"Chasing"

Your presence lingers in my blood1

Every breath I take,2

Implants your aura in me3

You are here to stay within me4

Even when you are gone5

My wounds are sodden in blood,6

Embalmed in pain,Naked7

The pain torments my soul8

Scattering my sanity9

Time can never heal10

All that you gave11

It will remain in my realms12

Your love,your presence13

Your presence lingers in my blood14

Every breath I take,15

Implants your aura in me16

You are here to stay within me17

Even when you are gone18

I walked by your side19

Kissing away every morsel of pain20

Every tear that fell from your eyes21

Shattered my strength22

I held you close to me 23

Never letting you fail24

And you have every inch of me25

Then and now26

Your face chases my dreams27

Enslaved in your love,I live28

Even then I want to see you again29

Sometime again30

Your voice resonates in my ears31

Tearing me into shreds32

Even then I want to hear you again33

All over again34

It's impossible to let myself know35

That you are not here anymore36

I walk along the boulevard of broken dreams37

Picking up the tattered pieces of our love38

I walk along the forsaken land,Orphaned39

Your presence lingers in my blood40

Every breath I take,41

Implants your aura in me42

You are here to stay within me43

Even when you are gone44

16th "March" 200945

© 2006-2009 Rinzu Susan Rajan

Author notes

INSPIRED BY THE SONG"MY IMMORTAL" BY EVANESCENCE...


i love pie

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  • easily amused
    November 4

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    It felt kind of repetetive. Like you were just saying the same thing in different words.
    Its verry good, its just not exactly what I`m looking for. Thank you for entering.


    • rinzu
      November 4
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      it's a song with a chorus thats why you felt the repetition...anyways thanks


  • x.SilverHeart.x
    November 2

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    That was... Fantastical. I loved it!! Although, you broke one rule... You didn't say I LOVE PIE! in your author notes to confirm you read the rules
    But since that was absolutely amazing, I'll let you go

    Thanks, and Good Luck in my contest!
    - Alayna.