Waking-up

I struggled to my feet and slowly looked around me in confusion. Dead bodies lay everywhere. for as far as I could see. What had happened?? I shuffled between the corpses,and errupted into empty streets, OK....Something had DEFINITELY happened.1

So...One minute your in a bank...the next your admist a nightmare. Then, it hit me. My family! My little sister, Bethany, who was 5, my mum, my dad! They couldn't....they weren't....Oh my god, what if they were! Suddenly I hear a rustle from behind me, I jumped, filled with relief that I wasn't the only one...But I was.....

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  • Stellaqt2
    November 1
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    I THINK U SHOULD WRITE LIKE A LITTLE BIT MORE!!!!!!! ANYWAY, IT WAS GOOD & WELCOME 2 THE SITE!!!!!!!! ;D

  • Chloe Stones
    November 1
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    this is ok for a start but slightly confusing and boring
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