It was just an ordinary day at the carnival. Nothing special. Except for the new Cotton Candy Stall over by the Peanuts Stall. I hear the people there put human flesh in it. Creepy. And that's what they are. Creepy. When you walk past they stare down hard at you until your sacred enough to buy some and then run away. It's criminal to make so many little children scared. But today is different I hope, because they aren't here. I bet they are chopping up the last of the dead body's to put in their big machine. Ugh! That gives me chills. I might as well enjoy my day today. Oh one problem. Here comes the girl I like. I better look good. "Oh hi Sophie! Are you enjoying your day so far?" I say pathetically. "Oh I'm alright. Have you seen those creepy people with the cotton candy stall yet? I'm hungry and I like cotton candy".
Are you here to see how crap I am?...Good...
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your not crap ..if you had just finished it , than it would have been amazing ... u kinda stopped in the middle ... u could have went on talking about the dead ppl and the cotten candy machine.. but so far its pretty good.. just dont let the narraion sound the way it did ... (kind of convo.ish) and creepy is in there alot
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