Dying breath

saddened tears
fall like rain
down down
down the drain
goes my life
with these pills
and i hear
the sound of drills
echoing threw
my pounding head
the sound that brought
my dying breath
to this day
i never gave
up the home i love
and with the beems
crushing me
to death it seems
to me that love is not over rated

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  • Lekos Memory
    November 9

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    oooo gosh now I don't know what my favorite poem of yours is now. :S

    This just flows so well. It slips off the tongue as smoothly as a poem can. Has great emotions and you know when to say the right words. Pure awesome!!

  • martial artist
    November 2

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    to Flaire rain

    good poem flaire it was written good
    good job bye your brother David Artist saying love you sister
    the flower that is bright and beautiful along with my sister smile and the glow her eyes.

    beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.


  • Wildtalon
    November 1
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    wildtalon

    nice good!