.
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Good concept
I hope you will take the time to polish this work. It is an interesting concept and I think you can make it shine. There are some errors that can be corrected. Spelling and grammar mistakes will distract your readers from the good ideas you have. Good luck and keep writing.
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Thanks. . . Just minor spelling mistakes I hope and grammar really isn't my forte (that's why my best friend is my editor). But thank you so much for pointing it out.
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