The American Dream

"Keeh! Heeh!" Blood spurted from my throat. It was another bad day. I slowly pulled the now crimson blade from my chest. "And here I thought this was going to be easy, eh love?" I grinned with blood rimmed teeth as I continued to size her up. "To think you were a serial killer too... it must've been fated for this to happen." 1

"No, not fate. That is such a childish notion. I always knew I loved crazy men, this is just a hilarious coincidence." she let out a genuine laugh as she pulled the decorative sword from the mantle. "I always was a collector, honey." she continued, flashing me a distinctive grin.2

The next thing I knew the sword was on the floor and the knife in her wrist. I winced slightly, a conditioned response from years of pretending to be her lover. "Even an injured man can still kill a black widow" I say oozing with satisfaction before hacking some fresh blood onto her face.3

"Still the chauvinist I see." she said before kneeing me. "Sadly, men have so many weaknesses, don't they?"4

Still in blinding pain from her attack, she forced me to the floor. With the sly grin I had come to love, she grasped the sword once more with her offhand and sloppily held it to my throat. "Till death do us part." she said before quickly pressing hard and slicing every vein which mattered in one swift motion. Tears fell from her eyes and ran down her cheek as she cleaned and treated her wounds in the aftermath. "Alone again... Always... Always left alone."

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  • ModWolfVince
    November 6

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    Wow.thats really cool, i like the way you've done it short yet elegant...i think u can call that elegant anyway

  • baconlicious112
    November 5

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    oh my gosh! this was definitely NOT what i expected. but you rwriting is pretty good, not bored at all. and extremely interesting storyline..

  • Brent
    November 2

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    Your take on Kill Bill? Or Dexter? Maybe this is why you have relationship issues... No more sharp objects for you, my friend. Good luck with your battle against the pigs. Just remember the glorious taste of victory bacon.

    • iPoopAThug
      November 2
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      Actually I just hacked up some blood and it inspired me to write this which is why I started with that. Anyway I have seen Dexter and kill Bill but they were not the inspiration. I just thought I'd make an F***ed up insane love duet.

  • BrandyAdelia
    November 1

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    wow.. im loving this.... keep writing .. If this was a book on the shelfs.. I would buy it


  • E Ardania
    November 1

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    Wow... great writing. It's short yet it's been written exceptionally well for its length.

    Some small grammatical mistakes to poke at and otherwise the story, in terms of SPaGs, is perfect. Great job again!


  • Kelsey Jess
    November 1

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    This was amazing to being so short. Please I would love if it would continue. It really sets a mood and you picture what is being said. I love it. Keep writing.

    -Kelsey

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