My eyes traveled slowly by the lines in the antique book playing with each word they came over. I bit my tongue, it started bleeding, reading the words over again, so I can really could taste the blood the man in the book was covered up with, how I slashed their throats and cut out their guts, fast. So fast that nobody could ever catch me, or even notice that something just wasn’t right. I read how the man put some of the warm pieces of the young whore in tiny, tiny boxes and packed it with him before leaving the dead body behind. 1
My eyes widened in pure amusement as I put the book down on the old table beside the cup of tea. (And, yes, you got it right, I was reading ‘Jack the Ripper’. Again.) 2
I let out a long sigh, my mouth was covered up in a big satisfied smirk, I was quiet facinated by this man who shared the same name as Jack myself. Ever since the Christmas was given to me. The book I had studied every single word it spoke. From right to left, up and down, from the end to the begining. From begining to end. 3
Yes, I knew all there was to know about Jack the Ripper and more than most people here on Earth... 4
I looked at the clock upon the big white wall, it was time to go.5
“Time for work,” mumbling to myself as I stood up, heading for my office in the next room. The room was dark and devastating to look at from the outside where the door used to be. The curtains were all red, the ceiling was cracked, and the old paintings were about to disappear.6
I stood still for some seconds, and then took some steps silently into the room, towards my desk.7
I looked through some files that were hidden in one of my lockers.8
“Found you.” I whispered in a gentle tone, "Are you ready for death, silly girl?" My smirked became bigger as I read through the file a couple of times. Then I walked over to another desk. There I found a few knives, two forks, a scalpel and some candy. A lot of it.9
“Are you leaving for work? Again?! Wait up!” 10
A small demon came running after me.11
“Mind your own buisness, would you?”12
The demon frowned at my bag. 13
“Looks like that is about to explode, many souls tonight?” She asked.14
“No, just one. But this one is a really nasty one.” I smirked, and then disappeared out of the door. 15
I followed an old muddy road, then walked silently over a bridge, and paused for some minutes, took a look inside my notebook, then left the old bridge alone in the dark again. 16
I passed by someone being killed back in a corner, but I didn't interrupt the other man's work, I just went to the street sign I was looking for. It read only the word "Wild Rose Street." 17
A smile played upon my lips, and then I headed to the right, into an almost empty street where I stopped. I looked up at a very, very old house. I took the few steps up to the door, which was locked, of course, and found the extra key which was hidden inside of a bunch of old newspapers. I unlocked the door with the old golden key, and then I entered the house silently. The walls were painted in old, old colors, such colors which were now forbidden to sell at the market anymore, and the marmorfloor was covered up with old sheets. I sighed, then entered the door to the livingroom where I found the chosen one for this night. 18
Her name I will not tell.19
After a few more steps I noticed that the girl had seen me in her mirror, she slowly turned her head and body to my reflection, a tall, dark, winged man behind her.20
“Who… who are… what are you?” Her eyes widened.21
I took a few steps closer, “That’s for me to know, and you to find out... besides.. I know you quite well who or what I am,” I took a pink box up from my pocket. 22
The little box was filled with cute little red hearts. 23
“Candy?” 24
She took one who had broken into half, ‘a bad sign...? ’ She thought to herself as she put it in her mouth. 25
Suffocation, and after some seconds it felt like someone was choking her with their bare hands. She became sleepy, and then everything went black...26
She was woken up by a strange melody, and of course, my voice.27
"Tell me,” I paused for a minute, “when you were a child, did no one tell you not to take sweets from strangers?"28
“Fuck you!” She replied, short and sweet.29
Her hands were tied on her back, she glared at me. 30
"Now," puttig on another record, "are you ready to play with me?" I smirked and pushed the ‘play’ button. 31
I started singing.32
“Come with me, and you’ll be in a world of pure imagination. We’ll begin with a spin, traveling in, The world of my creation.” 33
"You are insane!" The girl tried to push herself up from the indigo carpet.34
"Oh, no little girl, hold on there for a sec..." I took one of the rusty forks laying on the table, then stabbed it into her left knee. 35
"Now, you can't run." I smirked evilly, my eyes slowly turned black, which made me look even more inhuman.36
"Who are you?!" She writhed in agony.37
“You are repeating yourself, dear.” I teased, “oh, well.” I paused.38
“I am the Angel of Death," I took up another fork, "and this is my job. You can thank the real ‘Jack the Ripper’ that I’m still doing this after so many years," I smirked as I stabbed the new fork into her right knee, "wanna play now? Or are you still stubborn?" I took the scalpel up from my pocket.39
“Let me go, you fuckin’ freak! It hurts!” she cried out.40
But I remained calm. 41
“Can you say after me, slooowly; ‘Please, Mr. Ripper, play wiw me...’ ?”42
I waited for a moment. 43
“No? Oh, well then... This is gonna be so fun!”44
The girl screamed in pain as I started to slide the blade of the scalpel over her soft skin. I laughed, but stopped. "Shut up, silly girl, you're gonna die tonight." licking the bloody scalpel. 45
“Mmmmm, tastes like sugar, as I were told by my senses,” I paused, “but it needs something more, some ingrediense is missing, but what could it be?” scratching my head, thinking, “Oh, now I got it! PEPPERMINTE! That’s it! I think I got some left right here in my pocket, actually. Pulverized! Ready for use and all that chit chat!” I looked through all of the pockets on my jacket. 46
“Ah, here it is!” I smiled gently, “just a little bit of this into your little cuts here and there, and voila! We got a whole new bloodtype!”47
The girl let out a big scream again, then another one, she cried and cried, though she knew no one could hear her.48
I sighed, "Why do they always make such noise?" I stuffed her mouth full with the marshmallows I had brought with myself, and then I found some chocolatesauce and poured it into her eyes.49
"There. Finally a bit more silent." 50
I giggled at her as I started to cut her long dark hair off, then sewed in some liqourice bootlace as a replacment for the hair. In the end you could see nothing but a wig of liqourice, and some blood.. of course. 51
The girl was in shock.52
-Ting, tong, doing- 53
It was the clock, who sang this pittyful melody of the time...54
I paused, "Oh, tea time," I looked at my watch just to make sure that her clock was right, "would you like some tea?" I giggled more, I really did enjoyed this. The girl shook her head, her skin was pale blue, and her mouth... well, it was full of candy. 55
I stood up, "okay then, you wouldn't mind if I use your kitchen to warm the water," I leaned down to her ear, "would you?" 56
“Slå deg løs,” she tried to say something in a foreign language, but it was too painful for her, she writhed in pain again. 57
”Oh, in a bad mood, are we? And I who have come this long, long way in the dark just to pay you a visit, tsk, tsk.“ I walked silently out of the room, leaving the girl to herself.58
As soon as my footsteps disappeared, the girl tried to drag herself up with a little help from a round table. It seemed to look down at her, laughing, she was sure it laughed at her, there she lay on the floor with two forks for each of her knees, with chocolatesauce over her eyes, a wig of liqourice and in pain, breathing heavily. 59
But she didn’t care much about that right now. She looked at the phone sleeping in its own dust, paying no attention on what was happening around it. 60
She grabbed the telephone receiver.61
Suddenly she heard a rusty voice and the sound of a shaking tea-cup.62
"Oh, I was such a fool and trusted you," I looked down at the girl who was trying to crawl herself up to the phone table. 63
"The first thing you do as soon as I turn my back from you for one sec, is to try and escape from me." I shook my head slow as I took a sip from my tea.64
"Hmmpf!Mmm!!Mh!" 65
"What?"66
"Hmmpf!" The girl tried to say something, but it wasn't easy now when her ugly little mouth were stuffed full of candy.67
"Oh, you want some tea?" looking down at her lying there on the paved floor as I smirked. 68
"Nnnh!Nnnh!" It wasn't easy to hear what the girl had to say. 69
I smirked as I poured the warm acid tea down over her. The girl moaned in pain as her skin started to peel off. 70
"Ahahahahahahah! Oh, aren't you a beauty full of shit?" dragging the girl back into the living room. 71
"You are so... hmm… what can I call you? What to call a thing like you?" I laughed softly, the girl almost calmed down by my warm laughter, it was so full of life and love...but the feeling disappeared as soon as I slammed her half dead body into the white wall (Which was now, not white anymore, but covered in the girl’s blood). 72
“Want some more candy, dear?” I nailed her hands into the cracked wall. 73
She screamed, so hard, she screamed with all of her air left in her lungs, but it was not enough to get her voice back, it was already gone. I smashed her jaw together so she bit her own tongue off. 74
“No more candy, I guess, ne?” I bit her underlip playfully.75
She tried to shake her head hysterically from right to left instead. 76
“Yes? So you want some more after all?” I turned to my bag behind me and took something up, it looked like a wire cutter. 77
I looked at the girl again, approached her. My hand shaking with delight, I stretched it towards her darting eye.78
“Be still now, or the Doc won’t give ya lollipop!”79
I grabbed the slimy, slippery eye balls between two fingers and dragged it out, quick as anything.80
”Pling, plong, Avon calling,” I giggled as I started to cover the eyeball up with chocolate and sugar. 81
Then I placed the eye on a pretty silverspoon. 82
“Now I want you to say ‘aaah’,” I held the spoon up to her mouth.83
“Now, eat. It sure tastes good. You made it all by yourself. Of course, I helped you, but... let’s just not talk about that.” I laughed, “let me sing for you while eating?” 84
I pressed the home made sweet into her bloody mouth.85
She chewed it slowly, as tears rolled down her cheeks. 86
“Now, while you’re eating that lovely candy of yours, I’m gonna take this needle and inject chocolate sauce into your body! Oh, this is so fun,” I mumbled to myself while pushing the needle into her veins. 87
“Chocolate, chocolate, yummi chocolate covered girls!” I sang, licking up the hot blood mixed up with chocolate. 88
"I guess that before you die, you’ll probably wanna know why I’m here?”89
She shock her head slowly, her head hung like it was dead down to her chest. 90
"You’ve flirted with suicide many times. That's not okay at all, little one. That’s what all this is about," I smirked as I gently caressed her hair, “you’ve been a very selfish little kid.” I tied a thicker form of liqourice bootlace around her thin neck, then pulled harder and harder, her face went from bluepale to bloodyred, and then it become blue again, then white. She started shaking.91
I let go for a sec, looking at her. I stared through her soul, she just knew it, she could feel it. My eyes, breaking through every living cell left in her body.92
The girls breath stopped as the pain she had caused humans all around...93
“Hold your breath94
Make a wish95
Count to three96
Come with me97
And you'll be98
In a world of99
Pure imagination100
Take a look101
And you'll see102
Into your imagination103
We'll begin104
With a spin105
Traveling in106
The world of my creation107
What we'll see108
Will defy109
Explanation110
If you want to view paradise111
Simply look around and view it112
Anything you want to, do it113
Wanta change the world?114
There's nothing115
To it116
There is no117
Life I know118
To compare with119
Pure imagination120
Living there121
You'll be free122
If you truly wish to be123
If you want to view paradise124
Simply look around and view it125
Anything you want to, do it126
Wanta change the world?127
There's nothing128
To it129
There is no130
Life I know131
To compare with132
Pure imagination133
Living there134
You'll be free135
If you truly136
Wish to be” 137
Author notes
Its just after Halloween and I recently read a couple of stories of Jack the Ripper and this is my first time using first perspective. Plus its both Wrath and added a bit of Gluttony in it
A contest entry
- Seven Deadly Sins by corrupthoughts.
300 points, ended November 5, 5 entries
Honorable mention
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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Interesting indeed... I like the idea of him being the Angel of Death, however with him portraying the gluttony aspect, it acts as an almost contradiction, which, could be your point. I noticed quite a few little mistakes as I read through, but felt like I would point out these few;
para 3 - when you say; "I was quiet fascinated by this man who shared the same name as Jack myself." -- you should probably just say 'as myself' and take out Jack, because it reads a little awkwardly.
para 25 - "She took one who had broken into half" -- should probably say 'which' instead of 'who', since it is an object. But on the same note, I am a little confused on why she took a piece of candy from a winged stranger who just broke into her house.
para 31 - ""Now," puttig on another record," - that should be 'putting'
para 46 - “but it needs something more, some ingrediense is missing," - should be ingredients.
para 61 - I just wonder how she grabbed the telephone when she was tied up previously.
"I smashed her jaw together so she bit her own tongue off" --I like that one, nice touch.
I sense the wrath (obviously) and I think you portrayed it interestingly with a character who was clearly on the verge of insanity as well. However, there were a few points that bothered me in terms of realism. For one, after having her jaw broken and tongue bitten in half, she wouldn’t be able to eat her own eye-ball. On top of that, after having her jaw broken and tongue bitten in half, she probably would have passed out...
But, I am a bit of a freak for realism when it comes to graphic murder... I'm not sure why...
Over all! This was unique, and I would use that little demon more if you care to revise it, good job man, thanks for entering and good luck!


